Reviews For The Mirror Cracked
Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 03/11/14 20:46
Chapter: Chapter 1

When you said you were writing AU, I wasn't sure what to expect. It's not a category I read unless something has been particularly recommended or is written by someone whose writing (as in this case) I know I love. Reading this, however, reminds me that any category can be engaging when the characters are right and the story works.

I like that you set this in the future, in circumstances that occurred after Harry (I assume) failed in his mission. I'm guessing that Bill and Fleur are around 40 here, but I couldn't help picturing them both as their young, beautiful selves. There were issues you didn't tackle, of course. I hate to consider what happened to all the Weasleys, and part of me wanted you to reveal all of that. But considering the length and focus of the fic, I think you made the right choice in not bogging the story down with all the details of what has to be a heartbreaking tale. I also liked that you kept so many of the details from known canon: Fleur's power over men, her ability to tend the wounded (as she did with Hermione in DH), and her courage to jump in and fight when she needed to do so. You also kept the Horcrux storyline alive, which was a nice surprise, and Bill's tragic bout with the werewolf. I must ask you why you decided to make his attack worse than it was in canon, turning him into an actual werewolf. I think it worked in the fic, but am curious what your thought process was there.

My only niggle, and it is such a little one, is that I wanted a little more understanding of Bill's reaction/interest in Fleur. I was so shocked when she kissed him, and there is that moment when he stops and decides, and I just want to know what she thought he was thinking or feeling. What was in his face? It seemed more like he decided to be with her than that he was "under her spell," but I wasn't entirely sure if he was feeling something for her at that point, if it was totally physical attraction, or if he just needed something good to happen. Obviously, you can't tell us his thoughts because it's in her POV, but her take on his thought would have sufficed. I freely admit this probably has much more to do with my crush on Bill Weasley (as you well know) than it does on anything to do with your writing choices. Haha!

I really enjoyed this, Minna. But I'm not a bit surprised. Your stuff never disappoints. Great writing!



Author's Response: Aw, thank you, Lori. I'm glad you gave the story a chance, and you wrote such a nice review. ♥

As for it being the future, er, that's one part where I had trouble developing something - I didn't make the circumstances of Harry's defeat clear enough. This is actually set in 2000, and Harry and Lily and James all died on Halloween 1981. The hope of a single savior was snuffed out before it even came close to being realized, and instead people with no inherent magical/prophetical advantage over Voldemort had to pull together and try to save the world instead. I tried to cover all that with "He killed all the candidates...Well, so what. We've still got a choice: run, or fight." So, uh, you were quite right to picture them as their young, beautiful selves...

I also failed a bit with developing the relationship, oops. This is something I'm still trying to learn, so thanks for the feedback there, especially the things you wish you'd seen.

I'm happy to learn you liked it despite its shortcomings, and your quibbles were helpful. Reviews like this mean a lot to me. Thanks for taking the time to write it. :)

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 03/10/14 14:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Shame it was late! Minna, this is very inventive and I love all the details you've worked out and how the Europeans would react to the Death Eaters.

Fleur and Bill are great here. There's enough of canon about them so they're recognised, and yet they fit so well into this Alternate Universe.

I shall await future chapters!

~Carole

Author's Response: Haha, no more future chapters, I'm afraid, as it's a oneshot. Glad you enjoyed it, though. I certainly had fun figuring out the details, and fitting Fleur and Bill in. :)

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 03/10/14 10:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

A very interesting universe.

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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