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I am the same Inverarity you may have seen on the Beta Forums, and other sites as well. I am an older HP fan, and prefer not to give out too much other personal information.

Reviews are greatly appreciated; I don't usually respond to them individually, but I do read them all. I'll answer questions when possible.

You can find information about my stories and characters on the Harry Potter Fanon wiki. (There is also a separate Alexandra Quick wiki.) Be aware, however, that most of it was written by fans, not by me, so the information there is not coming directly from the author and might not always be correct.

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Summary: Severus has never seen the appeal of repetition, particularly of things that ended badly the first time. In his life, he has kept one pet, owned one broom, and had one close friend.

Winner of Mod Quicksilver Quill for Best Novel! Thanks, all!

Rating and warnings do not apply to all chapters; I just didn't want anyone hooked and then shocked.


"What is it?" His mother held out her hand, and he put the letter in it wordlessly. "Are you eleven already?"

His father lowered the newspaper to look at the calendar. "Yesterday. ‘Appy birthday." And that was the end of that.


Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Dubious Consent, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Slash, Violence

Word count: 132470 Chapters: 46 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/05/05 Updated: 03/06/06


Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 08/31/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Letter

This is a very promising beginning, well written and in character for Snape. I hope it lives up to its promise, showing us a complex but not prettified or glorified Severus Snape.

"His mother was most likely what her classmates had needed to practice defence against."

Heh. I like that line. Severus already has that dry, acerbic wit.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 08/31/08 Title: Chapter 2: Soap on the Hogwarts Express

And from such small childhood idiocies, tragedy follows.

 

Challah and Pumpkin Juice by Calico
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 119]

Summary: Tzipporah Stein, a Jew living in Vienna, Austria on the eve of WWII, is shocked when she gets a letter telling her she is a witch. The volatile state of Europe as it waits for both a muggle and a wizarding war to begin has prompted Hogwarts to take in students from many countries. How will Tzipporah handle magic, mischief, and even a little romance while trying to be true to her religion and culture at the same time?

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 32994 Chapters: 16 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/24/08 Updated: 07/26/08


Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/08/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One: The Letter

After two chapters, I'm hooked. This is very well-written, the characters likeable, and your attention to culture and historical detail quite impressive.
 I look forward to seeing how Tzipporah fits in at Hogwarts; there aren't many stories that deal with witches and wizards from different cultures in a realistic fashion.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/05/08 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter Fourteen: The Coming of the Wars

That was beautiful. What a charming, bittersweet ending. I can see how wrapping it up with an epilogue that can do it justice will be a challenge; part of me wishes you would write more stories about Zippie and Edward, but I think this one was pretty complete. This has definitely made it to my small list of all-time favorite fanfics.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/08/08 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Four: Aboard the Hogwarts Express

I continue to be impressed by the subtle way you interweave history into the story without overloading us with exposition. The OCs are very nice too, particularly the names (one thing I hate in a lot of OC stories is names that sound silly, out of place, or poorly thought out).
 I also like that you are using some canon names, but not right away trying to make everyone Tzipporah meets be the grandfather/grandmother of one of the central HP characters.

Author's Response: Thanks! Sometimes I feel like my characters named themselves. The name Tzipporah was meant to stand out, but the rest I intended to sound just odd enough to be wizarding names, or else muggle names from the 1940\'s. I also had a lot of fun picking out canon surnames, just to keep my readers guessing.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/23/08 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter Thirteen: Betrayed

That was an exciting chapter, and it was nice to see so many other students coming to Tzipporah's rescue. The idea of Hitler Youth Muggle-born wizards never occurred to me. The wizarding world's ignorance of Muggle culture explains why none of the teachers thought to do anything about the swastikas.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/26/08 Title: Chapter 16: Epilogue

This was a really marvelous story. The epilogue felt a little rushed, trying to cover so many years and events in one chapter, but it tied everything together nicely. Rowling has told us so little about James's parents; they are relatively unexplored territory in fanfic. But it's amusing to learn that James Potter was, in fact, Jewish (since his mother was). One wonders if he was actually raised Jewish -- wouldn't Tzipporah have insisted on it?

