Reviews For The Paths Continue
Reviewer: HGHR_fan
Date: 04/19/14 16:07
Chapter: Chapter 1- Unlikely Couples

This story was hard for me to read as Ron and Hermione and Harry and Ginny are my favorite couples in the world. However, I like that in the end they were all able to be friends.
I enjoyed how you turned your OCs into a crucial members of the story. They had ties to all my favorite characters and made the story so enriched.
I couldn't stop reading the story which to me shows there is show much potential to continue it. It is not often that I have to find out what happened next.
I enjoyed that it had fluff, angst and everything in between. I enjoyed the revolving POV and enjoyed how Draco tied everything together.
I look forward to reading it again.

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 03/14/14 18:14
Chapter: Chapter 14-Revelation

Fantastic!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 03/14/14 11:27
Chapter: Chapter 14-Revelation

Turned out nice for the most of them. Draco got something to think about.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 02/02/14 13:41
Chapter: Chapter 12-Nightmares

This path is certainly a long and winding road.

Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 02/01/14 16:43
Chapter: Chapter 12-Nightmares

Hi, Ken. This is Vicki of Slytherin House, making some general comments on your almost-completed story, rather than waiting for the last few chapters to be posted.

What stands out to me most prominently is your narrative structure, a story that proceeds at a rapid pace, covering many years in a relatively short span of words. The tale is crammed full of events, so that the story line proceeds briskly, never bogging down. It consists almost entirely of what the characters say and do, with little description or reflection of people’s inner thoughts, and the conversations are not extended. You are giving us the bare bones, or as Sgt. Joe Friday (you know who he was) would say, “Just the facts, Ma’am.” This is by no means meant as a criticism; it is just one style of telling a story. If each of the scenes in your story were expanded to its fullest, your word-count would rival that of War and Peace.

I notice that you have many story lines going simultaneously, such as Minnie/Linus, Rose/Scorpius, Harry/Hermione, Luna/Ginny, and so on, but it works because the characters are all interrelated and constantly communicating with one another. So in the end it seems like all one story, and every event depicted impels the plot forward. That is good.

Some specific thoughts:

Linus and Minnie are refreshingly sensible for teenagers/twenty-somethings, and they make generally good decisions and treat each other reasonably. I enjoy reading, at least occasionally, about characters who can learn from the mistakes of others and do not have to learn everything the hard way.

I liked your treatment of post-Hogwarts higher education for young witches and wizards. My impression is that traditionally wizards and witches had little contact or interaction with Muggles, but it is reasonable to assume that that barrier is slowly breaking down. JK Rowling has stated that there were no wizarding universities, although some some authors have posited that there were, so it is logical to propose the existence of a transitional program for Hogwarts graduates who wish to take advantage of what Muggle universities have to offer. I think that traditionally the wizarding community relied on on-the-job training, apprenticeships, or the school of hard knocks, such as in the case of Fred and George, who opened their joke shop without the benefit of any formal business training. So I very much enjoyed your description of Millie’s on-the-job training for an Advocate career. It was well spelled out and gave me a much better idea of how the system worked.

You have depicted Luna as a very strong character, running a successful publishing business after her father’s death and generally being a rock of support for the people around her. I find it very plausible that she would develop in this way during her mature years.

I am glad that you have introduced Post Traumatic Stress Syndrome as an explanation for Ginny’s dysfunctional behavior. It makes a lot of sense that she and many other survivors of the second wizarding war and the Battle of Hogwarts would be thus afflicted. In a much less drastic way, I used the same idea in my story The Baby In The Closet to discuss the concept that early traumatic experiences produce effects that echo down the years in ways that the victim does not recognize or understand. Life in general is not easy, marriages break up with dismal regularity, and Linus and Minnie probably don’t appreciate how lucky they are.

I am looking forward to your final chapters of this story, and I would encourage you to consider something a little different for your next story, a more detailed treatment of a smaller scope of narrative, simply because it is good to try to stretch ourselves by attempting something new. I did that when I tried to write romance in Beloved Son and adventure in The Hogwarts Storm, and was pleasantly surprised by the results. Write on!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 10/28/13 8:11
Chapter: Chapter 11-The Damaged Witch

Some light on the horizon then.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/26/13 8:56
Chapter: Chapter 9-Two Weddings

Things seem to be going well for everybody. I hope this is not the lull before the storm.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/01/13 17:02
Chapter: Chapter 8-An Unikely Meeting

Well different, but I feel slightly sad about the failed relationships.

Author's Response: Just because they are wizards doesn't mean they aren't human. Bad things happen to nice people.

Reviewer: HermionesLittleSister
Date: 02/09/13 21:58
Chapter: Chapter 6-Changes

How could you do this!?!?!?
First Harry and Ginny and now this!!
How could you be so mean! *sobs*
-Livie

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 01/23/13 15:48
Chapter: Chapter 5-Unexpected Events

It is your story, but for me the Harry/Ginny situation destroys all creditability.

Author's Response: If you follow me to the end you'll find out why.

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 12/05/12 21:06
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Secrets

Not an easy story to read, with spurts of cohesive dialogue interrupted by elementary-sounding descriptions.

Be careful to keep in first-person as much as possible. Descriptions should flow without too many prepositional phrases. Write in active fashion, not passive.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 11/17/12 11:12
Chapter: Chapter 1- Unlikely Couples

Good characters, but not a lot of plot.

Reviewer: macheel
Date: 11/16/12 8:48
Chapter: Chapter 1- Unlikely Couples

Great, you really pulled me in with your original charactors.

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