Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 05/16/13 7:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

I am so sad to see that this has no reviews. I am also ashamed that I haven't been here earlier.

Your prose poems are always a joy to read, Lafonna. A joy to discover. I love the way you create a compelling narrative, along with your beautiful language, style, and rhythm. Each one unfolds as the story unfolds as the words unfold as the characters unfold... you did it with The Absent Guests, and this is reminiscent of that poem while being an entity of its own at the same time. I don't think I am making any sense here. The thing with your prose poems is that they are still very much poems. I think a lot of people struggle with where prose leaves the poetry behind, but you never do.

I love that you chose the Hairy Heart challenge and I love that you chose Umbridge. I love that, while I still despise the woman, you gave me something more to think about.

When you think of Umbridge, you cannot think of Jane: once, a whole.

This is such an apt observation for any character that has fallen from grace, or is despised and seemingly without redemption. It reminds me of the Untold Stories challenge from the Great Hall so many years ago.

Keep on keeping on, Lafonna, because you are as talented as fudge.

Greenleaf x

Author's Response: UHM. APPARENTLY YAHOOMAIL HAS BEEN SENDING REVIEW NOTIFICATIONS TO MY SPAM FOLDER, DUE TO WHICH I HAVE BEEN DRAGGING THROUGH LIFE WITHOUT THE GLORIOUS KNOWLEDGE OF GREENLEAF REVIEWING MY POEM. WHAT THE EVERLOVING FUDGE.

Oh, that's me. Hehehehe. THANK YOU SO MUCH! I am so pleased you liked this, especially as I am nervous of prose poetry :)

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