Summary: For once in her life, Hermione is faced with a problem she does not know how to solve...
Greatly enjoyed reading your story thus far. In answer to your plea for a story summary, I'm enclosing my version done in the style of a bookjacket teaser. It's yours to do with as you will, tweek to your heart's content.
A Sleepwalk to Remember – Sample Summary
Hermione Granger has always met challenges head-on. Now in her seventh year and determined to continue her studies to become a Potions Mistress, she arranges for advance training from Severus Snape. As she strains valiantly into the wee hours of the morning to complete her assignments, it becomes increasingly unclear whether she seeks to capture this taciturn man’s attention based on her latest project or simply as a woman. Much to her embarrassment, the ambivalence in her heart begins to manifest in episodes of sleepwalking. Wandering outside the safety of the castle walls, she is abducted by dark forces necessitating a desperate rescue by an unlikely hero. Forced to flee to a remote locale, Hermione and Snape must come face to face with Death Eaters as well as their growing feeling for one another. As the Minister of Magic continues to deny Voldemort’s return in the face of conflicting information, one valiant member of the Order of the Phoenix will be forced to pay the ultimate price.
Author's Response: ahhhh, that summary is awesome! thanks so much!! do you mind if i just use parts of it? i want to try and keep the summary relatively short. but yay! thanks again! this is really awesome :D :D
Summary: After fighting the biggest battle of his life, Harry Potter finds himself in new, uncharted territory. Beginning a week after the final battle at Hogwarts, Harry finds himself with many choices before him. He spent the summer trying to sort out his future with Ginny and the Ministry, but now must find a way to balance both. Ginny has left for Hogwarts to complete her final year, with Hermione, and Harry is starting work as a full-fledged Auror. They both must find a way to make their long-distance relationship work. Ginny hopes to find peace at school and Harry hopes to build his life around the expectation that Ginny will be with him forever. Despite all of this, there is more to the work that Harry is doing with the Ministry then he realises. Will Gaunt prove trustworthy in these new endeavours? Will Ginny and Hermione have a horror-free year at Hogwarts?
I think all of us writers share your frustration with the queue. The only suggestion I can give is to perhaps combine a few of your chapters so that you are submitting more at once. It won't cut down on the wait time, but you will feel like you're accomplishing more each time.
Author's Response: you know, I've been thinking about that for a long time and wondering if shouldn't just do that, but then that compromises the specific pacing I created, just because these mods don't care to validate in a more timely fashion? I mean, I just don't understand it...and yet they keep adding 'new features' but can't do the simple stuff on a regular basis. It's funny, I used to be a mod at War of the Ring and now I get what people were always saying about who's watching the watchers...I guess the mods here can do what they like and we have no recourse but to be at their mercy ;) such is life :)
Summary: The only things Teddy Lupin knows about his parents come from the memories of others. On his seventeenth birthday he will finally have a memory of his own.
Author's Response: Thank you
PoA era: Severus Snape takes a thoughtful stroll down Diagon Alley at the start of the Christmas holidays, but it soon turns into a quite a harrowing ordeal for our favourite Potions Master... UK English. Contains some dark humour. You have been warned!
Characters: Severus Snape, Fred Weasley, George Weasley, Ginny Weasley, Molly Weasley, Percy Weasley and (very) minor OC's.
At the risk of showing myself to be equally twisted, let me congratulate you on capturing Severus’ unique brand of dark humor to a “T”. This was seriously funny! What always amazes me about the man is that his students would so get a kick out of his scathing commentary (as long as it wasn’t directed at them), if only he could ever let his guard down. The only thing that could improve this delightful diatribe is having it read aloud in Alan Rickman’s inimitable baritone drawl.
Hello L A Moody,
*blush* What lovely comments! And I almost fainted in happiness at the thought of Alan Rickman reading it aloud. But then I woke up and realised it was only a sweet dream. Reality sucks...
