Reviewer: GinnyPotterFan26
Date: 05/18/13 6:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was really interesting from Lily's perspective. I love these characters, and this was such a sweet and simple way to portray them. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks so much :D ~Maple

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 04/11/13 18:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this story, it was very sweet and I liked that you wrote it from Lily's perspective, even though she wasn't in the main pairing of the story. I thought you did a great job of showing how torn Lily was between being happy for them and being a bit weirded out by out - it felt really natural for her to feel that way.

I also liked the friendship you showed between Lily and Emma, especially at the start, they seemed to relate really naturally together and I could tell they had been friends for years.

I also liked the undertones of Lily/Teddy (at least from Lily's point of view) - it added to the story to have both Lily and Emma acting a bit differently to how they normally would on vacation.

I also thought it was interesting how you presented James - Lily's perspective still shows him as immature (putting dungbombs in her trunk - which he probably did years ago), and Emma's perspective shows how he has grown up. It made him a believable character and worked really well here.

Anyway this was a really sweet story and I enjoyed reading it :).

~Katrina

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I can't believe I didn't respond to this! Thank you so much for the lovely review! This idea of having Lily deal with her best friend falling for her brother was a plot bunny I've had for awhile, so I'm glad that Lily's feelings did come across. Maple

Reviewer: Chocolate butterbeer
Date: 03/21/13 20:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww that was soo cute!!
It took me a while to figure out who Emma was and when you said she got the look from her father I wasn't sure what you were talking about but other than that loved it

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review! I'll definitely look for a place to put Emma's last name a little earlier on :)

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 03/03/13 8:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was very sweet, Maple! First of all, I liked the Lily/Teddy nods, hee hee. And then to write a story in first person from the point of view of a character who is *not* the romantic pairing was a really unique way to approach this. I liked it. I though Lily Luna sounded very authentic, torn between support and not-support. I liked Emma and the end with James proposing was lovely. Nice story, I hope it gets more reviews! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Gina! I'm glad you liked the little parts that I really liked about the fic (especially the Lily/Teddy, which seems to be my current obsession, heehee). Maple :)

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