Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/20/14 15:29
Chapter: Dear Frank

That was a funny ending to Alice's letter. It was interesting when you said that Caradoc loved Lily but loved her like something he had possessed for a long time and was just used to her. Sometimes I think we mistake that sort of love for the real thing.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/19/14 17:22
Chapter: A Temper Too Little Yielding

I'm starting to wonder how James and Lily ever got together. And it all happens in the next two years. Even though these witches and wizards can do magic, their personal issues seem to be the same as any other teenager. It puts them in a new light.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/18/14 17:19
Chapter: The Apology

I'm glad things are all patched up and there are four Mauraders again. The lines they used to get back together were hilarious. I'll have to remember that if I'm trying to make up to someone. Just ask a weird question--then discuss.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/16/14 17:45
Chapter: Fly, Ape, Dog

I wonder where Sirius will sleep all year--although I think they'll patch things up sometime during the year. It's hard to feud with your friends. Everything hurts. Enjoyed this chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/15/14 18:35
Chapter: On Wine

That was an especially fun chapter. I chuckled out loud when reading about Caradoc and his wand or the pointy thing sticking out of his pants:D That was just hysterical. To top it off he was surrounded by Muggle women. I kind of liked the ending part too when what was coming out of their mouths did not match what was in their heads. You described Alice as boring. I could see that. I've always thought of her as kind of boring.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/15/14 14:18
Chapter: Subversion, Extortion, and a Very Particular Scarf

I agree with everyone but James. The feud has gone on long enough and is getting ridiculous. Love and hate are closely related. I don't think James would spend this much time over the Remus incident if he didn't have such strong feelings toward Sirius, and I don't think it's all hate. Are you portraying Sirius as gay? But why would he bring a guy home and then think about girls.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/14/14 15:37
Chapter: The Athleticism of Football and the Alcohol Content of Sangria

I'm wondering what will happen to the two girls after they went home with two strangers in another country who speak another language. Sounds a bit risky to me. Of course, that was in a different time when you could trust people more. I found myself envious of people who can travel around Europe. Embarrassingly, I've only been to Canada. I know this is early in the story but I really like your chapter titles. They're very creative. Interesting that you have Peter siding with whatever side had the most power. That causes him trouble later.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comment! I think of wizards + witches as a little bit more able to defend themselves than Muggles, and I trust those characters' instincts, so hopefully they're all right. Europe seems to be super easy to just wander around, no? I'm glad you like the chapter titles! Hopefully they continue to satisfy <3

Reviewer: RitaSkeeterInvestigates
Date: 09/17/14 0:25
Chapter: Fly, Ape, Dog

I love the tone of your writing. I think it is perfect given the era and what we all know happens to the Mauraders. Really excellent!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comments! I hope you're enjoying this fic + will continue to do so :)

Reviewer: RitaSkeeterInvestigates
Date: 09/14/14 22:11
Chapter: Subversion, Extortion, and a Very Particular Scarf

Sorry, got cutoff part way through there. That's what I get for trying to write a review on an iPhone. Anyway, loved the emotional importance you've placed an the friendship between the Mauraders. Great!

Reviewer: RitaSkeeterInvestigates
Date: 09/14/14 22:09
Chapter: Subversion, Extortion, and a Very Particular Scarf

Sorry, got cutoff part way through there. That's what I get for trying to write a review on an iPhone. Anyway, loved the emotional importance you've placed an the friendship between the Mauraders. Great!

Reviewer: RitaSkeeterInvestigates
Date: 09/14/14 22:07
Chapter: Subversion, Extortion, and a Very Particular Scarf

Sorry, got cutoff part way through there. That's what I get for trying to write a review on an iPhone. Anyway, loved the emotional importance you've placed an the friendship between the Mauraders. Great!

Reviewer: RitaSkeeterInvestigates
Date: 09/14/14 22:04
Chapter: Subversion, Extortion, and a Very Particular Scarf

I adore this fic! The Mauraders are by far the most interesting generation for me in the HP universe, and the way you've captured their dynamic is spellbinding (no pun intended). This has a very real tone to it that I really enjoy. I'm so glad each of the chapters are as l

Reviewer: baseballblondie
Date: 09/02/14 13:37
Chapter: The First Enemy

I'd read them. :)

Author's Response: Good to know!

Reviewer: bookreader22
Date: 08/29/14 23:52
Chapter: The First Enemy

Hi there! I've really enjoyed reading this story, and I would actually love to read codas about all of the main characters. Aside from the obvious (Lily, James, Sirius, Remus), Mary and Mead's stories would be good, as well as maybe Alexandria's and the McKinnons'? I think I would also be interested in your take on how/why Peter became a spy for Voldemort. I hope to see another update soon!

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear you'd be interested! Like I said, I've started a few of the codas and I'm actually sort of liking them more than the main fic so far. I'll look into MNFF's formatting for series and figure that whole situation out sometime soon. Thanks for your comment!

Reviewer: baseballblondie
Date: 08/12/14 13:38
Chapter: Things Said Out Loud (Part Two)

Oh yes. Please post codas etc here!

Author's Response: Will do! Glad you'd be interested.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/20/14 15:01
Chapter: On Muggle Clothing and a Friendly Barmaid

That was a long complicated chapter. Your characters sound like regular teenagers hanging out for the summer. It's kind of hard to think of Lily smoking but why shouldn't she? We know some of them had to smoke, right? I think you've done a very good job of setting everything up.

Author's Response: Thanks for both your reviews! Yes my chapters are long, and yes my Lily smokes—she can't have been perfect, right?

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/19/14 23:25
Chapter: Prologue

Wow--most of your chapters are around 8000 words. I wish I could write that many words in a chapter. I've been planning on reading this story for a while. Your Prologue is intriguing. Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: HiccuppingToaster
Date: 05/12/14 20:04
Chapter: A Study in Avoidance

Hooray! Thank you for the update!

Author's Response: Another to come soon!

Reviewer: baseballblondie
Date: 04/18/14 16:29
Chapter: Valentine's Day and the Calm Before the Storm

I recently found this story. It's great! Please don't stop updating here on MNFF! I can never remember my username/password on fanfiction.net.

I have found this one to be very realistic. I love how you're showing the characters to be deep.

Author's Response: I'll keep updating here, but will no longer be waiting for chapters to be approved here to post them on other sites. Thank you for reading! I'm glad you like it.

Reviewer: silverlining95
Date: 04/14/14 17:02
Chapter: Valentine's Day and the Calm Before the Storm

Please don't stop updating this story on MNFF, truth be told it's one of the few reasons I continue to regularly visit the site. I adore the alternative, more human, story you've created as to how James and Lily came together as a couple and look forward to future chapters.

You've created characters who are in no way perfect and the manner by which you convey their inner complexities is incredibly effective.

Author's Response: I'll keep updating here, but will no longer be waiting for chapters to be approved here to post them on other sites. Thank you for reading! I'm glad you like it <3

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