That being said, I'm glad we share the same brand of 'unique' humour. It was a lot of fun trying to view the world through Snape's eyes and I do agree with you that most of his students would have a right good giggle if he opened up a bit.
Thanks very much for R & R-ing and leaving such nice comments. Feedback on my fics always makes my day!
Kara's Aunty :)
Survival. Separation. Reunion. Death cannot stop true love; all it can do is delay it for a while.
*A DH alternate ending story.*
Love the name of the pub: The Sleazy Kneazle. Musical even.
Author's Response: Thank you! I made up the pub for a post-epilogue George fic and couldn't resist using it again. :)
Summary: In his school years, Remus Lupin became known as a "bookworm": Where he went, he usually went with something to read. But those weren't textbooks, as many of his fellow students originally thought – they were books of great adventures, of other worlds, that drew him in and let him forget about his worries.
But how did this boy grow to love, even to need books so much? When Remus Lupin was a child, there was little he could do; his overprotective father never let him go outside on his own, and least of all was he allowed to play with other children. But he had other friends – he had his books, to take him far away, to different places.
Until one day, a stranger arrives at the Lupins' doorstep, and he might not need his books to find a different world anymore after all.
Just now discovered this little gem and am already hooked after just two chapters! But, of course, I love anything having to do with Remus, if you couldn’t have already guessed. Am so pleased that you see him so similarly to the way I do: he’s definitely the counterpart to Hermione in the Marauders, only he reads literature not textbooks. Despite their book learning, Remus has a poet’s soul, which Hermione does not.
Dumbledore was very believable and playful. He truly came across as being eternally young at heart. Remus’ inner voice was also well rendered and believable for an eleven year old. I assume you will be giving him much more complicated thoughts as he matures. I suppose that’s what makes him such an interesting character to write. You know that even though he’s the “quiet one”, there’s a lot going on in his head that he keeps to himself.
Compliments on a truly engaging summary that really drew my attention. This is an area that is overlooked far too often.
My absolute favorite phrase: a curiosity only children could bear without embarrassment.
Author's Response: Eep – I only just read your name a couple hours ago and now you left me a review! Well thank you for that first of all, it's really great to know that you enjoyed the story so far! It's so weird for me that people tell me I did well with Dumbledore, but I feel so great about that :D I'm glad that you thought I did a good job on Remus so far – I hope I can keep that up. Thank you so much for your review - it made me go all warm and fuzzy inside!
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]
Summary: Aberforth Dumbledore was once infamous throughout the land for casting Inappropriate Charms on goats. He never responded to the claims, never gave his side of the story and lived with an odd reputation for decades.
But now he wants to set the record straight before Rita Skeeter has a chance to twist things furthur awry.
This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Stirring category for the Winter Snows 09 competition on the MNFF Beta Boards.
I am not JK Rowling. Does that honestly surprise anyone!
This story won the 2010 QSQ Best Humour Fic - I'm still in shock.
Thank you to Hannah (coolh5000) for beta'ing this fic.
Very entertaining. What a fabulous take on just a snippet of information in canon. It had that perfect blend of humorous irony that peppers real life. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Poor old Aberforth, he never quite lived down the 'goat charming'.
Summary: Severus waits alone in a park to make the ultimate choice - Voldemort or Love? But, of course, Severus can decide only when he gets there first.
I thank my LJ pals for their love, support and sense of humour.
DISCLAIMER: I am not J.K.Rowling; she would be mortified if she read this.
As much as I know you’re going to hate to hear this, but JKR is famous for taking little things that we have assumed to mean one thing and twisting them into something quite different. Just look at all those overheard conversations that are out of context the first time we read them. As a thought-provoking spin on the animosity between Severus and James this really follows Jo’s template. Just think of the new reasons for Severus to hate James: for dying on him, for marrying Lily (which would have been a double-betrayal, I suppose).
Just so we’re clear, I don’t support this ship, either. But there’s no doubt you have presented a viable, if unexpected, interpretation. Please don’t hate me for playing the devil’s advocate.
