Reviews For Forgetting to Fly
Reviewer: SilverDoe_IsoBell
Date: 08/30/13 5:29
Chapter: (running through my body)

Very good - would love to see some more fics set at this time, especially with Lisa and Ernie.

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 02/15/13 20:35
Chapter: (running through my body)

Ooooh, interesting story, Lily! :)

I love pretty much any trio era minor character pairing; this was an excellent example of one, and I liked the dialogue between Ernie and Lisa. I thought there was quite a bit of physicality in their relationship which really helped in developing it and making them have good chemistry, and I liked how sparingly you used the lyrics, too.

the one thing I will say is that I do think it's a bit short. For me, Ithink you could have expanded things, extended the timeline, because I feel the characters didn't quite get the closure they needed. I also think it would be good to develop their relationship furhter. Just a thought -- I've noticed this in a couple of stories, not just this one, so I thought I would point it out. :)

Anyway, I did enjoy this. Good lukc with teh cotillion and sorry for typos -- this is why I shouldn't review late at night :3

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 02/01/13 12:02
Chapter: (running through my body)

Hi there, I love the relationship in this. It's very touching and you managed to develop both characters in a credible way. Ernie is strong, Lisa is a little in awe of him, but they fit rather sweetly together.

The theme of bravery plays very well all the way through the story, and I love that Lisa's quiet bravery and the fact that she doesn't stand out but is still there is recognised as courageous.

You have muddled up your timeline, though. When Harry turns up it's the first of May, so Lisa avoiding Ernie for a few days after she comforts him doesn't really make much sense because there's no mention of the battle. You also say they've been in hiding in the Room of Requirement for several months when in fact Neville was the first there and he'd only been there for around two weeks when the trio get there. (Sorry, I taught a Missing Moments class a few terms ago and the RoR timeline is firmly embedded in my sad head)

I thought the lyrics incorportaed very well into the feel of the story. I'm not usually a big fan of song fics, but they suited the mood of the fic, and added to it, too.

Carole

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