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Hello, I'm moonymaniac and I'm a Harry Potter addict. :) Actually, I'm a Marauder addict. Welcome to my profile.


Wow, was this thing outdated... So, I'm still posting MoB. Yes, I just posted a chapter today, June 5, 2013. I should have waited 3 days and I could have posted on MoB's birthday. Holy moly...8 years on one story. Actually, it is 8 years and 7 months, as I started writing in December the year before I started posting. Anyway, yes, I'm insane.

The site is also making me a little insane, since it gives me so much trouble when trying to post anymore. I tried to post the chapter today, as a whole, something like 9,888 words if I remember, but it wouldn't take it. So I've divided it. Hmmm...I could save the second half for posting on the 8th. But I'll be busy that day, so I better try again tonight. It really is frustrating to get that error message and have it show in the story file but not show up in most recent or update the update date or word count. The word count bothers me the most. I'm a bit proud of that and want credit for them. ;*)

June 7, 2013: Arghhhh!! A fatal MySQL error was encountered. I'm sick of this fatal MySQL error thing!!!! Let me post the rest of the darn chapter!!!!! *sigh* I'll try again later. Sorry, guys.
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Curse of the Reapers by deanine
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 308]

Summary: Past Featured StoryA different sort of alternate universe... It is a world under the thumb of an ancient emperor. Muggle society has been oppressed beyond recognition. Wizards rule over all, their only laws defined by power. This is the story of a rebellion, a family, a traitor, and the long road that leads home at last.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 132252 Chapters: 25 Completed: No
Published:
05/24/05 Updated: 07/11/12


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 01/16/06 Title: Chapter 8: Tripping the Light Fantastic

This chapter was definitely much lighter. I loved the playful exchange with Ron and Harry and the “Solidarity” over the robes. However, it still had very touching moments. I still don’t know what to make of Draco, but I felt very sorry for him: “…he understood now that even a number two son bearing a Veto had value…” that is really sad. And Albus concluding that Harry “could practically be James’ son.” Agghhh! You are tormenting us aren’t you. Luckily, I like to be tormented a little, it makes things fun. I enjoyed Lily’s letter to torment James as well. But my favorite part of this chapter was “…the faceless warmth that held him in his dreams…” I get misty eyed over that. I just want them to go back in time and stop the kidnapping and let Lily have her children to raise! You have a beautiful way with words, simply poignant.

Author's Response: Moony, dear, only a mommy would love that line :) *check* Torment readers is on my list. As for Draco... he can be pitiful, and a little snob, and a little evil too, but I think he's going to be a good friend too the more I write him. *confusion* I never woulda thought it when I started.

 

Blind Intuition by Polaris Dakota
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 34]

Summary:

Serranes is blind but she can see. Wait-hold on a second! She cant really be blind if she can see. Why can she see? What do you mean she cant see when she can?! Is Serranes doomed to relive her past and be unable to help with certain "trials" that her friends face? Is she also to be consumed by her past and become unable to feel love or find it? What of the good and evil that dwell within her? Read and find out.
A sixth year fic (Pre-HBP)
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I am sorry to say that this story is now on an indefinate hiatus due to my illness. You may always e-mail me at xxeclipseangelxx@yahoo.com and complain directly. I still love my fans, so I leave you with Love!!!

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Self Injury, Substance Abuse, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 8925 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
06/03/05 Updated: 10/10/05


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 06/19/05 Title: Chapter 1: Catch and Release

Nice first chapter. It does what a first chapter should do; creates interest in what comes next. Very well done and so very sad. I look forward to what comes next. Hopefully, Serra will find some happiness...soon.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review-And im honored! I really love your story too! Portraying Remus like that must have been quite the original idea, Unique! I made a little mess up so Serra's eyes are not fully explained untill the third chapter (hopefully) but the second chapter has happiness...or some. Story gets moving around the third! thanks again for the review!

