Hi, Linda. This is Vicki of Slytherin House. I wasn’t sure at first that I was going to like this story, fearing that it might be trite, but as it went along I liked it better and better. I think that we readers eventually develop a lot of sympathy for Snape and view his life as a sort of tragedy, and we want Snape to have some happiness in his life, so there are all sorts of stories of Snape in relationships with people who love him and also stories in which Snape has a child.
The white-robed Snape we see in this fic is just a dream, a product of Winifred’s thoughts, so we do not have to be overly concerned with whether or not he is “in character”; he is what Winifred wants him to be. So perhaps what he is telling her is really stuff she already knows, but her mind puts the words into Severus’s mouth, which makes the ideas more acceptable to her.
I loved the way that Winifred described Sophie to Snape in the dream, a combination of an accurate description of a lovely child and the revealing of a mother’s affection and pride. Hopefully all we mothers feel that way about our children! And in the final section of your story you show us that that pride is not misplaced; Sophie is both perceptive and kind.
Both sections of the story that flank the dream section were very pleasant to read because they were gentle and low-key, but genuine. No over-the-top drama or histrionics, just the calm lives of mature people who try to stay on an even keel, even through stormy weather. Her children aren’t bratty, her husband isn’t jealous, no one shouts or accuses…
I like your writing style too; it’s simple and straightforward, not striving to be stylish or affected. A simple, basic story about the eternal tragedy of death, loss, and endurance calls for an unembellished style. Adding in more details would not have contributed anything to the impact of the story.
Thank you for writing this lovely little story. I like to imagine the conversation between Winifred and Sophie that occurs right after the final line.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely detailed review. I'm glad to know that your perceptions of the story were pretty much the same as what I intended.
Well, I'm sitting here with tears in my eyes. Thank you for that story. I loved it even though it was sad.
Author's Response: Thank you. It's very gratifying to know it made you cry. I got teary when I was writing it, too.