Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 06/03/14 18:15
Chapter: one-shot

This was cute, but I do have a soft spot for Drarry. I liked the minor inclusion of Ron, but it might of been more entertaining if he'd known about Draco.

Harry and Draco getting drunk and having sex is a pretty common way for their relationship to start, but I find it hard to believe either of them could get drunk on butterbeer into their adult years. In the movies, Hermione got tipsy on it, but she was still a minor and hardly drank before. Butterbeer is known as a very low alcohol drink. When I want my character to get drunk, I use Firewhisky.

I also think Harry and Draco's relationship progressed a bit too quickly. They went from I hate you - to - Let's tolerate each other - to let's pretend to be friends - to I love you in less than twenty-four hours. I think they'd both struggle to admit that they have feelings for each other. There'd be a lot of denial before they ultimately decide to face the truth.

Still a cute little story that made me smile.

Reviewer: Purple Dragon
Date: 09/25/13 20:50
Chapter: one-shot

Seems very brief, and needs more detail. A great start, but it just doesn't seem to make sense. One night after years of hating each other, and then suddenly they're in love? But a great try though!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 06/12/13 5:56
Chapter: one-shot

Did not quite seem real. All happened a bit too fast. Good effort.

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