Reviews For Wisps of Smoke
Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 07/02/12 15:55
Chapter: Wisps of Smoke

This was so sad! But you did a great job writing it. I felt so sorry for Colin--he was so close to being helped! And I was glad that Draco finally saw the light. Great job, Nadia!

Author's Response: Thank you! Writing Colin was really hard; I know he's so young but I believe the war would have made him a lot more mature, and that's why he could say such stuff. I felt really bad writing his death in this way; this was Draco's regret - if he had come to his senses just a bit sooner he might have saved Colin.

Once again, thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it :D

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/01/12 22:08
Chapter: Wisps of Smoke

This definitely shows Draco in a new light! I loved it! I especially liked how you were able to capture the battle and the emotions. Spot on! I don't know if I could have been in Draco's place, watching Colin die... I really loved what was written on the tombstone! The fact that Colin was a warrior and a hero is so comforting, even though he was just a child! War is so ugly!!!!!!!!!! Please, people, keep the peace!
Again, lovely story! I thoroughly enjoyed it

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thank you! This story was a lot of fun to write, and it took me several edits to get all the emotions and all correct. Watching someone die in front of your eyes is a very horrifying experience, and knowing that you could have done something to stop it is just agonizing. Draco has had to face that at least twice: the first being Dumbledore and now Colin, and of course, the many others during his tenure as a Death Eater. I believe that it would have changed Draco in some ways, and in the process make him wonder if whatever he had been taught was right or not. From the chapters in HBP and DH it is obvious that Draco isn't capable of murder and that he was having second thoughts, so I just decided to write about his character for this challenge, because there's so many new situations to explore :D.

Colin's death was one that hit me rather hard, along with those of Fred, Dobby, Hedwig and Lupin and Tonks. He was so young and he didn't need to fight, but he still did for the sake of his friends and family. Colin, I feel, is a true hero. The tombstone quotes needed some research on my part, because I'm not a Christian and hence we don't really write anything on our tombstones. :) I searched the net and made a compilation of the most war-hero-sounding tombstone quotes and then took bits and pieces from them to make up the quote. It was fun. I felt that the warrior/hero quote qould be especially moving and, guess what, I made that up myself. :D I'm quite proud of it, lol.

Once again, thank you for the lovely reviews you've left! They really made my day, and I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. :D --Nadia

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/01/12 10:40
Chapter: Wisps of Smoke

Very moving.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. =)

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