Reviews For If I Leave You Now
Reviewer: iLuna17
Date: 07/11/12 22:31
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

I can't believe it's taken me this long to read this, Fenella!

This is simply amazing. It's beautiful, in the dark sort of way. I think that what you say is very true; the students spend so much of their time there, it becomes home. And the bit about Felicity ... it explained Molly's mood.

What I loved was how you made Molly much like her namesake. Most of the time people have her as more like Percy, but I liked how made her more motherly.

Just, wow. The end is heartbreaking. Great job, and if you decided to write a companion piece ... please tell me, or post in the CR. :) Brilliant job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Originally this was going to be written as an ode to Hogwarts, with Molly reflecting on how much the school had given her, however this little plot bunny hopped into my head and it stuck! I think Felicity's death fuelled Molly's dependency on the school even further, and I hope the concept of 'why would you want to leave?' came across. I wanted to make Molly a more motherly figure as I felt it worked better with her state of mind, as like she says 'it's easier to look after someone else than yourself'. Molly Weasley Snr's biggest fear was the loss of those she held closest to her heart, so Molly Jnr's protectiveness towards her cousins is understandable considering she's already lost the person she loved the most. I think I will have to write a companion piece, as much for myself as for everyone else! Thank you thank you thank you for the lovely review Ellie, and I will be sure to let you know if I do start writing more of Molls! Fenella x

Reviewer: Snowlily
Date: 07/09/12 21:50
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

I'd like to think that came from Neville, but somehow, (even after so many years have passed) I can't think that he would use so many McGonagall-like words.

Good job! It was really amazing, heartwarming, and then you get to the end, where the shock is genius. XD

Author's Response: It hadn't even occurred to me that you might interpret it as being Neville at the end, as I wrote it to be Professor Vector... though in hindsight it would have been lovely to have it as Neville! Thank you so much for the lovely review :) Fenella x

Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter
Date: 07/09/12 20:13
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

This is a wonderful piece. It was such a beautiful read... short and yet bursting with emotion. I really loved it and it also made me sad for Molly.

It is true that when you're at a boarding school/ college hostel, your friends there tend to know you better than your own family and sometimes, your friends back home. It's an amazing experience, though. So in the beginning, Molly's grief for leaving the school behind was sad and understandable and then when Fliss was mentioned... I felt terrible. I wasn't expecting it, really and it suddenly made the fic so much deeper. Unfortunately, I have experience there too-- I have lost a good friend (though not my best friend) here and I'm sure I'd feel terrible leaving this place after college because of the memories. I remember when I'd got the news that he'd died-- I was home for my holidays and I suddenly couldn't stay there anymore and I just wanted to come back to college because this is the place that I've known him alive. And then when I came here, I couldn't stand the memories and I wanted to go back home. But now, all those small memories just make me smile. When I'm at class, or at the cafeteria, or near the hostel gates... I remember some of those moments and the good times.

Basically, what I'm trying to say there is that you were very realistic with Molly's emotions. Often, when we write about stuff that we haven't personally experienced, we don't get the magnitude of some of the emotions involved in these situations and it's either overdone or half-done. Yours was just perfect and the autobiographical narrative made it better.

Without too many words, you've created an amazing, poignant picture of what's going on in Molly's mind. And I wish she'd get the job-- it was so sad that she didn't. I hope she does get it later on and that she has her closure soon enough.

All in all, this was a fantastic story. I have no nitpicks and I really loved it. Great job! Pooja :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, it's lovely to hear such positive feedback! Like Molly says, when you spend seven years of your life somewhere, it's bound to become your home, and I'm glad that you felt that was true. I'm lucky enough to have never really lost anyone close to me, so I drew upon my experiences with depression to write this. So the fact that you found the exploration of her grief to be perfect really means a lot to me, as I desperately wanted Molly's sadness to resonate. I think that Professor Vector was right to refuse Molly a job, as Molly really wasn't in the right state of mind, regardless of her age. I think the thing I most wanted to convey is that depression/grief knows no bounds, whether you're a teenager or an adult it can overwhelm you just the same. Even now I feel like I want to help Molly to find her own kind of closure... which I guess means I'll have to write a sequel! Thank you so much for the review, it means a lot that you took the time to write such a lovely and in depth review, and I'm really touched that Molly's story resonated with you. Fenella x

Reviewer: GinnyPotter95
Date: 07/09/12 15:09
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

Wow! You can really feel the emotion in this! The same thing happened to me.(the challenge thing). I had claimed something then I didn't have time to write it. I'm always curious, how did Fliss die?~Nidhi

Author's Response: Thank you! I worked really hard to try and convey just how much grief Molly was saddled with, so it's great to here that the emotion got through. It's funny, I deliberately didn't go into detail as to how Fliss died, as I felt it would be more powerful without it, and that it wasn't really about Fliss, it was about Molly. So I actually haven't decided how Fliss would have died, which probably sounds a bit weird considering it's the basis for Molly's grief! Saying that, in my head I don't think she was murdered. I think her death was accidental, which contributes to Molly's inability to come to terms with it. Perhaps a sudden illness, or some kind of freak accident. It's really down to how you interpret it and how you picture it yourself :) Thank you for the review, Fenella x

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/09/12 11:52
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

It was too well written because it made me sad. I would really like to know how molly gets on in life after Hogwarts.

Author's Response: Aww thank you! I'm sorry it made you sad :( I'm starting to think I should write a sequel... seems Molly needs some closure! Thank you for the review :) Fenella x

Reviewer: Lost_Robin
Date: 07/09/12 10:59
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

Can I hug Molly? And what subject would she be teaching? Good story. I have one more question: What House did you put Molly in? Gryffindor?

Author's Response: Aww I'm sure she'd love a hug! Hmmm... I hadn't even thought of what subject she'd teach, maybe charms? I definitely can't see her doing DADA, Potions or Divination. I hadn't really assigned her a house, but I don't envisage her in Gryffindor really, I think she's more of a Ravenclaw... though her loyalty to Fliss and her family could mean she'd be a Hufflepuff! Thank you for your review :) Fenella x

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 07/09/12 7:09
Chapter: I Never Can Say Goodbye

OHHH! Poor Molly. What a sad story. You've written Molly's grief beautifully, and all the emotions stirring inside her as she contemplates leaving.

I hope Molly manages to recover and live a little. Sorry, this really isn;t a good review, but well done on this. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much :) I really wanted to convey just how 'broken' she was, as she really couldn't find a way to move on from it. I hope she recovers too! I might have to do a sequel... Fenella x

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