Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 10/27/13 23:44
Chapter: The Start of All Things

This is really a sweet little fic. I'm glad I stumbled upon in it the review drive. I should know better than to skip over fics featuring OCs (because I'm always complaining no one reads mine--lol), but I suppose I'm as guilty as anyone. I like Archie, and I like him as a friend for Luna. You've connected them well, even though their situations are quite different. Being misunderstood can be a powerful connection. Misfits finding other misfits is an idea that connects with readers for a reason, and you used that element well here.

I'm impressed with how gently you came at this relationship. It's not easy to climax a relationship with holding hands, but you built it up nicely and the simplicity of the gesture was both meaningful and suitable to the pair of them.

We often think of Luna as bold and kind of "out there" with her honesty and always saying a bit too much. So at first, when you said Archie was the first she'd told about her mum, I sort of wondered at it. But I think you're quite right in having her not share it with her house. She's the kind of person who chooses who she's going to trust, and we see this in that she tells it all to Harry only to explain the way she can see the thestrals, to make him realize he's not the only one. So well done there, I think you got right to the heart of her.

My only question would be regarding this: " She didn’t regret anything. Those months with Archie had helped her when she thought everything else had been lost."

With this bit at the beginning, I expected their relationship to end suddenly or something. You say it only lasted for months, and I just wondered why it didn't endure. ?? If you ever feel like expanding this, it might be a good addition.

Really enjoyed reading. Nice look into Luna's young mind. ~Lori

Reviewer: Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Date: 02/22/13 22:56
Chapter: The Start of All Things

Oh, what a beautiful little piece! This story made me smile and feel sad at the same time. I think that the ideas of childhood are very well presented. Your characterisation of Luna is quite good, actually, which was a pleasant surprise, as a lot of people make her over the top and obnoxious, but this just seemed to fit her perfectly.

I think that this story really exemplifies the idea of youth and the innocence of it. It was definitely a unique story with a lovely feel and message to it.

~Maple

Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted to try something different with this; I'm so intrigued by the theme of innocence and growing up and I really wanted to look at that here.

Reviewer: Theloonyhermione
Date: 07/01/12 18:51
Chapter: The Start of All Things

I didn't expect this to be very good by the summary, but I really liked it! Beautiful writing, and I hope you write more!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that you persevered despite the summary!! Thank you very much for your review :)

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 06/27/12 21:23
Chapter: The Start of All Things

How beautiful and poetic! And what a great friendship! I loved how Luna made friends with the boy, and how they found comfort in one another. :) Great job!!!!!! Friendship and innocence are always things to desire... :D

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

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