Love it! Seriously, wow :) You should write a LOT more than that! And it's a blackberry ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much :) I have a lot of their backstory in my head, and I intend on posting more of it at some point, so watch this space! And my mother and sister both have BlackBerrys. Not my thing, hehe, but whatever -- I just hope you liked my story :3 Thanks for the review!
Why does this fic have so few reviews? It's just wonderful! You can thank Julia and Carole for making this recommended reading for this week's discussion in the Romance class, and I will thank them as well. ;) You've really managed to capture a lot in very few words here... the assignment for Remus, the story of how they got together, the first time they said they loved one another, sex, and a completely domestic (and contrasting, to their situation) setting. Their characterization is so, so right. I really liked that Remus didn't end up telling her, but that he had intended to. It's another layer of the Remus angst that makes him such a wonderful character, and I do think its just what he would have done in this situation. As for Dora, she's strong and funny and yet vulnerable, too. I love when she admitted that she was scared before he told her how he felt. That's the kind of declaration that can come off being pretty cheesy or whiny, but it fit just perfectly on her. My favorite part--when her hair changed and grew at his touch. Romantic and sexy. Great stuff, Soraya!
Author's Response: Eeeee, Lori, thank you so much! :D What a lovely thing to find in my inbox -- and what a pleasant surprise to see a fic of mine recced in the romance class, too. I won't lie, I did squee at that, as I have done every time one of my stories is discussed or recommended in a class nowadays :)
This was originally a drabble for LoveNotes. I can remember being on AIM with Jess and us SPEWers rapidly trying to write LoveNotes for everyone before the deadline, and this one pretty much was word vomit for me. So it means so much that you thought I could capture a lot in few words, because I certainly didn't feel like that at the time -- but I did have a clear idea of Remus and Tonks's backstory (this is actually a kind of prequel to One and Only, my other Remus/Tonks that's set after Tonks's outburst in the hospital wing in HBP). I'm just glad that backstory translated in this story without any knowledge of the other one, so thank you. :)
I LOVE Remus. He is honestly one of my favouritest characters ever, in HPverse or otherwise, just because, as you said, he has so many layers to his angst. I'm glad you thought him not telling Tonks about having to leave, even if he had intended to, was in character.
Yay, I'm so happy you noticed Tonks's vulnerability. Again, that is something I always had in mind for Tonks and wasn't sure it translated onto the page, but I do think that aspect of her character has canonical basis too. Like, even if we disregard how she was in HBP, I think there is definitely a side of her that is vulnerable and even sensitive -- for me, the reason she is jokey and funny all the time could partly be because that's her "happy face" but she could also have moments of insecurity, too. Actually, I wonder now if that's more me than her... LOL.
Oh, and the "I love you" conversation is something, I'm embarrassed to admit, I've read and written so many times over that I had no idea how I was supposed to make it non-cheesy. I'm so pleased you thought it fit well for her characterisation -- I certainly think that Tonks is unabashedly honest and always wears her heart on her sleeve, and so would definitely say if she felt scared about telling Remus she loved him. And yayyyyy about the hair moment :D There is so much to play with when it comes to Tonks and her Metamorphmagus abilities -- I have a story in my head about her morphing a tattoo on herself but that would probably be better off untold, haha.
THANK YOU SO MUCH for the fabulous review, Lori! My day has been made. <3
Ooh, Soraya this was really well done! I loved the Lovenote and I’m glad you decided to increase this into a one-shot. :)
I loved Remus and Tonks here. You’ve managed to show their dynamics and their interactions perfectly, according to me -- Dora’s love for him and Remus’ self-contempt at being a werewolf. Remus and Tonks, though not my OTP, are two characters that I adore and their deaths saddened me a lot. I’ve always been interested in their relationship, and I think this was a great portrayal of it. I liked the fact that they bonded over Sirius’s death. It makes sense, since they were both close to Sirius, and they needed someone that would understand their grief perfectly. It seems right that they’d find solace in each other. It’s good to see that their relationship progressed from there -- I'd have thought that Remus would try to back away, and even though that idea crossed his mind, I’m happy that he decided to stick with her, at first at least.