Author's Response: No, no! I don't hate hearing sound theories like yours. I do love James Potter and I certainly do not hate Severus Snape. :) It's just I get mad when people make the latter out to be more than he is. *shrug* Yes, I agree that JKR does have that streak; she is constantly surprising her readers.
"Just think of the new reasons for Severus to hate James: for dying on him, for marrying Lily (which would have been a double-betrayal, I suppose)."
This made me laugh because I was thinking about the same thing while I was writing. :D
Thanks for the interesting review! I certainly don't hate you for playing the devil's advocate. :)
Summary: The seven men who loved Hermione Granger.
Very well done! Each character brought their own voice to it. I think I'd like to see this same treatment with the less obvious characters such as Snape, Sirius and, of course, Remus.
Author's Response: Thank you! I've considered doing it with less obvious characters, but the problem with that is we don't know as many people who mean something to them, so I would have to bring in OCs, which I don't think is as much fun.
Summary: What if Harry had a Godmother? And she was a Muggle? This story starts at the beginning of Order of the Phoenix and will be as canon-compliant as possible. This fan fiction will lead to a romance between Severus and the Godmother, an original character.
I can’t tell you how much I’ve been enjoying this story and the recent updates – the anticipation would’ve just been too much otherwise. Wanted to go back and leave my comments on this particular chapter, though, as it’s my favorite so far. Severus’ double-entendres are absolutely priceless, especially when his subconscious keeps surprising him. That alone underlines how far he’s out of his depth here. Still, it’s nice to see that you’ve drawn Celie as just the sort of woman who appreciates his caustic sarcasm.
I wouldn’t worry too much about deviating from canon with respect to Severus’ love life. JKR’s version where he pines away inconsolably for Lily – and Lily, alone – was rather unrealistic, to my way of thinking. It’s only human nature to try again, even if he stumbles uncertainly due to his past scars. It’s just one more aspect of the man’s prickly nature that a woman would have to navigate – and thus, fits his profile perfectly.
Author's Response: Hello again, LA Moody! I'm so excited to see that you're still reading the story! :) Thank you for such a complimentary and comprehensive review! I always appreciate input from readers, especially when the reviews are as detailed as yours. I am glad to hear that Chapter 14, Part II was your favorite chapter- I didn't receive too many comments on this chapter and I was worried that it was a flop. I am completely enamored with Snape's sarcastic tongue and am very relieved (and ecstatic) to hear that you thought his lines were "priceless." :) Also, thank you for your validation of the whole Severus-Celie relationship. Initially, I was worried that some readers would not care for the deviation from the canon, in regards to Snape "getting over" Lily, so it is refreshing to hear that you, along with other readers, are okay with this change. Thanks for spending the time to tell me your thoughts and I hope you continue to enjoy the story! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Good beginning, pulled me in immediately. I particularly liked the way you used your OC to draw Lucius Malfoy’s attention to Snuffles. Now we know how he spotted Sirius-in-disguise as is mentioned in canon. We were never told how Lucius learned that Sirius was an Animagus, though, but perhaps your story will lead to that. I always thought that was a gross oversight in JKR’s narrative. After all, not even Dumbledore knew the Marauders were unregistered Animagi until the conclusion of PoA.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! That was an interesting point that you made about how Lucius knew that Sirius was disguised in his Animagus form. In this story, there will not be a direct explanation of that event; I am merely trying to tie in as many canon events into my story, in meaningful ways, as possible. Hope you enjoy Chapter 2, which should be validated any day now! Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
I was wondering when someone would take advantage of Severus’ words in PS that he could teach students how to “put a stopper in death”. That is the back-up plan he’s worked out to guarantee his continuing good health, isn’t it? It also gladdens me that his plotting with Lucius behind the scenes means that your story won’t end in total tragedy for Celie’s marriage. Always thought that as self-serving as Slytherins were supposed to be, it didn’t follow that they would play the tragic hero and sacrifice themselves in battle “for the greater good.” Lending someone their support and dying for them would be two very different things for a true Slytherin. Why, they’d be more likely to want to sit the conflict out and then align themselves with the victor – thus increase their own chances for survival. You’ve done a great job in capturing that innate contradiction that was never really touched up in canon. Loved the way you were able to work the murder of Charity instead of Celia into your narrative; great twist and very believable.