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 10/14/05 Title: Chapter 3: Disce Pati (Learn to Endure)

Welcome back, Polaris. And quite a comeback it is. You do drama very well in addition to creating suspense; I’m so curious about that little silky-haired blighter! I also commend you on your creativity: those eyes of Serra’s. Wow! Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: ditto

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 10/14/05 Title: Chapter 3: Disce Pati (Learn to Endure)

Welcome back, Polaris. And quite a comeback it is. You do drama very well in addition to creating suspense; I’m so curious about that little silky-haired blighter! I also commend you on your creativity: those eyes of Serra’s. Wow! Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: Thank you moony, you really are the best...but you will find that I will give away nothing...yet. :)

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 06/27/05 Title: Chapter 2: The Great Escape

You said you would like some hints for your story so, lets see...there was a typo (minuet instead of minute). That's the only hint I feel qualified to give. You are doing a great job. Your writing has a lovely flowing quality; almost poetic. Also, I like the fact that you create mystery by giving a few details but not revealing too much at once. It makes me look forward to what comes next.

Author's Response: Heya Moony! thanks for dropping by! Ha-I always have tons of typos and grammar issues (I had to ask four people to help edit my grammar and spelling for chapter three! no lie!) but other than that i do take alot of my inspiration from great literary works. It is so nice to have someone notice! drop in again some time-it is nice to hear from people who are in my favorites! Ta! and thanks again!

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 06/27/05 Title: Chapter 2: The Great Escape

You said you would like some hints for your story so, lets see...there was a typo (minuet instead of minute). That's the only hint I feel qualified to give. You are doing a great job. Your writing has a lovely flowing quality; almost poetic. Also, I like the fact that you create mystery by giving a few details but not revealing too much at once. It makes me look forward to what comes next.

Author's Response: ditto...again *smiles*

 

Pegs by pelirroja
Rated: [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Remus and Tonks find that opposites attract because they share common ground.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1791 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/09/05 Updated: 09/09/05


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 09/16/05 Title: Chapter 1: Pegs

Very nicely done. I particularly love the paragraph where Tonks defines each of their “pegs”. I think you, like she, has them pegged very appropriately. It is Remus’ world that is rough and jagged in contrast to him. Very insightful. One little thing, you misspelled Greyback. Otherwise, good job. I enjoyed it.

 

Until the Dawn by HermioneDancr
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: For the first time in her life, Minerva McGonagall had Seen. Buoyant after her first ever success in a Divination lesson, Minerva receives an unexpected owl. On an icy November night, Minerva finds herself betrayed by the promise of omens but discovers the certainty of the stars. One-shot.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1219 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/21/05 Updated: 10/21/05


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 06/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

I was led to your story through the BA Challenge forum, and am very glad I decided to check it out. What a beautiful piece this is. Your use of the English language is lovely. The imagery is exquisite, and the emotion is palpable. Sometimes I feel that writers try too hard to be poetic with their imagery, and it comes off contrived and ‘flowery’, yet this is simply elegant. I won’t pick out specifics because the whole thing is that way. Well done.



You also portray the young Minerva in a way that seems very consistent with the adult McGonagall we know.



A polite yet distant letter from the Ministry of Magic regretfully informed her that William and Diana McGonagall would not be returning home.


This is the only passage that gave me pause, and that was just for a moment. My first thought was that surely they would inform someone of a family death in person, especially a child still in school. But the Ministry of Magic does seem to be coldly detached, completely impersonal. And it works so well as you have written it in your story, I can’t even offer criticism here. :)



I look forward to the BA challenge banners, because if the talented members can portray even half of the beauty of your story, there will be lovely entries indeed.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I agree that that one passage falls flat. I messed with it quite a bit, but nothing I did really worked there. If I have the time, I\'ll think on how to change it. Anyway, I\'m glad you liked the story and that you took the time to both read and review.

 

The Wolf That One Hears by Masked One
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: A wolf is always a wolf. Sometimes, he might take the guise of a man and walk among them. He might learn their language, understand their rules, but he will never join them. Remus knows that - raised by the Pack he couldn’t forget it - but when the chance arises might he speak in the ears of men? Might he be the wolf that bridges an ancient gap: the wolf that one hears?

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Violence

Word count: 3875 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
01/10/06 Updated: 11/16/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 08/08/06 Title: Chapter 2: Birthdays and Magical Creatures

At last! The AU Remus has returned. And I love him. Five-year-old Remus is simply wonderful! You show his curiosity, joy in life (which he must have had by the truck loads to still be able to smile after all he has been through), sweetness, and that wonderful mix of care (the care he takes with his coloring project) and boyish recklessness (falling out of trees) that foreshadows Remus the Marauder. I thoroughly enjoyed the way you worked in his interest in creatures, and chocolate. LOL (isolating the chocolate chips. :) ) He is absolutely darling!




