I really liked this! Your ending was great, I always find those so hard. My favorite lines,
'Come close to me, I’m in your thrall,
Give night its wings on scented air.' This just flowed very well and I liked the image it gave.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. ~Carole~
Wow! Beautiful.
Umm, er...*cough*Lions*cough*
Author's Response: That's a bad cough you have there .... Apologises profusely. It is on my list ... somewhere ... Thank you for the reviews. ~Carole~
Awwwww that's really beautiful, Carole. And what a perfect gift for Gina. The final stanza makes me think of Harry and Hermione in Godric's Hollow when Harry wishes he were sleeping under the cold ground in his parents arms. What gorgeous imagery, and what a sadly sweet tone. Gah.
Author's Response: Thank youuu. I'm glad you picked up on the final line. I'd love to be able to say that was exactly what I had in mind, but really it was more the irony that they wouldn't have the years together and fall asleep forever in each others' arms when they're old and grey, :( . They make me all saaaaaaad. Anyway, thank you for reviewing - much appreciated. ~Croll~
I loved it! Nice job! It sounded so beautiful!
~crbluvsravenclaw!!!(:
Author's Response: Thank you! ~Carole~
One word came to my mind when I finished reading this: Beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. ~Carole~
Wow, he is suddenly very romantic. *chuckles* But it was exquisite. I especially liked how he described her hair as burnished copper! Beautiful! :)
Author's Response: I think he could be romantic when not with his friends. Although I'm not sure he's saying this as much as thinking it. Thank you. ~Carole~
SQUEEEEEEEEEEE!!
ZOMG ! It's gorgeous!! I love it!! It's everything I love about poetry AND IT RHYMES! LOL!
Seriously - it's beautiful, thank you. The words are lush. The rhythm is perfect. It's so, so James and Lily - romantic and sad, just perfect.
I LOVE IT!!
THANK YOUUUUUUUUUU!!!
*squish*
~Gina :) :) :) :)
Author's Response: It DID rhyme - quite deliberately because I know that's what you prefer, :) . Anyway, glad you enjoyed it. I thought perhaps that James might not be able to speak these sentiments, but he would no doubt think them, so that's what I went with. Hope you had a fabulous birthday ~Carole~
