This story was lovely, it truly was. I have to be honest, at first I was a bit thrown off because I'm not a huge fan of second person narration, but after a while you get used to it. I thought that giving the perspective of both Remus and James was both original and entertaining. Oh, and the snogging scenes made my toes curl so congratulations. Great story!
Very sweet
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you read this and really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
Thank Merlin Pete is so normal sometimes.
and in that moment James proves himself as perceptive as Harry and Ron combined taking four years to notice Hermione was a girl! hahahahaha
Lovely story, Gina. I'm not a huge J/R shipper mainly because I love J/L so much, but this is incredibly plausible, and you made it work because of great characterisation and a decent plot.
Lily was great. I loved that she was instrumental in getting not only James and Remus talking, but making James realise that he had to talk to Sirius and patch things up.
Great idea, and well executed. :D ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you for reading this! I was so consumed with it and thought it turned out rather well that I appreciate you reading it (esp. since I know you are not like me and Soraya and mix up Marauder ships left and right, lol - and esp. since it had no reviews for a few days, eeep!) I'm glad the characterization was good and that you found it plausible. I love writing these characters. I wish they were mine. I need to create characters I love this much so I can play with them. Anyway - your first comment is funny, lol. Really, I was going for some major irony there about Peter. ;) And I had fun with Lily - that was one of those unplanned things that just happened and I was like - waaaaait, this is a J/R story, go away! Haha, glad she stayed, though. And really, I don't see this an non-canon. I might write more, since Sirius is not here much. And of course eventually James realizes things about Lily (in about a hundred different ways on my author's page alone, lol) Anyway - thank you again!! ~Gina :)
WHOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!! Can totally see this now. Brilliant idea, Gina. Mwahahahaha - aren't you glad I refused to let you use the WW incident? (No, you still hate me - ha ha) But it did mean you had to invent the Potion exploding :D.
This is brilliant. I love James in this so much because he's vulnerable and although he's the one who first seemed to suggest it, it's Remus who ends up taking charge. GAHHHD, that first kiss was exquisite! And Remus bursting into fits of laughter was just such a fabulous idea that really showed, yet again, how he's not just a follower of James and Sirius but is starting to become a man in his own right.
You totally nailed second person, by the way. It was a good choice to get round the pronoun problem, but also it felt very unobtrusive (usually it comes across as hectoring).
Amazingly fab, update soooooooon.
~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you for saving this from the review graveyard!! And thank you for the loveliness itself. I'm so, so glad it worked for you and that you enjoyed it. It really took over for a few days, just this sudden, huge inspiration to write James and Remus. I'm glad you liked the laughing, it did interrupt things a bit but they got on with it in the end. And knowing how you usually feel about second person, I'm so glad that worked, because for some reason that just seemed like the only way to write this. I'll update it today or tomorrow, depending on whether I want to do an even numbered update or a Monday/Friday thing. Yes, I am that weird. Thank you again!!!!! ~Gina :)
