Reviews For Behind My Smile
Reviewer: TeamCedric
Date: 03/03/13 20:27
Chapter: Behind My Smile

I liked the focus on Fleur as a person, not quite as arrogant as she's painted. I like that she becomes aware of the shortcomings of her attitude towards boys. I like that she doesn't get to have Cedric. But mostly I liked your style of writing. I like that you didn't go overboard with Fleur's accent; just enough to remind us what she sounds like. I like that when she's confused about her feelings she wishes she was home with her family. I like 'his words fluttered away from her like startled moths.' I like the snake of jealousy that tightens its hold on her heart. So basically I liked it!

Author's Response: Aw thank you! I'm glad you liked it - you picked up on so many small things, so thank you for paying suck close attention and giving great feedback :)

Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 01/01/13 18:49
Chapter: Behind My Smile

A fun story, and nicely written. We don't see much about Fleur or any of the Beauxbatons students.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 12/28/12 10:06
Chapter: Behind My Smile

Different.

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