I am currently 18 years old and I live in the U.S.
Some of my favorite authors are J.K. Rowling (of course), Eoin Colfer, C.S. Lewis, J.R.R. Tolkein, Rick Riordan, Eva Ibbotson and countless others I'm forgetting right now.
I like to read, write, act, and sing. I also hope to start dancing again very soon.
So... that should be good for now.
AL: Ch. 23 is up, and Ch. 24 is in the works.
Shopgirl: Ch. 3 is in the works.
I have to say I really loved this poem. It made me laugh.... a lot. It really makes Harry look like a bit of a player, which he isn't really. I enjoyed that part, because it is probably how the other students view the Quidditch star, smart, player Harry Potter. Thanks for this poem.
This is really well written -- I like it. The premise is really good... Nicely done.
Hi. I've been reading this for the past couple days, and I thought this would be a good time to leave a review. This story... it's really good. It takes the three pages or so of normal life at Shell Cottage that were in DH and expands them quite nicely. I like what you've done with it.
In particular, I like your characterization. Luna and Hermione stood out to me in this chapter. I loved Luna in the "Ron's in love" part. You managed to get her breezy but direct manner of speaking, and that's hard to do. Also, it is very like Hermione to get upset when she fails at fixing Ron's face.
Author's Response: Hi Olivia! What a nice surprise to see you are reading this. :) I'm so glad you felt the characterization is good, particularly Luna, as she is one I struggle with getting right. I think it's a bit easier in a scene with several characters, and she can just interject now and then. I would have a hard time writing something Luna-centric. Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! ~Lori
Oh my goodness.... wow. That was a great almost-kiss. I laughed so hard when Harry interrupted them.
Um, the only thing I saw was that I'm not sure if Hermione would say "S'okay". I mean, she usually enunciates pretty clearly in the books. But I'm just nitpicking.
Author's Response: Poor Ron and Hermione. It's almost cliche for their kisses to get interupted, but I just couldn't resist. They may have better luck before this thing is over. ;) Nitpicking is good! I'm so glad you mentioned it, and I completely agree. I do include those kind of slurs for Ron b/c we see them in the book. But you are right in that it doesn't fit Hermione. I've changed it now... thanks again for pointing it out!
Psi, this story is written beautifully. Throughout, you really capture the sense of betrayal that most of Andromeda's family and the Slytherins felt when she left them and secretly married a Muggleborn. I also enjoyed how it was very poetic.
I thought the fact that you had absolutely no dialogue was quite unique, and suited the piece well. And I liked the detail of Fluffy the cat, and how powerful it was that you used him in the dream. Andromeda's fear about Tonks looking like Bella is also well-done.
The only real critique I have is that I think you should read it through one more time and really nit-pick. There were a few little punctuation errors, and a couple times you actually left words out that were necessary to understand a phrase. To fix this, you could just read through it out loud, pause where you have all the commas, and look for instances where a phrase doesn't flow.
Thanks for this, Psi! I enjoyed reading it.
Thank you so much for your review. I do have a tendency to miss out words - I thought I had caught them all, but I will defintely give it another read through! I worried that the poetic style was a bit too much/overdone, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I really love this. You really captured baby love well. I personally haven't experienced it - I'm far too young for babies - but you showed it in a way that a person who wasn't a member of the parents' club could get it.
I liked the use of the shorter paragraphs. It drove home the points you made better than if it had been one continuous ramble.
Author's Response: Olivia Thanks for the review. This is one of the shortest things Iíve written, and it was simply and attempt to capture the emotions of baby love. Iím happy that you think that Iíve succeeded. Neil
I think you've done an excellent job with this story. The way you shape phrases is quite lovely. I really enjoyed the character of Song Feng. She's very capable as a gymnast and proud of it, but also shockingly normal. I thought you wrote the decision to attend the Southern School very well, and I really felt Feng's difficulty in choosing to give up everything she's ever known... again.
I enjoyed the way you walked us through the first years of Feng's life. This is very easy to make boring or clunky, and you made it a legitimate narrative. I particularly liked the scene of Feng breaking her ankle.
One last note -- I loved the references to Chinese culture and gymnastics. I didn't know about that ritual of honoring one's ancestors, with the burning of incense and heaven and hell money. I knew rather more about gymnastics, but I hadn't really had an inside view of it like this.
Oh, and I like Zhu-ge Liang. A lot. He's Dumbledorian, but is still definitely his own character.
Hahahaha, brilliant, Carole! Thanks so much for this.
The way you used sibling rivalry in this makes me giggle quite a lot. I can just imagine James being all glee-ful that he deterred Lily from dating Greg, and when he discovers Scorpius... ;).
And of course, I really like the High tie-ins. The apple, and the hat.... Very well done.
Thanks for the birthday present, Carole! I really, truly appreciate it.
Author's Response: The hat is a tie-in with Natalie's picture, really. Knitted by Molly of course. Glad you liked your birthday presnt. ~Carole~
P.S. I also wanted to add -- thanks for this.
"James had been right about him. Anyone who could be put off asking her out by a stupid remark from her brother wasn’t boyfriend material. Obviously, Greg only wanted a well-behaved, limpet of a girlfriend.
“Genetically it could never work,” she sighed, somewhat dramatically. “Two sets of grandparents have seen to that.”"
I sort of needed that.
Author's Response: Limpet girls are irritating.
The funeral of Andromeda Tonks was a strange affair, thought Lily Potter. It was hard to understand how so many people could send her off into the next life yet seem to mourn her so little. Or maybe it was just a stark reminder of what it truly meant to die.
But someone understood how she really felt, if only just a little.
This fic is a sort of sequel to one of my other stories, All the Time in the World. It's not necessary to read it, but allusions to events do occur.
And how about a Happy Birthday to Olivia/Apollonious! :D
Oh my goodness, Jess. I love it!
I do recognize that this is quite different from your usual style, but it's very good nonetheless. I really enjoyed how Scorpius and Lily indulged in such childish antics to avoid confronting their grief (or at least Lily's grief). I also loved, how, in the end, Lily ended up facing her grief anyways.
Thanks for this truly great birthday present. I really appreciate it. :D
Well, since Scolily isn't my normal ship, I tried to avoid too much shippiness, but after much stalking, I found that it was a pairing you enjoy. And, of course, adding in some Potter family angstiness doesn't hurt.
I have no idea if you read the fic in which I killed Teddy, but hopefully that didn't throw off the story at all. I started out with a completely different idea for this story, but as I began writing, it took on a life of its own.
Anyway, happy birthday once again, and I hope you had fun and got some spiffing stuff. :D