Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/11/14 15:09
Chapter: Determined Never To Be Idle

Alice would've had me scared. That sounded like an overdose/poisoning or something like that. I hate it when authors start hinting at the end of their stories. My only consolation is that I have your first story to read--all thirty-some chapters of it.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/06/14 16:36
Chapter: James Potter's Birthday Party

Did Eddie die yet? Or is he badly injured? This was an exciting and good chapter. The war is hitting awful close to Hogwarts when even students are attacked. Your writing was so effective that I felt slightly sick just reading the end of this chapter. Good job.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/05/14 17:23
Chapter: A Study in Avoidance

I'm glad to read that you will continue posting the rest of this story on this site. It's funny that those who sit back and watch seem to know what's going on, or maybe I should say it's funny what some people notice. I love reading this story even though I know what will happen to some of these people in a very short time. I think it's fortunate that we can't see our futures and it's fortunate that none of these people saw their futures either.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/05/14 14:39
Chapter: Valentine's Day and the Calm Before the Storm

I'm reading your story here. So, are you on I'd hate to lose track of your story because it's on some obscure site. I read on ff too. The thought of not being able to finish this story is very upsetting. I'm wondering how Alice and Frank get back together. Some things have to happen very fast in a short period of time. I do understand how a pregnancy can make marriage more immediate.:D

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/04/14 18:02
Chapter: Small Recoveries

I wonder if Sirius had Lily run into James and Jennifer on purpose. Come to think of it he probably did since he wants them together so badly. I thought if was funny when Lily wanted Sirius to come to bed with her.
Good thing Sirius was a gentleman for once. I still say Alice seems boring. Sure she's smart and studies a lot but there's more to life than that, especially since we know she's going to die before too long.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 11/04/14 15:55
Chapter: The Repeated Image of the Lover Destroyed

I used to smoke but I quit almost 6 years ago. It's funny that I feel like smoking when they show anti-smoking ads on television. They remind me of smoking. Otherwise I don't care. KIt seems like Lily and James had things to say to each other but neither one of them was willing to listen.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/31/14 18:23
Chapter: Decisions Over Brunch and Their Aftermaths

I guess Wizards shouldn't smoke any more than Muggles do. I wonder how James will feel about this. Will it push him closer to Lily? At some point they're going to have to admit that they love each other. What I like about your writing is that you go forward and tell how these various people die and then you come back to the present.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your comments—I love reading your thoughts after every chapter. Hopefully most of your questions will be answered as you continue to read!

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/31/14 14:32
Chapter: Home, Highbury, and the Holidays

I liked the part when Petunia's in-laws kept commenting on James' hair and how messy it looked:D I feel really bad for Remus being interrupted during his time with Emma. I think that sometimes we remember our first loves all too well. I know I do and I wish I didn't.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/29/14 17:52
Chapter: The Last Week of Term

I guess I like romance and reading about relationships so it doesn't bother me if there's not a lot of action. I'm surprised that James and Lily have been able to keep their shagging a secret. It's hard knowing that a lot of these people are going to be dead in a very few years. I love that James has set up a running and yoga schedule for his team over the holidays.

Reviewer: kkilcoyne5555
Date: 10/29/14 1:10
Chapter: Drinks With Friends

I just finished reading all of these chapters in three days. I couldn't put it down! Honestly, great writing :)

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/28/14 16:49
Chapter: Mistakes

I wonder if Peter turned out the way he did because he was bullied by his three friends or was he mentally ill to begin with. I suppose his perceived lack of power was at least partially to blame. And I wonder why the other three even included him as a friend. Did they need someone to bully to reinforce their own power.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/24/14 17:49
Chapter: The Replacement, Part Two: The Ugly Side of James Potter

I hope you tell us what went wrong in their last transformation. The thing with transfiguring each other from human to animal and back is you have to trust the other person so much. That would probably stop me from doing that sort of thing:D

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/24/14 16:08
Chapter: The Replacement, Part One: Hangovers

I guess I always thought that James and Lily fell passionately in love all of a sudden over their intense feelings against the war and Voldemort. So this is a little different view that you're presenting. Right now they sound like a couple of horny teenagers and that's not too unusual for that age group. I thought that was pretty slick how Peter got in to spy on the Slytherins. He was good for something at some point.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/23/14 17:35
Chapter: Halloween and the Time Lily Evans Stopped Sleeping

I'm glad Lily and Caradoc broke up. I hope it's for good. It still hurts though even if they both agreed to the break up. Are we supposed to know who Mary loved that died and made her leave Britain? I felt sorry for Peter. Not only was he feeling very sick but didn't James take off with the girl Peter had been with all evening? Maybe Peter won't remember:D

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/23/14 13:36
Chapter: Flying

The thought of the Quidditch team doing yoga was hysterical. I think how Lily and James were slowly becoming friends was very believable.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/20/14 15:29
Chapter: Dear Frank

That was a funny ending to Alice's letter. It was interesting when you said that Caradoc loved Lily but loved her like something he had possessed for a long time and was just used to her. Sometimes I think we mistake that sort of love for the real thing.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/19/14 17:22
Chapter: A Temper Too Little Yielding

I'm starting to wonder how James and Lily ever got together. And it all happens in the next two years. Even though these witches and wizards can do magic, their personal issues seem to be the same as any other teenager. It puts them in a new light.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/18/14 17:19
Chapter: The Apology

I'm glad things are all patched up and there are four Mauraders again. The lines they used to get back together were hilarious. I'll have to remember that if I'm trying to make up to someone. Just ask a weird question--then discuss.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/16/14 17:45
Chapter: Fly, Ape, Dog

I wonder where Sirius will sleep all year--although I think they'll patch things up sometime during the year. It's hard to feud with your friends. Everything hurts. Enjoyed this chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/15/14 18:35
Chapter: On Wine

That was an especially fun chapter. I chuckled out loud when reading about Caradoc and his wand or the pointy thing sticking out of his pants:D That was just hysterical. To top it off he was surrounded by Muggle women. I kind of liked the ending part too when what was coming out of their mouths did not match what was in their heads. You described Alice as boring. I could see that. I've always thought of her as kind of boring.

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