Reviews For Nervous
Reviewer: hanname
Date: 01/06/13 14:49
Chapter: flufftasm

Nice. Graphic and yet definitely does not induce a gagging reflex. That shows talent.

Author's Response: Pfft, hah. I was skirting the line on this one - it definitely was much more graphic in its earliest rendition. I didn't think it added to anything, but the final bit was important enough to stay. It's child's play compared to some of the headier stuff I blush at. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: QwingAlthur
Date: 01/03/13 22:41
Chapter: flufftasm

I enjoyed Your story; Ron and hermione were true to their characters. A lot of fanfics make them too perfect. This was mOre real good job! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I try, but I still haven't quite hit the spot. Or, at least, the perfectionist in me hasn't yet :)

Reviewer: Pumpkinbrown
Date: 10/29/12 17:03
Chapter: flufftasm

Great story. Nice to have a more adult narrative of Ron and Hermione's 'first time'. Keep writing, I look forward to your next story.

Author's Response: hanks so much for the review! I'd hesitate to call any of my stories remotely 'adult,' though 'adolescent' would be more accurate. But, hey, that's lookin' the compliment horse in the mouth right?

Reviewer: sdg2932
Date: 10/28/12 21:11
Chapter: flufftasm

Throughly enjoyed this story

Author's Response: I'm glad you did, thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: goldensnidget92
Date: 10/26/12 12:28
Chapter: flufftasm

I really liked your writing style in this - you had an original way of putting things which kept the story very fresh. Ron and Hermione's 'first time' is quite a well-covered topic, and I think in part the writing managed to give it a more realistic spin: the swearing and colloquialisms do so much more for this than any amount of beautiful, flowery language.

I also liked that you emphasised the awkwardness and the fact that it didn't go perfectly. Not only was this in character, but it also showed more originality. There are so many fics that say how wonderful Romione's first time is that it's just plain boring now. To see it in a different light showed both your skill as a writer and your grasp of the characters. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Y'ever see the 'strutting Leo' meme from Inception (or something like that)? Well I just literally did that through my whole house and my housemate looked at me like I was going insane.

Normally I'm one to rely on flowery language, but I felt that didn't really characterize these two - in this situation - that well. So, naturally, I went in thinking 'what would I be thinking?' and, honestly, that's where a lot of the ideas for how Ron handled this came from. Whether that's a good technique or not, I dunno. First times aren't perfect, well rarely at least, and if there's any relationship where first impressions aren't the best impressions it's R/Hr.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 10/26/12 11:15
Chapter: flufftasm

I can see that going on. Very real.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

You must login (register) to review.
Information
Find out everything you need to know about the site right here.


We have stories and authors in this archive.

:

RSS
Choose Theme:
SOCIAL MEDIA
     
MOST RECENT
Severus's Prince by DestinyMoonStar Professors
What does Severus Snape do when a one night stand turns into a baby boy? ...
The Youngest Death Eaters: Year III by DestinyMoonStar 6th-7th Years
Year 3 A year of hard choices and tough talks: Destiny learns about...
Allegiance by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 6th-7th Years
During his final year at Hogwarts, Draco Malfoy had few illusions about where...
FEATURED
The Pretender by littlebird Professors
She feels the familiar pang of disappointment that they've never been better...
A Light in the Gap by WeasleyMom 3rd-5th Years
When Harry woke that first morning in Grimmauld Place, he wondered if Ron and...
Tapestry by Equinox Chick 1st-2nd Years
As Walburga Black stitches, Sirius rebels. Two poems written about the infamous...
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2 by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 1st-2nd Years
The Weird Sisters are back for an encore. Ten more tracks from your MNFF authors.
CATEGORIES