For an Orthodox girl, Tzipporah seems awfully modern (becoming an Auror?), but then, she was eleven when she went to Hogwarts, and lost a lot of her connections to her faith, so perhaps she became less Orthodox over time.

There is so much glossed over here that could have become another story, or several stories, but I guess you've brought Edward and Zippie's tale to a close. I hope you have something else in the works!



Author's Response: I can see what you mean about the epilogue being rushed - I sensed that too, but I didn't want to leave any of it out because, like you said, it tied everything together just the way I wanted it. I purposely left out any mention of how Tzipporah and Edward chose to raise James (Jewish or not) because I couldn't decide that myself. You're absolutely right about Tzipporah becoming less Orthodox in her years at Hogwarts, simply because she had very few ways of staying connected to her religion and culture. She might have let a lot of things go...or she might not have. I'll let my readers decide.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/17/08 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter Twelve: Matzah and Mistakes

How sinister! And I like that you are not automatically makng all the villains Slytherin. I really like the budding romance between Tzipporah and Edward, though at eleven, she does seem a little young.

I noticed one typo, where "do" should be "due to."

Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response: Thank you for the typo spotting! It\'s fixed now. I intentionally didn\'t make my villains Slytherins, because Slytherins would almost definitely be purebloods, and therefore it is unlikely that they would have been exposed to Nazism. The \"budding romance\" is really meant to be more like friendship at this point, exactly for the reason you mentioned - they\'re too young to be in love. But it important to remember that friendship can easily become something else; after all, Ron and Hermione became friends in their first year, and look how that turned out...

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/10/08 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter Nine: Chanukah Revelations

This was a beautifully written chapter.  (Actually, they have all been beautifully written, but this one stood out.) Tzipporah's reluctance to tell her friends, as frustrating as it has been for us readers, is just so believable, especially for an eleven year-old girl. And every line of dialog in her conversation with Clarice was perfect.

I love the way you are developing each character, letting the story build without rushing it.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/10/08 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter Eleven: The Detention

This line:

"Edward looked as though he had just bowed to a hippogriff and was waiting to see if it would bow back."

is just so cute, so brilliant, and so perfectly Harry Potter!

This story is beautiful and touching and sweet, and one of the best works of fanfiction I've read. It's a wonderful children's story, and good enough to be published. I hope you are going to try to write professionally. It blew my mind when you mentioned AP exams in a previous chapter's end notes and I realized you're still in high school!

I would say something about looking forward to the next chapter (which I am), but I'd rather you take your time and update when ready, rather than "update soon." Just please do finish the story!



Author's Response: Actually, that line wasn\'t in this chapter at all until it got rejected (my very first rejection - I wanted to throw my computer out the window). Then while I was editing the idea just popped into my head. Writing professionally...if I could do that I think I\'d die of happiness. Sometimes I consider just dropping out of high school and starting my bestseller - but then I remember that I need a backup plan in case my bestseller isn\'t a bestseller. But I can promise you that this story will be finished. The next chapter\'s in the queue, and the rest is all written and ready for posting, except for the epilogue, which I have rewritten three times but is still not quite right. And one last thing - I love your story Alexandra Quick and the Thorn Circle! It rocks!

 

Witch Envy by HellFromPeeves
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: Mai lived in a Muggle household - until the age of eleven. Her world is turned upside down when she gets her Hogwarts acceptance letter - and not for the better. Afterwards, her mother becomes obsessive, her sister refuses to talk to her, and her father leaves to avoid his "freak of a daughter".

Mai struggles to find out where she belongs, caught between the worlds of Muggle and magic.

Prequel and companion to Mischief Never Managed.
(Reading 'Mischief' is not necessary for understanding this fic. However, it is recommended ;D)



(Some emotional abuse, and mild substance abuse. Sexual situation warning applies to chapter four only)



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse

Word count: 7124 Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/09/08 Updated: 06/30/08


Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/30/08 Title: Chapter 4: Sarah Kate

This was an interesting, sad story, and it's piqued my interest enough that I might read your other one. It could have been a really good story, except that so much was compressed into such a small amount of time, the change in personalities seemed abrupt and unrealistic. The way Mai's entire family implodes and everyone stops caring about everyone else could have been much more believable (and just as tragic), but in four chapters, it just appeared that everyone gave up right away. Mai's poor mother seems to be suffering from depression, which is the only explanation for not even trying to curb her youngest daughter's dangerous behavior. Mai seems to be in complete denial.