Author's Response: Hello again, LA Moody! :) Unfortunately, I can't tell you the ending to the story, but I will say that you are on the right track. I, too, was surprised that J.K. didn't make Severus more conniving, in regards to his role in the final battle...he survived for 17 dangerous years and I personally thought that he'd put up a bit more resistance to his own death. Thank you for the wonderful compliment at the end of your review- I was very pleased with the Charity Burbage scene and I hope that it added a bit of suspense for the readers. Thanks for continuing to read and review! :) Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Snape was deliciously dour and contentious. Might want to find another word to replace ‘unnerve’, though; it was used over and over in this chapter. Looking forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Hello again, LA Moody! Thanks for continuing to read my story. I'm glad that you enjoyed Snape's grand entrance. Hope you enjoy Chapter 4. Smiles, Ruby Emeralds
Summary: The Potters' Secret Keeper, Sirius Black, is presumed dead. Remus Lupin wants revenge for his lover's death, but soon finds out that nothing is what he thought it was.
Really loving this story so far. Clearly, you’ve taken a lot of care to make the Sirius/Remus connection very believable – and it is not one of my favorite ships, to say the least. Since you’ve set this in an Alternate Universe, I’m only hoping you’ll be kinder to the characters than Fate was (i.e. canon). Toddler Harry’s nickname of Pronglet couldn’t be more perfect! I’m so jealous that I didn’t think of it myself. Looking forward to next update.
Author's Response: My gosh, I didn't know I had this review! Many apologies for not responding quicker. Thank you for saying such nice things--and for even reading this in the first place, considering it's not one of your favorite ships. I do appreciate it very much. I'm submitting the final bit today, and hope you enjoy the ending. Thanks again for reviewing!
Summary: A chance encounter in the dungeons results in Hermione finding herself feeling sorry for Snape, who has become an outcast since the events at the end of HBP. She is now of age and a full member of the Order. The encounter causes Hermione to want to help Snape with his spying duties. But Snape won't accept Hermione's help or friendship. But their paths keep crossing. AU in the sense that it ignores DH.
Looking forward to reading more. You've set up a number of interesting premises that I'm sure will play out more fully in future chapters. Particularly liked the Snape POV, but then he's one of my faves. What can I say?
Summary: At age eleven, Dudley's daughter receives a letter he recognizes very well. As Sinead Dursley embarks on her journey of magical education at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, she strikes up a strange friendship with Lorcan Scamandar. Soon, Lorcan and Sinead rule over a reign of terror at Hogwarts as they subject their fellow students to cruel and dangerous pranks.
The title of this story comes from the poem "Child" by Sylvia Plath. Also, I would like to thank Royari for being an amazing beta.
Let me start by saying that I’m really enjoying your story so far. It’s absolutely hilarious that Dudley would marry a woman who is so like his mother. Then the description of the new history teacher from Sinead’s point of view made her seem to delightfully eccentric; I can’t wait until she figures into the story again later. Would like to know more details about the decision to dismiss Professor Binns – seeing as how he’s the perfect employee who will never demand a salary, let alone a raise or retirement benefits.
One phrase caught my particular attention as Ms. Penrose is questioning Sinead and the girl averts her eyes, almost as if she has a guilty secret. Does this mean that she has indeed experienced inexplicable events, but only when she’s alone and no one else knows about it? That would certainly be consistent with someone whose parents have never seen angry; namely, she only allows herself to experience strong emotions when she has complete privacy.