And that is what makes this chapter so excruciating. I don’t know what I was thinking as I read along, obliviously happy at his joy. For a while, I forgot what I knew was to come. *slaps self* You distracted me (cruelly) with the beauty of his world. The bright swirling colors, his sheer glee…his loving parents…*cries* But you brought me back with a jolt here: and the moon that hung, heavy and huge, above the trees. And then his birthday wish…*groans* I kept wishing the candles wouldn’t go out, even though I knew what had to happen. *sobs*




*grabs tissue and offers criticism so she can stop thinking about how sad this is, for a moment* There were a few typo’s that I feel responsible for, as I was the one strong-arming you into posting right now! ;) : slightly sticky finer pointed. Remus’ finger is missing its G.

waved a scolding finger his dad is missing the at

To be really nit-picky, I have this thing about clear separation between the body of the story and author’s notes. *blushes* I don’t know why, but I’m strange that way. Just a personal preference thing. Especially considering the dedication. ;*) *beams*

or whether he’d better not make a wish he didn’t want to come true. I may be wrong, and I’ve read this a number of times and still can’t really say, but I think it would be more accurate to say ‘better not make a wish he DID want to come true.”

And finally, Velcro…again I could be wrong, but I don’t know if they used Velcro on shoes yet in 1965. I remember it being a big deal in the eighties. Of course, you young whippersnappers wouldn’t relate to a time when there wasn’t Velcro…lol It had definitely been invented before then, so it isn’t impossible, but it does strike me as a little more recent than sixties. So, now that I feel really old, back to the gushing…:)




I love how you make everything feel truly magical. The description of the fairies is brilliant. LOVE the Welsh Green in Remus’ magic coloring book! That cake…glorious. Your love of magical things is glaringly evident. Well done!




Finally, the tragedy…It comes so quickly and happens in such a whirl of frantic activity, just as it should. He was dizzy again, falling downwards, and the fairies swirled and swirled, and his father shouted, and his mother screamed, and a tail disappeared into the woods. In any other context, I would say that was a lot of ands…but it is brilliant here. I felt the tension and confusion so clearly that I realized I was holding my breath. I love/hate that line. Poor Remus…Poor Mr. Lupin…POOR REMUS’ MUM! and the world went dark. Gah! Simply prophetic. I’m almost afraid to say it, (that whole be-careful-what-you-wish-for thing…*sobs more*) but don’t keep us waiting too long for more.



 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 08/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: New Moon

Rats, Mask. I've messed up your reviews by leaving out a stupid formatting tag. So let me add another thing I love about this chapter to make up for it. Well done on the werewolf. I love that description of its eyes, and that you didn't make it look like some Hollywood monster. *cheers.*

Author's Response: *uses super-powers to edit the html tag* MOONY, that review was completely SPEW-worthy. Just so you know.

I knew I\'d missed some stuff in those parts. I\'ll go back and edit. I\'m very glad you liked young Remus. As for the candles... I was hoping they didn\'t go out while I was writing. Did you know it\'s hard to write and hold your breath at the same time?

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 11/16/06 Title: Chapter 3: The Stranger

Oh, you are so cruel, Mask! How you have set this up to confuse poor little Remus into thinking his mum has sent the real monster to help him is just heartless, and very well done. You have just set that up, right? She isn’t really abandoning him? Please…because I absolutely couldn’t bear that. Remus’ confusion and fear is so realistic; he is a little boy and I really get a sense of that. And I loathe that healer! Almost as much as Greyback…his manipulation is just evil. I desperately want Mrs. Lupin to come back in, have the beast arrested, and take dear sweet Remus home and love him forever. *sighs* I love/hate the Remus AU! It is perfect torture you know. Please update soon. lol *starts poking right away*

 
Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 01/12/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: New Moon

Wow. That was stunning. I must agree with you regarding deanine’s brilliance. I think she has proved it even more by finding the perfect person to bring her ideas to life. You have done an amazing job taking my favorite character from the gentle lovely man he is and putting him in a role that is so different from the expected. The imagery is beautifully done, the writing superb, and I can not wait to see what comes next! Wonderful!

