Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 07/24/12 3:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great job! You captured all of the characters so perfectly! I felt so sorry for Petunia at certain parts.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 07/22/12 7:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello, this is interesting. I like the fact that you've gone into Petunia's mind and showed us her perspective of the canon events. You even managed to make me feel a little sorry for her. It must have been very hard to have a sister like Lily and know that you're never going to be 'special' in that way. I also liked the very natural relationship you had between the parents and the two sisters. The mum gently mocking Lily was a good move. I'd never thought about what would have happened when Lily told her parents what Snape had told her. That was a great scene.

I did think the use of the dialogue from the books was slightly overused. This is possibly because I'm very familiar with The Prince's Tale so didn't need the reminders. In my very humble opinion, I think you could have got away with only using the end lines of each scene, but as I said that's because I know that chapter very well and so I more or less glossed over it in your story. Someone else might need the reminders.

Such a sad ending. I really want Petunia to get over her jealousy and take care of Harry. I know she won;t but I do hope they manage to find peace with each other when it's all over. *sigh*

Well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Oh wow! Thank you for taking the time to review! :) As to the topic on too much from the books, I agree, but I felt it necessary so I didn't rush the story. I also made sure to change non-dialogue manner do it wasn't completely JKR's work, and added how I thought Petunia would have felt. I have to say, I didn't care much for one scene I wrote- the one when Lily gets her letter. I just didn't like the format or what I wrote, but I couldn't figure out another way to write it... Maybe I will change it later! Anyways, thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you were able to feel some sorrow for Petunia. It is sad that she will never be like Lily, but I think it's a good lesson to learn- that we are all different, and we each have our own strengths and weaknesses! :)

Reviewer: crbluvsravenclaw
Date: 07/22/12 7:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

YAY! It got accepted! I am so happy for you! I knew it would!(:

~crbluvsravenclaw!!!(:

Author's Response: Thanks you for your support!!:)

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