Reviewer: dreamsnape
Date: 10/31/13 14:27
Chapter: Halloween Plans

Ah, I get it now: This is Harry's daughter Lily and son James. Maybe I would have realized it sooner if had known who Scorpius was. I wonder why Harry would give his cloak to James already?

Author's Response: Well, James is in his fifth year, so I assume that Harry would have given James the cloak by then because Harry had it when he was in school. :)

Reviewer: dreamsnape
Date: 10/31/13 13:05
Chapter: Hell Breaks Loose

Good, scary adventure. I'm still confused about why James is Lily's older brother in this story, but I liked the story otherwise. Good luck with the challenge.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

Reviewer: dreamsnape
Date: 10/30/13 14:49
Chapter: Halloween Plans

Curious. I also wonder how James became Lily's brother.

Author's Response: Well, this is a next-gen story, so James is Lily's sister. :) Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 10/28/13 8:31
Chapter: Hell Breaks Loose

Good tale.

Author's Response: Thank you. :) I am glad you found it to be so!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/25/13 10:35
Chapter: Halloween Plans

You really set the scene well here, with the lone woman heading into the Forest. Very spooky atmosphere. Scorpius and Lily are great (I would say that, though, as I'm a huge Scily shipper) and I love the fact that they seem to be such good friends. I think you might need to explain how Scorpius managed to get the map from James, though. They're not in the same house, or Lily wouldn't be able to get James's cloak, and they're not the same year, so ... hmm, I wonder.

The other thing I should point out is that according to the Epilogue, Scorpius is the same school year as Albus and Rose, who are two years older than Lily. If she's a second-year, then Scorpius has to be a fourth-year and so he'd be able to visit Hogsmeade. Whilst you don;t specifically state his year, you do make it seem from the summary as if neither of them are allowed to visit Hogsmeade.

Intriguing set up. Good luck in the challenge. ~Carole~

Author's Response: My goodness, you are right! I am such a doltz! I will have to remedy the situation. But even if Scorpius is a fourth-year, I think he would find hunting for a beast of power to be more intriguing than visiting Hogsmeade... And sure, I will look into explaining the bit about the map. :) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 10/24/13 12:38
Chapter: Halloween Plans

Scorpius doesn't sound that sensible but how else is he going to make Halloween exciting for Lily. I'm wondering what the monster they are hunting has to do with the monster in the beginning. I can understand the hesitation in flagging the Knight Bus. I'm sure I'd get very motion sick on that vehicle. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. :) And since when have second years every really been all that sensible? Especially ones that are boys? Just kidding! As for the serpent-like creature, let's just say that perhaps even witches and wizards have their own mythological creatures that don't actually exist... Or maybe they do? :D

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