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope that the story lives up to your expectations.

 

Summary: Fourteen months after leaving Hogwarts, Sirius takes it upon himself as a seasoned veteran of love to educate a "naïve" Remus on the dark, inner workings of the female mind when the former receives a letter from a girlfriend demanding his time. Pointless, yes, but Erik enjoys procrastinating.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1084 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/10/06 Updated: 02/10/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Importance of Being Single

Ah, now anything that gives me a glimpse, and a very pleasant one at that, into the heads and hearts of my two favorite characters is never pointless! This was so light, entertaining, very well written and in character, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was a wonderful treat on a cold, grey winter morning. Thanks.

Author's Response: you said "thanks" to me...i am actually speechless right now. i cant remember if that has ever happened to me. i have to thank you for giving me such a..i don't know what to say. i am flustered. thank you.

 

Fading Into Grey by PuckerUpRemus
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 170]

Summary: CHAPTER 10 COMING SOON!!! - THANKS EVERYONE FOR THE COMMENTS! Rating: PG-13



Do you think it’s easy to run from your family?



When Sirius Black is ten years old, everything in his life is black and white. He is a wizard. He is the heir to his most noble house. He is eager to please and willing to be everything his parents have ever dreamt for him.



Then, at Hogwarts with the ability to explore the world differently he starts to question what he has been taught his whole life and finds that even though he is a brilliant wizard and studies and most things come easy to him there is still so much he needs to learn about life outside of Grimmauld Place.



Follow along with me as Sirius Black’s world starts Fading Into Grey.



Disclaimer: not mine etc.





Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Abuse

Word count: 50774 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
02/13/06 Updated: 03/31/07


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 02/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - October 1970

Wonderful! Something made me click on your story and I’m still not sure exactly what it was. (It may have been your author name!) But it was probably your summary. You made it clear that I would be seeing a pre-Hogwarts view of Sirius and that he was going to show the influence of his upbringing in terms of self importance and superiority, and I was intrigued. (Although, I must disagree that Sirius is our favorite…that would be Remus, but this is your story…and Sirius is a close second so I over looked that. ;)) Anyway, I don’t normally review a summary, but I thought yours was one of the best I’ve seen. Only one tiny thing, when you say Sirius is the favorite, you put characterS. It should be singular. Nit picky, but the story, (at least the first chapter which is as far as I’ve gotten so far) is so well done, a little typo stands out.

Which brings me to your story; I agree with your other reviewers. I think showing Sirius with the prejudice that his family would have instilled in him is a stroke of brilliance. I think we often want to believe the characters we love are perfect and it isn’t easy to show when they have serious flaws, but it makes them so much more believable. Your portrayal is very realistic since children really are influenced by their parents, at least in the beginning. I adore the image I’m getting of Sirius and Regulas as brothers. Sirius playing with Regulas, tolerating him to a point as all older siblings do with their younger ones, then becoming a bit irritated, and of course, protecting his little brother, seems so real and has such a melancholy feel. I suppose it is the fact that I know what is to become of them, but the way you have written it is just lovely. I want to scoop them up and whisk them away from that wicked house and let them be happy and whole. You have made me very sad. Well done!

Again, the story is so beautifully written that I feel the need to point out minor technical flaws (things I probably wouldn’t even notice in a lower quality story, do you know what I mean?) I hope you don’t mind. I would like to see you italicize the Book titles Sirius reads in the library. A small detail that would only enhance the quality of your wonderful story. So, anyway, fabulous start to what I expect will be a great fic. I have a feeling I’m going to be sad a lot, which I probably should be in a Sirius centric fic, (there was more to him than good looks and pranks!) Thank you.

