Reviews For Lucky
Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 01/19/14 19:30
Chapter: Lucky

Hi, Sophie. This is Vicki of Slytherin House. I have come across this little story which you posted almost a year ago, and I would like to comment on it.

First of all, I must say that you are a bit of a tease for failing to tell us how Ludo Bagman’s father managed to hoodwink Andromeda’s mother about the true cause of her bruised ribs. But that little point is a clue to Ludo’s character”he expects Daddy to solve his problems.

I interpret this story, in general, as simply an example of Andromeda kicking over the traces. We know that ultimately she ignored her family’s wishes by marrying Ted Tonks, and here we see the early signs of that rebellion. She is doing what her family would think of as “going slumming” by attending Quidditch matches and hooking up with, of all things, a professional Quidditch player.

You do not indicate in your story how long this relationship lasted, but it could not have been for long. What was Ludo’s appeal to her? His lovely smile, his being the antithesis of her family’s values, his being a glamorous Quidditch star. And his liabilities? She had him pegged as “not the fastest broom in the shed”, and he was slow to realize that she needed to maintain the fiction of being with Rabastan; if they continued the relationship, he would have blown her cover sooner or later and caused a blowup with her family. She was willing to do that, later in her life, for someone with the qualities of Ted Tonks, but not for a lightweight like Ludo Bagman. In Goblet of Fire we see a much older Ludo, still giving the impression of an overgrown schoolboy.

I presume, given Andromeda’s fling with Ludo in his deserted kitchen, that she hadn’t met Ted Tonks yet, but she probably would do so pretty soon, if she was to fall in love with Ted before leaving Hogwarts, so that is another reason to assume that this affair with Ludo was just a flash in the pan.

This depiction of Andromeda matches well with the character we know later, independent-minded, straightforward, willing to take risks. But I’m not sure why she considers herself lucky to have stumbled arose him, since she knows that this relationship has no future. Perhaps she is just using him for the purpose of “trying out” what it is like to be in a romantic relationship.

Your story is well written and moves along at a lively pace, with enough introspection to allow us to see what Andromeda is thinking and how her curiosity about the unknown is impelling her along this course. Andromeda in her later years is depicted as mature and responsible; who would have guessed the secrets of her teenage years? I enjoyed this story. Good job.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 03/12/13 14:11
Chapter: Lucky

Yayayaya - Okay, why doesn;t this have any reviews. What is wrong with people. This is a lovely story. I like your Ludo, Sophie. He's much sweeter and less idiotic than mine, so I'm pleased he's with Andromeda. Seems a shame that she'll end up with Ted, really, ha ha ha.

The Quidditch match was a great idea to bring them together, but I am wondering what Ludo's dad would have told Druella. I can only imagine that's where Ludo got his silver tongue from.

I noticed this error. Oh, how predictable, Andromeda though.

You might want to italicise the 'thoughts' (although that's just my preference) but you've written 'though' instead of 'thought'

Lovely story ~Carole~

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