Hi there!
Yay, you're dancing in the Cotillion, and with a couple you know! Good start. It's nice to think someone might have actually cared about Mundungus, especially after he jumped ship like that in book seven. Mrs. Figg seems like a really good choice. I haven't read your other two stories, so I don't know if there is more to their relationship already, but I can sense from this that there is and hope we get a bit of background here and there to just fill it in.

Figgy is strong and determined, isn't she? Good job with that, since that's how we meet her in OotP. Loved her name-calling, that was brilliantly creative. I wonder what readers will think about her pulling off an Apparition like that? I think it could work because she's desperate and has Fletcher's wand. I do hope they don't end up Splinched, though.

I did notice two things: you misspelled Hogsmeade as 'Hogsmead' twice and the Hog's Head as 'Hogshead.' Also, there were a few sentences that seemed a bit on the longish side, mostly that fourth paragraph, which I had to read a few times to put together. But that's just my preference for shorter, more deliberate phrasing as opposed to a stream-of-consciousness sort of flow, so you can take that comment with a grain of salt, so to speak. The latter does fit Figgy's point of view, to be sure. I just wouldn't go overboard.

Good luck as you continue! Maybe you can go back to Prefects Imperfect when you're done. ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, I love Mrs. Figg, and I have been shipping her and Dung for a long time now... There is a bit more of a relationship - not a ship, exactly, but a grudging half-friendship or something in the earlier stories, and yes, there will be background, dropped in bit by bit in what I hope is a natural way, rather than the "Gotta get his in here even though it doesn't fit" way they do it in really cheap Romance Novels... I see Arabella as very resourceful. About the Apparition - Dung is still holding the wand when she does it - and maybe he is willing it along with her, or maybe she is directing his magic - I think it's a bit like when a mother pulls the door off a burning car to get her kid out - in some desperate situations, you just do things that are normally impossible. Thanks for the spelling corrections - I had a deadline for posting this chapter, and my betas couldn't get it back to me in time, so I will go back and edit it. Spelling has never been my strong suit, I'm afraid... I do go for longer sentences, and sometimes i do get myself caught up in a mess with them not flowing. It's odd, because I am actually a very direct person, but you'd never know it from my sentence structure alone... Thanks, and hmm... I actually have more chapters of PI that haven't been finished off that I can go back and polish, but I also have another pairing for the Cotillion... There are those two other Figg and Fletcher stories.. (winks audaciously and hopes to inspire a rush to read... ;-) )

Different. I liked it.

Author's Response: Than ks for reading and reviewing! This story follows two others which also feature this pairing. I figure that there are reasons Dung is the way he is, and that there is more to Arabella Figg than the Wizarding World might imagine. I'm glad you liked it, and hope you continue to read as the story progresses.