Author's Response: Wow! First of all, thank you so much for commenting (and what a comment it is!) I was having a bad week and this has totally made my day! First of all, the name PuckerUpRemus came to me…well, because if I saw Mr. Lupin, I’d walk right up to him, grab his lapels, say it, and then proceed to snog the man unconscious. But, seeing as he’s your favorite, please don’t hold that against me. Sirius is by far my favorite character (that doesn’t mean Remus doesn’t need some luvin’). I tend to love the dark, moody, “woe is me”, gorgeous types…it’s a curse. As to where the idea for this story came from, here’s the skinny of it: I have always wanted to READ a pre-Hogwarts Sirius/Regulus story but it seems no one has ever written one! Well, to the extent of ideas that were in my head anyway. When I first read OoTP, and Sirius mentioned Regulus as “My idiot brother…blah blah”, for some reason when I read that I felt there was a love between them at one time and Sirius had some deep regrets about the way their relationship ended. Almost as if he felt responsible that he could not convince his brother that their parent’s views were so wrong…because he was “soft enough to believe them”. I’ve read hundreds of stories where Regulus is an “idiot” and Sirius hates him, but no one has ever dove into the reasons or how their relationship faltered. This is going to get difficult to write, but I will keep plugging away. So thank you so much for the comments. I am so happy someone else agrees with the path I have (so far) led these characters on. Chapter 4 (Chapter 3 will be sent to the mods this weekend), that I’m working on currently, is rather difficult, because we find Sirius finally getting to school…and well, you’ll just have to read it to find out what happens! As for the grammar errors, I’m still learning this HTML stuff! I can’t get the stinking thing to italic. (Note: My PuckerUpRemus above is a test with < I > and < / I > so hopefully it’s working!) I want people to share all their thoughts, good or bad, so please don’t hesitate or apologize for pointing those items out! Thanks again soooooooo much!

Author's Response: Gack! The whole bloody thing is italics and that post was supposed to be three seperate paragraphs! LOL! I forgot responses were italics...but I will try the < i > < / i > in my next chapter post. Thanks again. And yes, I'm always this loony. =)

 

The End by lily_evans34
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 33]

Summary: This story is told in Cedric's POV before, and after, he dies. One shot, taking place the night of the Third Task.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1494 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/04/06 Updated: 06/08/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 07/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: The End

So, this is the third of your stories that I’ve now read, and I want to make a general observation of your work before moving onto this specific story. You don’t do a lot of fluff, do you? *winks*


This is another moving piece. First, I liked Cedric from the first time JKR introduced him to us during the Quidditch match in PoA when Cedric tries to get a rematch after Harry falls off his broom. Cedric was an honorable and genuinely nice guy. You further show that in this story, when he views the joint win with Harry as A Hogwarts victory. As it should be. While he still fantasizes about the eternal glory and fame, he isn’t so egotistical that he wants it all for himself. He is happy to share it with his school mate. Thank you for that. It would have been just as easy to have his inner thoughts portray a bitterness at having to share it, but that would have been OOC in my opinion. So well done.


I enjoyed the sense of confusion and then building panic when they landed in the graveyard. This is not good…that is very realistic. I can imagine that is exactly what any of us would have running through our minds. And I love the heartbreaking moment when Cedric realizes that he is the spare. From impending eternal glory, to being “the spare”, is a very long way to fall. I’m glad that the end came quickly for him, so that he didn’t have too long to dwell on it.

He looked hopelessly at Harry, writing on the ground. I’m pretty sure you meant for that to be writhing on the ground. While I’m giving concrit, I have this thing about author’s notes and separation from the body of the story. A very minor nitpick, but if you italicized the note/disclaimer and left spacing between the story, it would look much nicer. :)


You continue Cedric’s honorable characterization when he comes out of Voldemort’s wand. Rather than dwelling on what he had lost, he thinks of Harry and the need for him to be victorious in the battle over Voldemort’s evil. He was a good guy to the last. And another beautiful ending. Congratulations.


Author's Response: Hehe, I\'m not your average fluff gal. *Wink* Don\'t worry, I nit-pick the author\'s note/story thing, also. I can\'t believe I didn\'t do it this time! I\'ll fix that. And the writing thing has been pointed out; I just forgot to change it! I\'ll go do that. Thanks so much for the lovely review! I really appreciate it!

 

Let Go by lily_evans34
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 26]

Summary: Watching the wedding of the only man she has ever loved from the sidelines, Chloe knows that she needs to let go. But these things are always easier said than done.







Winner of the Challenge 3: Great Love for the June/July Monthly Challenge!

Edited: 5-27-07

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2403 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/22/06 Updated: 07/22/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 07/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Let Go

Oh, the heartbreak of unrequited love…especially when you are young and hopeful. :`( You have captured that very well. This was a lovely, moving story. In a very short space, you made me have feelings for a character I hadn’t known before. Well done.


