Reviews For The Loannes Potion
Reviewer: Dad
Date: 09/17/12 10:48
Chapter: Chapter One

Interesting set of new characters. I am not quite sure of the time period this is set in. Is it before or after Remus Lupin attended Hogwarts?

Author's Response: It is set after Remus Lupin and the Trio's time. I would say that the prologue was set in the 2020's and the first chaprter and the remainder of the book is set eleven years after that. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! ~crbluvsravenclaw

Reviewer: Lost_Robin
Date: 08/14/12 0:04
Chapter: Prologue

Sounds good so far, just a couple minor errors. Hope to read more soon.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviwing my story! I am still writing the first chapter, but I will try to have it up shortly! ~crbluvsravenclaw

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 07/31/12 16:29
Chapter: Prologue

Your prologue was much more captivating than your summary. I think if you want more people to read your story, you could at least say it's a quest to find the lost potion for Lycanthopy (among other things). imho.

As a nitpick, you made the same mistake that JKR made. She forgot the full moon always rises at sunset.

Although you have made Rich clearly evil, one wonders of the backstory of John. Good luck.

Author's Response: Haha, thank you so much for the review and for reading! I really appreciate it. I don't know if John or Rich will make a rreappearence as a flashnack or something, but I like your point. As for the full moon, I know when it rises, but the potion had workd so John hadn't been paying attention to the moon, but I will take another look at it. Thank you again for the great criticism! ~crbluvsravenclaw~

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