Reviews For Locket
Reviewer: Ribe featherquill
Date: 03/09/13 15:58
Chapter: Locket

Better later than never. I'm reading my way through your archive now, and taking it in chronology.

Likes the internal dialogue, it's maybe a bit short, but touches the same things as the locket shows, and the snatchers comes unto the scene. I had myself imagined that different, maybe happening on a street or in a dark alley, but Ron acts very much like Ron here. I guess he will continue his internal dialog for a long time.

As another reviewer mentioned it would be very interesting to se the scene where he comes to Bill from Bills point of view.

Thanks for your stories.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I find Ron’s self doubting internal dialogue very east to write, and it was apparent to me why Ron left. Wistman’s Wood is a real West Country location, and it is fairly close to “Ottery St Catchpole”.
I’ll think again about a story from Bill’s perspective.
-N-

Reviewer: kheldar
Date: 07/19/12 18:04
Chapter: Locket

I know I'm a bit late on this, but I love it! I agree with you, this is really when Ron starts to grow up - he shows so much more maturity after he returns to Harry and Hermione (and particularly after he destroys the locket) so there was clearly some missing moment of growth for him. Thanks for not making Ron whiny, he's really a good guy with his big heart in the right place, he just was the last of the three of them to grow up!

Author's Response: It's never too late to leave a review, thanks.
Ron does, occasionally, whinge and complain. At least he's man enough to try to put things write after he's made a mistake. If something is his fault, he'll admit it, unlike a certain whining Slytherin.
He was the last to grow up, but he did a lot of growing up in DH.
-N-

Reviewer: turquoiseturkeyz
Date: 07/13/12 2:16
Chapter: Locket

Fine internal monologe, I think mabey Ron's conversation with himself might have taken more time but I would say your judgement is no doubt better than mine. Did picture a more pathetic and public tussle with the snatchers than this but it works with how Ron often insults harshly at the drop of a hat. Have you thought of continuing his expedition with out Harry and Hermione?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
Ron’s conversation was, initially, a bit longer but I cut it because I thought that the longer version was a rambling whinge, and this is more punchy. I could be wrong. I’ve thought about writing about his time at shell cottage, too. If I do, it won’t be for some time as I have way too many chaptered stories on the go. I must finish something.
-N-

Reviewer: Charles Sinclair
Date: 07/03/12 2:26
Chapter: Locket

Wow, you always do such a good job of picking up the characters ethos. I always find your stories lively and witty.

Descriptions of snatchers and internal tension there was wonderful.

Author's Response: Thank you.
I really tried to get inside Ron's head for this one, because this was, I think, the moment he started to grow up.
-N-

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 06/29/12 15:49
Chapter: Locket

Fantastic as always!

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 06/29/12 14:13
Chapter: Locket

Fine as it is.

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/29/12 14:11
Chapter: Locket

Nice work.

Author's Response: Thanks. -N-

Reviewer: golden_trio
Date: 06/29/12 2:07
Chapter: Locket

Very good! Poor Ronald. I like how this showcased his love for Hermione clearly.

Looking forward to more of any story! :)
- Katie

Author's Response: Katie, I’ll be updating H&P very soon. -N-

Reviewer: Seedy
Date: 06/28/12 23:37
Chapter: Locket

Which story will you be working on after this one?

Author's Response: Currently Hunters & Prey, then Strangers. -N-

Reviewer: sejackson91
Date: 06/28/12 22:54
Chapter: Locket

That was great! I loved Ron's internal dialogue before the snatchers showed up. I thought you did a great job playing to his insecurities and letting him really think through his confusing emotions. I think it'd be great if you did one with Bill's POV of when Ron shows up at shell cottage.

Author's Response: Thank you. I’m never sure how well this sort of internal dialogue narrative works, so I’m glad you liked it. Interesting idea, too, I’ll think about it. -N-

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 06/28/12 22:27
Chapter: Locket

No it's beautiful! I love the internal battle Ron had with himself! It was pure genius! :) great job. I don't think anything needs to change.

Author's Response: Thank you. Ron’s internal struggle was where this story started. -N-

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