Now those feelings varied, which is good. In some ways, I felt so sorry for her, but at other times, I wanted to slap her and say wake up; move on! And when she had the dignity to walk out on James, even when she didn’t want to, I was proud of her. That is a good sign that she is more than a one-sided character.


I do have a couple of quibbles. I don’t mind the idea of Sirius flirting with her, as I have no problems thinking about him being a bit of a ladies man. I don’t think of him as comically and overtly flirtatious, though. Remus says everyone thought Sirius (along with James) was the “height of cool.” The thought of him “waving like an idiot” doesn’t quite fit that image. Also, in the part of the sorting, I rather felt that the descriptions you gave of James and Sirius were reversed. Of course, being from the POV of someone with a crush on James, perhaps her view of him is distorted. Still, if there was anything I would change to improve this lovely story, it would be those two things.



You know, the thing I like the best about this story has to be the notion that no matter how smart a person is, and no matter how many different people she/he could date, there is not much they can do about their feelings. There is often no explanation for why one person falls for another. Chloe knew James didn’t care for her, knew she could date others, but she couldn’t change her feelings. Even when he was a big jerk and hurt her, she still didn’t get over him. It took the finality of him marrying another woman to get her to finally move on. You have done such a lovely job with her; I hope she moves on to happier things. Again, well done. :)


Author's Response: Wow, thanks! About the Sirius comment; I agree. That was a bit rash of him. And thanks for the comments. What I like the best about this story is exactly what you said in the last paragraph. You did a great job explaining it! Thank you for the lovely review!

 

I Never Knew You by lily_evans34
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary: She had never known what to say to her sister. But now that she is ready, it is too late.

Andromeda one shot.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1912 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/22/06 Updated: 07/22/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 07/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: I Never Knew You

Well, I can see why you are so proud of this story. The imagery is lovely and the emotion comes screaming off of the page. I love the sense of desperation you have given Andromeda. You make me empathize with her sense of loss for the sisterly love she would have liked to have, but didn’t, and never will. Very touching. I love this: Should she mourn for the loss of her sister, or should she rejoice that there was less evil in the world? What a terrible conflict. I love that you have her shed a tear. It truly would be very painful to know that a family member, someone you probably loved at least on some level, took a path that lead to their destruction, even if they did it willingly and enthusiastically, as Bellatrix did.



Nit picks: First, I think you should make a space between the author’s note and the body of the fic. That was distracting and I didn’t know I had actually started the story. It is such a lovely story; it should look lovely as well, and have a definite beginning. Also, italicizing the letter would be a good idea. A minor typo: It was as isolated spot as should be an.


Finally,

She couldn’t help but feel that it was Bellatrix, even in death, brushing her thoughts away once more.

On this line, all I can say is exquisite! You could not have ended on a more poignant and perfect note. Wonderfully done!


Author's Response: Thanks for the nitpicks, and glad you liked the story! I always put a space between the author\'s note and the fic; that must have gotten screwed up when I was editing something. I\'ll fix it now, thanks! So glad you liked it. The last sentence is my favorite, too!

 

Let sleeping wolves lie by Foxy Wolf
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: A poem of Remus Lupin's first love at Hogwarts. James and Sirius, being the true Marauders they are, tease him about his feelings. Remus ignores his friends and enjoys the secret rendevouzs but knows he'll always be doomed when it comes to loving someone else.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 131 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/23/06 Updated: 07/25/06


Reviewer: moonymaniac Signed
Date: 01/31/10 Title: Chapter 1: Let sleeping wolves lie

I could read this poem over and over. In fact, I periodically do. That is why it is on my favorites list. ;) I should have told you how wonderful it is long ago. I could have sworn I did, but I had recommended it somewhere and must have confused that with a review. *blush* Forgive me. Anyway, you have worked magic with these words. The lines are so descriptive, not only telling a story but painting a lovely and bittersweet picture of Remus’ young love. You have captured this all just as I imagine it would be. And the end…my heart breaks. You really have a gift. You have done in only 131 words what it has taken me some 340,000+ to try to do. :*/ I’m in awe. Thank you for sharing this.

 
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