Hellloooooo Gina. :) Had to pop in and let you know how much I enjoyed this one. Love and Order is easily my favorite of all your fics, so it was no surprise that I adored every moment of this one too. Love that Frank ended up proposing right in the middle of the meeting rather than put it off due to yet another interruption. Great stuff as always. ~Lori
What a lovely story! I’ve been craving some Frank/Alice for a while now, and this was such a fabulous example of a fun, action-packed tale that made me laugh a lot. Your characterisation of Frank and Alice was really well thought out. I also thought the background characters, like the Marauders and the other Order members, were portrayed accurately in regards to canon, and I loved how the minor characters all had a part to play in Frank’s proposal to Alice, whether by interruption in the first chapter, or encouragement in the second.
The first thing I really appreciated in this story was the dialogue-heavy style of it, especially at the beginning. The banter between Frank and Alice was something I found delightfully playful, and I also thought you managed to tell a lot of their backstory through dialogue, as opposed to reams of narrative that could get overwhelming. What’s more, I think your story stands alone perfectly without having any prior knowledge of Love and Order, and I think that’s really important for stories like these that are short sequels to longer works. I loved how the characterisation was shown so much through the often witty dialogue on Frank’s and Alice’s parts, because I think their conversations above all drove forward the story and ensured their characterisations were sustained throughout.
The character that stood out the most, by far, to me was Frank. I thought the character traits you portrayed in him were so well-chosen. The way Frank was so organised, for example, and wasn’t impulsive (having booked dinner at Orsino’s a week in advance) is something I was really interested to see, given I think Neville would have shown those characteristics during Deathly Hallows when he was organising the DA. It was very subtly done, and I was glad to see you picked up on that more favourable Longbottom trait rather than the more typical portrayal of Frank, which in my experience has been of him being a klutz, more than anything. In a similar way, I loved Frank’s display of courage when he stood up to Moody in the middle of the Order meeting, and so unapologetically, as well. I thought that was such an excellent character moment for Frank there, but also, I felt there was a lovely feeling of community from the whole Order in how they were watching his proposal and cheering him on -- even Moody, in his own way.
Of course, I also enjoyed reading from Alice’s point of view. She was such a strong, vivacious character in this, reminding me a lot of how she was in Love and Order. Her sarcasm and snark towards Frank made her such an endearing and likeable character, to me, and I could really relate to her when she was so worried over Frank just leaving the ring on her desk, with no explanation or note to explain where he was. As well as that, I loved how you wrote Alice as an Auror and an Order member, too, as I thought that added a lot of vibrancy and intelligence to her character. I know a lot of stories focus on the sadness of Frank/Alice as a pairing, but I liked the way this story was more lighthearted, showing both Frank and Alice were talented and brave people, even against the darker backdrop of the war.
Another aspect of this story I thought was really well done was the appearance of the more minor characters. Fabian, for example, making Dungbombs was a lovely homage to Fred and George, and it was something that definitely made me smile. Moody’s insistence to continue the meeting after Frank’s proposal was something that, for me, came straight out of canon. I also enjoyed reading the dialogue between James, Sirius, Frank and Alice. I found it especially interesting to see James being more tactful and apologising to Frank for interrupting them in The Three Broomsticks, compared to Sirius, whose tactless interruption was definitely really amusing to me. I’m guessing it was probably because James was in a similar boat with Lily, so it was lovely seeing James and Lily as foils for Frank and Alice. But also, I appreciated seeing how James had matured over time, even in his rather minor role in this story.
Lastly, I thought this was plotted so very well. The trio of interruptions, first with Fabian, then Sirius, then Moody was amusing to read about, but I could also feel Frank’s frustration that he couldn’t do it in an unromantic setting, and I could understand why he couldn’t simply propose on an impulse. Also, Dumbledore using Travers as a spy for the Order was something I found really interesting, considering Travers was on Voldemort’s side during the books… unless this was his brother, by any chance, or his son? I really hope you touch on that in Love and Order, because I would love to know more.
All in all, this was a fabulous story, Gina. I truly enjoyed reading, because there really isn’t enough of this pairing on MNFF. I hope I can read another chapter of Love and Order sometime soon! :)
Love the story! It's a great sequel to 'Love and Order'. At the end I was whooping along with all the other Order members when Frank finally asked Alice! And Moody was deliciously down to earth: "Can we continue now? There is a war on, after all."
Sadly, the ending is bittersweet "They would be together, finally and forever." knowing how their story will end..
This was great! I really like how you made them hate & love each other (if you know what I mean). It was so sweet how Frank left that ring for her.
P.S. Did you write any Neville/Luna?
Author's Response: THank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed how this played out for them with all the ups and downs. It was fun. No, I haven't written and Neville/Luna. I think a lot of people find Luna challenging to write. I've only written one real story about her, and it was a Draco/Luna (odd, I know!) Maybe someday an idea will pop into my head. Thank you so much for reading this one, I appreciate it! ~Gina :)
I love this! I (again) love your Alice/Frank fics and am delighted to see the storyline I know continuing. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed this, it was fun although a few things tripped me up here and there. I have no plans to stop writing so hopefully with all this Cotillion stuff over I can get back to their origin story now. Thank you for the recommendation on the audiofic. I don't know if they'll choose it as I've had several others recorded, but I was really touched to see your lovely rec. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
So good of you to write this one since in the other long story it will take some time for Frank to get here, I suppose. Sirius being totally tactless and disruptive was so funny. And I loved how he finally proposed.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yes, the other story is a good year earlier so this scene won't happen in that one. I wrote it hoping it will get me back on track with that one as I do love these two now but am a bit stuck at the moment. So hopefully it will happen soon. Can't you just picture Sirius being like that for someone? Hahah I love including the Marauders if I can. Thanks again, I really appreciate all your reviews! ~Gina :)
Oh! THIS WAS THE BEST! Now, I am glad Frank didn't do it after that ... er... tea session. I really enjoyed this, Gina. I think you have given the two characters a lot of lovely moments in the fic, and it was a pleasure to see the Order in action, and Sirius being himself, of course!
Author's Response: See, always a reason. For some reason, I had this very clear picture of Frank impulsively proposing at an Order meeting and standing up to Moody to do it, lol. And it gave me a chance to include the Marauders so yay! Thanks so much for the reviews, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
HAHAHAHAHA. I died when Rosmerta kept butting in lmao. Oh dear. Sorry, I am just giggling at all the lost opportunities. Although, if they're almost living together, why has Frank not thought of asking after a nice session of ... er... tea?
I'm sure you have reasons for that. :) Okay, I am adoring this fic so far. We always read so many sad stories about the Longbottoms it's almost bizarre seeing them this happy, this untainted. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: I know, right - the stories about Frank and Alice are always sad, always after their torture. But they had to have been strong, vibrant people to have been respsected Aurors and in the Order. I am really enjoying writing about them. They might be the closest to OCs I've come, since there is very little to base them on. So I'm glad you enjoyed reading about them. Of course I have my reasons for him not proposing after "tea." I had a very clear vision of his actually proposal that I had to write up to, hence all the interruptions. Thank you so much for reading this, I'm glad you enjoyed it and giggled! ~Gina :)