That leads me towards Remus’s characterization: It was perfect, because you’ve captured his insecurities well. The line Remus’s agreement to go underground with the werewolves has reminded him who he is -- he is a monster, and now he will be with other monsters, where he belongs. expresses it well, as does the rest of this paragraph. Despite of him knowing that Dora (or anyone else, for that matter) doesn’t care about his lycanthropy, he cannot get over his condition, and thinks that he’s too dangerous for everyone. This is Remus’ main flaw as per the books, and you’ve managed to nail it.
I do like that he at least attempts to have a normal relation with Dora. He knows he loves her, and seeing him admit his love for her and postpone telling her about the Order business made me smile. However, he goes back to his self-loathing self with the line surely, surely that is more important than a relationship that is doomed to fail as it is? This line is perfect because it goes back to showing that he believes that he is still a monster even though they both love each other. I won’t be lying if I say it did not annoy me.
I also enjoyed that it was Tonks who said that she loves him first, because everyone knows Remus wouldn’t be the one who did it. She always struck me as the independent type, and taking matters into her own hands seemed like her type, so I’m glad you did that. You also managed to stick to the books by showing her attempts at cooking in the initial paragraphs, and with “Even I can’t go wrong with this, Remus,” she’s admitting just how careless she can be around household chores. Furthermore, by presenting that she’s worried that Remus doesn’t love her after she told his she does, you’ve shown a soft side of her - one we’ve hardly seen but we know exists as seen in bits of HBP and DH. I think you’ve characterised both Dora and Remus perfectly.
The ending, though, is beautiful. You’ve implied that while the colour of Dora’s room had hurt his eyes at first, it didn’t anymore -- I like how this expresses how much he loves her as he’s adjusted himself to anything she likes. And he knows he loves her and cares deeply; after all, the only thing he’s leaving behind is her. That last lines leaves a striking impression on the readers by the simple-ness, and yet the emotions are clearly visible underneath. It was very, very well done.
Thank you, Soraya, for the story. It was sad and beautiful, yet an absolutely amazing read! I’d love to see more Remus/Tonks from you in the future -- maybe expand this into a chaptered fic? ;)
Author's Response: Nadiaaaaa! I am so sorry for the late response. I've been really busy preparing for exams and haven't got anywhere near enough laptop time as I would like. And this was such a fabulous review that I felt I would do it an injustice by not giving it the response it deserves. /excuses
I am so glad you liked this! Of all the LoveNotes I wrote, I only really liked this one and my SSP, a James/Sirisu drabble for Sophie. And I hadn't really planned to do much with it -- I only really wanted to add a little bit so it didn't feel so constrained by the end -- but I did feel like I was taking a risk by having it so short because I didn't really establish their relationship but instead dived straight in, if you know what I mean? Anyway the long and short of that, lol, is that I'm glad you enjoyed the romance aspects of this because I think they were difficult to get right.
Remus/Tonks is an interesting pairing because I can happily ship both characters with different people. Remus in particular is someone I readily ship with James, Sirius, Charity, Rosmerta and any other eligible male and female in Marauder Era, lol. Tonks I often ship with Charlie. I agree, though, that they are both fabulous characters and I was sorry to see them both die :(
I think it was believable for them to bond over Sirius's death. I would even argue that in my head canon, they weren't exactly the best of friends before Sirius's death but the common ground helped them become a lot closer. You're right in that Remus would try to back away. He did, at first, according to my head canon, but then he gave in because, well, Tonks was persistent. Even so, their relationship was pretty low-key, tbqh.
I am so happy you liked my portrayal of Remus. I think his self-contempt consumes him, and this makes me rather sad, but it is definitely a part of him. I wanted to put across that self-loathing but not go overboard with it, if you know what I mean. I totally agree that this was Remus's main flaw in the books.
But yes, I also think Remus would at least try to have a normal relationship with Tonks if only because he does love her. Of course Tonks would be the first one to say she loves him; I think Tonks is someone who is very vocal with her emotions. That could be seen in HBP with her having trouble with Metemorphmagusing (lol, I don't know if that's a word), so I think she would always be the one to wear her heart on her sleeve if you know what I mean.
The ending was really sad to write :( It was also painful, ha, because I struggled with it for ages -- I thought it ended abruptly but then wondered if that was kind of the point? I'm really glad you liked the ending because it was bloody difficult to write, lol.
