Reviews For Astriferous
Reviewer: Wenlock
Date: 07/18/14 15:47
Chapter: stardust

What a fascinating look at the tragic tale of Merope Gaunt.
I especially like your title (I had to look up the definition) and the stars motif. It was very poetically written, and I think you handled sensitive topics well.

Reviewer: teh tarik
Date: 07/14/14 5:42
Chapter: stardust

Oh, I love this! Merope as a character intrigues me a lot, and I always enjoy reading about her. Especially during her time with Tom Riddle Sr. and after when he abandoned her. I loved your imagery about stardust and water and people; after all, Merope is a star in the sky. And a mythology figure, I think. Lovely writing!

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 07/11/14 18:04
Chapter: stardust

Whooooa, Lily, this is a fab story! :)

I haven't read anything of yours in a while, but what I do remember about your work is that you do really well in writing introspective stories. This, in my opinion, is definitely one of your best. I love the intricacy of the imagery and how you also managed to avoid being heavy-handed with it, as is the case often with character studies like this. The celestial and almost otherworldly descriptions are so beautifully written, and probably my favourite line is that first one about stardust and water. Reading this gave me shivers, honestly.

I also thought the interaction with Tom was so well-characterised. That whole exchange actually had such an empty feeling, which was entirely appropriate given their sham marriage and his complete lack of feelings towards her.

The part where she harms herself was really difficult to read, I will say, but I think you summed up Merope's desperation and emptiness perfectly. Kudos to you for writing it in a way that was realistic yet not gory, sensitive and yet never glorifying. I love how she remembers her son - it reminded me of my own fic when Merope decides to live for Tom, even though all she wants to do is die.

And though I'm usually a fan of dialogue-heavy fics, I think this worked so, so well using speech more sparingly. It added to that feeling of introspection and loneliness on Merope's part, which really resonated strongly with me. Especially that last section when she gives birth and also the fact that she had found an orphanage in advance, as though she knows she won't survive - again, that just added to that feeling of loneliness that grows inside Merope as the story goes on.

Overall, very, very well done. I look forward to reading your next fic! :D

~Soraya xxx

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/08/14 13:46
Chapter: stardust

Sad, but I think It was very realistic. Which is a shame, because it is true that all the elements that surround us and compose our bodies really were formed from the atomic reactions in the first stars of the universe. I think it is a wonderful thought that we are all made from stardust.

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