Reviewer: Purple Dragon
Date: 09/29/13 20:20
Chapter: Self-Entitlement (And Perfection)

Very dark, but not in a bad way. I don't know the characters myself (i was in elementary school when i read the series and don't remember many details) but I feel as if maybe this could translate into a Drarry, maybe? Just a thought for myself. Other than that it was really good. +) (sorry i couldnt help much)

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 03/03/13 9:58
Chapter: Self-Entitlement (And Perfection)

Oh, interesting, Lily and a crime this has no reviews. I like the style you've written this in and the simple repetition of 'left standing' that runs throughout the story. It gives a good flow and poetic feel to the story.

The interesting dichotomy here of a supposed good person, who is actually doing nothing and basking in his past, with a supposed bad person who, I think, is the one that works and supports Michael is a really clever one. As you know, I'm very fond of Blaise, and you captured something very intense about him. I still see he's inherently Slytherin, and not evil, as such, but he's certainly not wholly good. (Is anyone).

I did get a little confused at the references to Harry because I'm not sure Harry would have been that vocal in his hatred of the Slytherins and the only time Michael had much to do with Harry was at the DA meetings in OOTP, so although he was definitely prejudiced against Draco. Crabbe and Goyle (with good cause), he didn't appear to attack any of the others. The other, very minor, point I wanted to make was when Michael is thinking about his past loves. He mentions Ginny, Lavender and Terry. While I'm not disputing he could have gone out with Lavender and Terry, I think you should have mentioned Cho who he went out with straight after Ginny and appeared to still be seeing when she returned for the Battle. Cho certainly joins him as soon as she gets there which suggests they still had a good relationship.

Interesting idea and very well written. ~Carole~

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