This was a really sweet story, and you got the tone of it so well. Great dialogue between James and Lily too - nice mixture between banter and showing their love. You really showed their characterisations through it perfectly.
Even though you mention the war briefly, this mostly feels quite light, which I really liked because they are all still at Hogwarts and in this moment they're all feeling pretty... happy.
I loved the juxtaposition of the two scenes, as you had Lily describing what she thought was happening, and then immediately showed it happening afterwards. Of course she would have it figured out and James would be totally clueless, I loved the last line - a perfect way to finish the fic.
I really liked the light quality to this fic I mentioned before, these are some of my favourite characters and it is nice to think they had fun/good times before they had to go through so much other stuff. (Does that make sense?)
Anyway, this was a lovely fic to brighten up my day :).
That.....WAS EPIC!!! I THINK I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU :D
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I'm flattered :D I don't think I've ever had such an enthusiastic response to a story before, so it means a lot. Thanks again!
Sirius’s use of the word “screw” had made it doubly hard for him to concentrate.
Hahahahahahhah - sorry giggling too much. Sophie, my love, I read this ages ago and for some reason forgot to review. This is so sweet. I love the lighthearted feel to the whole story and the banter between the respective couples. I also adore the fact that Lily has sussed the whole thing out whereas James is clueless - heh heh - TYPICAL!!!
Beautifully written and a lot of fun - Well done ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Carole, and sorry for the delayed response. I'm glad you had fun reading it, because I really loved writing it too. The line you quoted was one of my favourites -- I suppose it's immature enough to have come from a teenage boy, hah. James might know Remus and Sirius better than Lily does, but I figure she might have clearer vision because of it. Thanks again :)
SOPHIEEEEEEEEEE! I have no excuses. None at all. Well, except for how bloody busy I’ve been lately which has meant I haven’t got round to reviewing your lovely, lovely pile of loveliness until now D: I am sooo sorry. But here I am, only, um, three weeks late! Just so you know, this will be an awful, nowhere-near-SPEW-worthy, stream-of-consciousness review.
I love the set up of this story! I think it’s so light-hearted and written in such a... what’s the word... bouncy way, almost, and I love how fun the banter is between James and Lily. That kind of Marauder dialogue never ever gets old, at least not for me. And I giggled so much about how they were speculating over Remus and Sirius’s relationship (I so agree with Lily -- they are hot together) and the tickling, hehehehehe.
And then I get to see my gorgeous boys together! :D I love how you managed to suggest so much but never make it explicit, because while I am partial to smut, I also think that the people who can make something that’s 3rd-5th sexy still have some serious (sorry, lol) talent. So much of what happens between Remus and Sirius is implied, and I definitely think the less is more approach worked perfectly here. I also love how you switched scenes quite a few times in the story and yet how they were always connected in some way. Beautifully done, my dear. :)
“You’re so adorable when you’re helpless on the floor,” he explained.
Aaaaaahhhhh! Such a James line! :D :D :D Oh they are so lovely and witty, the pair of them. Sophie, you write James so well. I think you deserve to have him in his Hogwarts years at least just for that line. And I giggled at this:
James’s hands were too busy elsewhere to worry about little things like doors.
and then that last line was priceless, when, hahahahahahahaa, they found Remus and Sirius together, lolol:
“Sorry to interrupt, guys,” she called happily.
I love how you made Lily so carefree in this. Seriously (sorry, ha, I can’t help it), I think you do so well in veering completely away from the clichés and really making Lily your own as a character.
Well, I think that’s it! I am soooo sorry for taking an age to review this, but school and RL in general have been byotches. Sorry about that. This story is fabulous. So are you. I heart you lots, and I hope you write more of both pairings in the future, because I think you did a wonderful job of it. :D
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you for such a lovely review, Soraya. You don't have to make excuses for anything. I've been awful at replying to you!
Anyway, I had a lot of fun writing this, and, well you know you say it was bouncy? I think I was bouncing a little bit as I wrote. These characters just fill me with squee. I'm glad I managed to convince you of Sirius & Remus's hotness together -- they're certainly that way in my head :p I'm no good at writing explicit smut, but I do like making implications, haha.
The scene switches... Well, I think they pretty much happened when I was struggling to figure out what should come next with one pairing. It wasn't planned; the connections just sort of reflect my thought process at the time. I'm so glad you thought it worked. And my Lily and James too. I'm so bad at thinking things through as I write, so it's fabulous to hear that you liked them. I can't believe you just offered to give me James, though! Natalie won't be pleased :p
That's all I can think of to say right now, except thank you, thank you, thank you again. You don't need to apologise for anything because this review makes me soooo happy! I heart you lots too <3
That was adorable! Very well done, Sophie. I liked the juxtaposition of both scenes going on at the same time and then crashing together so unexpectedly. I can only imagine James's reaction in this setup! Loved it! And Lily's parting remark was priceless. Very well done - I really enjoyed it! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina :D See now, you seem to like my plot, but actually, next to no planning went into it, haha. It pretty much just happened that way as I wrote. I'm not sure if that's a good thing or not... Anyway, I'm glad it amused you. I had a lot of fun writing it. And yeah, I'm kinda tempted to write whatever would happen next. Hmmm... Thanks again!