I felt sorry for all of them, and wanted to smack all of them at the same time. I wonder if they will reconcile someday, as teenagers estranged from their parents and siblings often do once they put a few years behind them.



Author's Response: Glad you want to read my other story. Other than that, I must point to my last author\'s response. I certainly agree that a lot (and probably way too much) was covered in a very short period.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/30/08 Title: Chapter 2: Return From Paradise

This is an interesting perspective on Muggle-borns going to Hogwarts, and I like that you are making the canon characters only peripherally involved. Mai's mother does seem a little quick to accept the idea of her daughter going off to an unknown school and learn things she sees no evidence of, and her father's abrupt coldness towards her seems extremely harsh. But it makes for a poignant story.

Author's Response: I certainly understand your point of view, and I would definitely say I agree. My only \'excuse\' is that this story was originally going to be a one-shot side-project, so the pace and reactions ended up magnified (perhaps a bit beyond belief) in order to quicken things up so I could get back to the main story. I admit, I probably should have spent a bit more time working on this fic than I actually did. :/

 

Marissa and the Wizards by JCCollier
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 75]

Summary: Past Featured StoryTwo years after Voldemort's downfall, Headmistress McGonagall finds a puzzling decrease in new Muggle-born students. Consulting the magic Quill, she and Flitwick find even wizarding children being born without magical ability. Each year fewer students are listed. If the decline continues, within decades the classrooms of Hogwarts will be half empty. Concerned how far the problem spreads, McGonagall sends a message to the Quill schools of the other continents.

In Brazil, the world of magic is revealed to a young homeless girl. When Marissa cautiously accepts an education in the wizarding world, the choice will lead her to an object somehow tied to the unknown cause of the wizarding decline. But as she struggles to show any ability at all, she is unsure if she even belongs in their world. What role can a neglected street beggar have in events that wizarding schools of all the world may soon be part of?


Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 108625 Chapters: 14 Completed: No
Published:
06/16/08 Updated: 07/02/13


Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 10/15/08 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Feathers and Broomsticks

I liked the description of the classes -- it made the chapter long and full of exposition, but Witness Stone is so different from Hogwarts, it's wonderful to see how much thought you have put into describing each class.

The last few chapters have mostly been about introducing us to Marissa's world, and the cast of characters, so it's nice to see the story getting back to the main plot. The wizarding world clearly has no shortage of prejudices to overcome, even after the fall of Voldemort.

I like that you are including friends and foes from each house, rather than having a "good" house and a "bad house." The distinguishing characteristics of each house are starting to be more clear, whereas in previous chapters I could never remember what the differences between them were, other than arbitrary mascots.

Marissa is still my favorite character, of course. She still has that delightful combination of street-smart toughness and childlike innocence. It's nice that she's starting to develop bonds of friendship, albeit slowly and cautiously. She's tough and brave (she'd totally be a Gryffindor at Hogwarts), but she's got a lot of weaknesses as well.

I'm seeing much smoother writing, too. You have a marvelous way of capturing Marissa's unsophisticated way of thinking. The only sentence that really bugged me this time was "...she added it to her mind’s list of best things to learn." I know Marissa probably doesn't know the term "mental list," but here it reads like an awkwardly constructed phrase, not like Marissa's thoughts.



Author's Response: Thank you as always for the comments. My biggest concern with my last few chapters is whether they are proceeding too slowly, but I just couldn't find anything I wanted to skip or cut out. The pace of the story will pick up now to get past the one chapter equals one day it has been so far. Thanks for pointing out the sticky phrase. I do try to write her thoughts in simple words. Would 'she kept it in her head' rather than 'she added it to her mind's list' sound more Marissa-like?

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/02/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - The Streets of Sao Paulo

That was marvelous. You must either know Brazil well, or have done a lot of reading to capture the plight of Brazilian street children so poignantly. Marissa is already a wonderful and sympathetic character, and I can only wonder how she will reconcile going to a wizarding school to learn magic with leaving her friends behind on the streets.