Thank YOU for the fabulous review, Nadia! I am so sorry for replying late, but as you can see, I wanted to respond lengthily, something I could only really do in my lunch break, ha. You are lovely, and I will have to return the favour once exams are over :D
Loved it!! Remus and Tonks are almost my favourite characters of the whole series and I always wished there was more about them in the books, so ... thanks for this!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story, and I adore Remus and Tonks, too. Thanks again
Loved it, of course!
Yes, they were together for a very long time, way way before HBP - heh heh.
This is lovely, Soraya, but sadly t'will be a bad review. You've caught the characterisation of them both perfectly. I love the fact that they got together after Sirius' death and then despite his caution, he couldn't keep away. There's just something so very perfect about Remus and Tonks that despite occasionally hankering after other pairings for them, I always return to this. *sigh*
Lovely moment, Soraya. Well done. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Crolllllllll! :D
I love this pairing, too. Yes, I always dabble with other pairs and am pretty crazy about James/Remus and Sirius/Remus, but his endgame has always been one involving Remus/Tonks. Sometimes I read stories involving Sirius/Remus that completely disregard or dismiss Tonks, and it makes me sad. Sorry, went off on a tangent there, ha. Thank youuuu for the review. I am so glad you liked the characterisation. I was worried it was a bit wishy washy and plotless because really, all that happens is, ahem, you know, but it also was a moment I always imagined would happen between them if they had been together for a while before the big confrontation in the hospital wing. So I am really happy I have teh Croll stamp of approval on this.
Thank you, my lovely, for the review, and don't be silly; your review was fabulous. ♥
I really liked this, Soraya. You did such a great job of characterising Remus, and he's one of my favourite characters so I always love reading about him anyway haha.
I liked the way you started their relationship as shared grief over Sirius, which gradually developed into something more - it makes sense that way, because I think Remus would have been too afraid to put a label on it initially.
I loved this section - And he knows and has always known, deep down, that he will never belong with Dora, because she is whole, human, and no matter how much she might try to convince him that he is, too, Remus knows he isn’t. That to me just gets to the core of Remus - no matter what people say to him, he still feels they are better off without him. And you can sort of see why he would be like that - not just being a werewolf, but then finally making friends at Hogwarts and losing them all again. His life is so sad... but at least he gets to be happy with her in the end, and they die together. Anyway, back to your story.
It's really well-written - the dialogue seemed really natural and I got a sense of their relationship from it. I particularly liked the part when Dora tells him she loves him, because in that moment they're both so vulnerable and you can see how much they love each other.
So I really liked this, I hope it gets more reviews soon!
Author's Response: Eeeeee, Katrina, thank you so much for another wonderful review! I am totally on hiatus and have only posted this story because I just had to add about 300 words to it (it started out as a 900 word drabble for this activity we do in SPEW called LoveNotes, where basically each of us list pairings and prompts and we gift each other anonymously), and even then, I thought it wasn't my strongest or anything, so it means so much to me that you enjoyed this :)
I love Remus too. He is adorable, and I've recently got into pairing him with James, Sirius and even unrequited with Lily, because gah, he is such a fabulous character. Thank you so much for saying I characterised him well. That means a lot :) Also, I always planned for Remus and Tonks to get together over Sirius. It was something they had in common, I guess, and I also have always thought they had a relationship before the big declaration in the hospital wing. I definitely agree that Remus would not want to label their relationship and that he'd probably think such labels -- boyfriend/girlfriend, lovers, etc -- were trite and unnecessary anyway.
I totally agree with you re Remus basically thinking everyone is better off without him. I see why he would think like that, since yeah, he did lose his best friends, and it still saddens me to think that once he is happy and even has a child with Tonks, they both die :( You're right, though -- at least they die together.
I do love writing dialogue, but I have to say, I found it difficult this time. Possibly because I write the whole "I love you" thing so often that it was hard not to just recycle a past conversation? I'm not sure. I am so flattered, therefore, that you still enjoyed that bit because I agree completely that they are both very vulnerable people but they love each other so much. Which is why having Remus leave was so hard to write.
I'm really glad you're back, Katrina :) I miss your reviews, even if I won't be writing much until at least June once my exams are over. I know my flist agrees :D and I hope you'll be sticking around for a bit :) Than you so much for the lovely reviews once again and ♥