Reviews For The Pretender
Reviewer: teh tarik
Date: 07/23/14 5:03
Chapter: The Pretender

Oh, I love this! Amazing short story; I don't even know where to begin with gushing, except this is so very well written, and everything's so beautifully constructed and not overstated and wow, your ending was wonderful! Teddy/Ginny is such a strange pairing, but it works amazingly well here, and it never feels forced at all.

LOVE this! :)

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 06/19/14 7:21
Chapter: The Pretender

This story is so intense and thick that I can't even believe how short it is. There is just so much meat to it and pure sensation on the page that it feels almost voyeuristic reading it.

I just get Teddy's characterisation here. It's hard to see him as a lonely little boy when he's doing the naughty with his godfather's wife, but it really feels like he is. From the moment he said he would be anything she wanted him to be, it seemed like he was trying to please someone at last, since he couldn't please his ex-girlfriend enough to keep her around. I think being with Ginny, who his godfather loves and reveres, gives him a sense of power because it makes him feel desired and desirable - heady stuff after a rejection.

Ginny's characterisation is a bit more complex than that and harder to read. I've myself written a story that featured Ginny having a moment of infidelity because Harry was a twat (albeit unintentionally) and never really took the time for her that she needed. I'm kind of getting that vibe here. I'd like to know more about what made her "already accept what was about to happen", and how she came to that conclusion. Maybe she was feeling too old or too undesirable, or maybe she was just tired of Harry. I'd love to know your headcanon for this scenario and some insight into her psyche other than what's on the page.

I guess I never thought about it, but sex with a Metamorphmagus would be inventive by nature. However, seeing it through Ginny's eyes, the embodiment of her sexual frustrations and her disappointment that her husband won't learn her secret places and hidden desires makes it kind of sad to read, because I feel like they will both deeply regret what happened sometime in the future.

I think, at least to me, the greatest triumph of this story is the pacing. Nothing felt rushed in terms of storytelling, yet it still managed to relay the frenetic relationship between Ginny and Teddy, while at the same time wending its way into the times they are more comfortable with one another and their trysts are far more frequent and languid. All this was conveyed expertly and subtly, which is an artform I've seen from you in past works.

Overall, this is a fantastic (if not a little weird in the pairing department) fic, and I'm glad I stumbled upon it in my yearly fic crawl for QSQ time. Its shocking nature and pat execution make it one of my favourite fics I've turned up. Thanks for sharing!

~Jess

Reviewer: bountybitch
Date: 12/26/13 17:53
Chapter: The Pretender

Wow wow wow! that's what I call an EXCELLENT short story!
not too much explanations, everything brief and storng, perfect
Thank you so much

Author's Response: Thank *you* so much for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the review!

Reviewer: LoveYouAlways
Date: 09/19/13 18:04
Chapter: The Pretender

Beautifully written. The last few sentences gave me an insane amount of chills.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm pleased you felt it had a strong finish. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing

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