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review. Harry had a miserable life with the Dursley\'s, but we all know there are many children in this world who live an even more unfortunate existence. That is where I drew Marissa from.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/04/13 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - She Has An Air About Her

Well, it wasn't a two-year wait for the next chapter this time!

I'm so happy to see Marissa's story continuing, even if I wish she'd make some progress. This chapter was very enjoyable, with more magical wonders and more of Marissa's interaction with her friends and enemies. But she's been struggling to do magic and enduring hexes from the Anacondas for several chapters now. I wonder if her magical gifts are truly "wandless," but I still remember how that one wand responded to her way back in an early chapter.

The Witness Stone teachers are as frustrating as the Hogwarts professors, with allowing all this bigotry and bullying to go on right under their noses.

It was nice to see the Condas get some payback. And a hint of romance for Marissa! Surely not a love triangle for 11-year-olds? :D

Please don't stop - it is my hope that we will eventually see this story complete.

Author's Response: Yes, I feel I'm really reaching breakneck writing speed now (or not). And yes Marissa is taking too much time to find some wand ability, but that's the fault of my story pacing. Maybe the next chapter will help her change that a bit. Thank you so much for your constant reviews.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 01/29/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - A Bird's Eye View

Maybe it's only Marissa's MageMart wand that's holding her back, but I think there is some other barrier she needs to overcome. I love her unique talent. ("Avian legilimency"?) Now the question is whether this is just a unique character trait of hers, or will it prove somehow crucial?

I also really like the added details about the Quills and the legend of Jaguating. Beyond Marissa's tale, you have a crisis affecting the entire wizarding world. I can't wait to see how Marissa figures into it, but will this really be resolved in one book, or are you planning more Marissa stories? :)

I like how Anna and Sakura are becoming distinct personalities, and of course now I am curious to learn Anna's full story. Potira's possessiveness (and jealousy of Marissa's bond with Flap-Flap) is cute, but could be trouble later. (Is it too early to start shipping Marissa and Tiquinho? Heheh.)

I really have no criticisms to offer about this chapter, other than a few typos. This remains my favorite story on MNFF, and I'll be eagerly awaiting the next chapter.



Author's Response: No criticisms but a few typos? Surely the person who gives the most thorough, objective excerpt critiques on the beta forums can find some poorly constructed sentences somewhere in my overlong chapters! I do think you give the best advice to all our developing writers (not that they always listen to it, of course). I admit that Marissa's adventures are planned out further than just this story, so not every plotline will be tied up neatly at the end (some will just be tangled up unneatly). Thank you for your review.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/08/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - An Invitation From a Witch

I like that you're not glossing over the complexities of Marissa's situation, and that Professory Merrythought, while wise and well-intentioned, is clearly a bit oblivious to many aspects of Muggle existence. Marissa is sure to question some of what she learns as she enters the wizarding world -- how can she resist the temptation to use her magic to help her boys?

 

This story is becoming one of my favorites. And I love Marissa's swallows!

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 06/24/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - The Tale of the Quill

This is a very intriguing beginning, with a creative premise and an original setting. I look forward to seeing where you go with it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I hope I can make it as interesting as your Alex story (although I don\'t think I can update quite as fast).

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 07/10/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - The Fork in the Road

I'm so glad she was able to make the decision to go to school without alienating her friends. But I think it will be harder than she thinks not to become disconnected from the world she left.

Mr. Palito is interesting, and I suspect he knows a lot more than Marissa thinks he does.



Author's Response: Thanks again to my most loyal reviewer. I guess I\'ll assume everyone else loves it so much or hates it so much that they can\'t find words to express... LOL.

 
Reviewer: Inverarity Signed
Date: 09/04/08 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Choosing More Teams Than Two

I really like Saci! And your houses are great -- they aren't like Hogwarts houses at all, but their divisions and traditions still make sense.

It looks like Marissa is making friends with those who are ignored and dismissed, and she's staying strong despite her trials. I'm glad not everyone is cruel to her. This story is still brilliantly creative, and I can't wait to see what classes are like at Witness Stone.



Author's Response: Thank you for your constant reviews. I really appreciate your comments every chapter. I've seen your excellent writing critiques in the beta forums. If you ever feel like pointing out errors and negatives in any chapter for my benefit, you have my open invitation.

 
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