One tiny little detail of continuity I noticed though. Ms. Penrose says this is her last visit of the day, but it is still early enough in the morning that Dudley is preparing to go to work at the regular hour. Considering that she mentions that some of the Muggle families she visited earlier have taken a fair bit of convincing, this time frame would have her knocking on the first door before the sun had risen. Perhaps, if she mentioned that the Dursleys were her last visit on what had proven to be a stressful week, it would make more sense.
Looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: Ah, that continuity detail did bug me once I put it up. I really should go back and fix that; you're right in saying it makes absolutely no sense. Thanks so much for the detailed review! :D
Summary: Before she became a Death Eater, Bellatrix Black was young, bored, and went slumming places no other pureblood would go. What she found and who she met was kept secret. Until now.
Long overdue to leave some remarks, I know. All packed for guilt trip, lol. That being said, I’m really enjoying your story. Gabe is a great character and I can’t wait to see how his Native American mysticism plays against Bella’s magical heritage. Or could he even be a shaman in disguise… so many rich possibilities. The details about the smudging ceremony read just as exotic as the workings of the magical world to regular Muggles like me, wonderful touch. The dogs are great, but I’m a dog person so that’s a given. Please don’t let anything happen to them, I can’t bear that.
Lots of suspense created by your chapter notes about the cataclysm that’s going to throw Bella over the edge. Will you be interjecting any of this into the actual narrative, though? I guess it all depends upon whether you want readers to enjoy the opening chapters with a sense of impending doom, or whether you want to pounce it on them unexpected. Your choice, either way. Knowing how heartless and evil the pure-blood fanatics can be, the possibilities are dire indeed. Loved the way that Bella showed up drunk before Rodolphus – I don’t think she managed to repulse him as she much as she had hoped, though.
The name of Onyx for the Black family house-elf is priceless. Coincidentally (again), the black lab that I recently adopted from my sister-in-law is named Onyx. I would’ve preferred to call him Seriously Black, myself. Keep up the excellent work; I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I found out late last night that "A Black Brunch" had been rejected on another website because I said "drunk" in the chapter summary. Bummer!! When I checked MNFF this morning and saw your review, well, that made up for it. I felt I was on the right track. Not only have I been busy with writing but work's been real busy also. I'm looking forward to Christmas break which starts tomorrow and runs until after New Year's. I plan to get a lot of reading and writing taken care of. I'll be submitting Ch. 6 in a couple of days. Based on your review, I think you'll really enjoy it. I'm also working on a one-shot Christmas story. I'm not finished with that yet so I hope it works out. Hmm, Gabe as a shaman? Could be--I'm not telling:D You'll have to read and find out. I'm not planning for anything bad to happen to the dogs. That would just break my heart beyond repair. They're based on dogs I once owned and they lived good, loyal lives. There's no reason to hurt them even in fiction. Unfortunately, the same doesn't go for Bella. As bad as the character she becomes, she doesn't deserve what will happen to her. Readers will be witnesses to the entire hideous tragedy. When Molly yells, "Not my daughter, you bitch." (I think that's how it's stated) something's gonna snap in Bella and she's going to want to die. So, Molly's curse will be a blessing. Poor Gabe's heart will be shattered but I'm not sure if he'll totally understand what happened until he's much older. I hope I haven't told too much:D I bought a Great Dane puppy over the summer. He'll be nine months old right after Christmas. He's black with a white chest and white tips that are polka-dotted on his feet. His name is Mayhem Ange-Noir and he's quite a handful. i keep waiting for him to be the world's biggest lap dog like I was promised:D Thanks so much for your review. I'm inspired to write on!! To the keyboard!!
Really love the dreams and how the descriptions of the scenery crystallize the differences between Gabe and Bella. The wording Bella used for Rain and Autumn Rose, i.e. that woman and her brat, are so perfectly in tune with her derisive view of the world. And her comments about introducing Gabe to her family only if she wanted to scare him away are priceless. You’ve really captured her insolent brand of humor. So happy you were able to conquer your writer’s block; sometimes just writing anything, even if it’s on a tangent helps.
Author's Response: It was so nice to look at reviews and to find yours. I'm honored. You really got what I was trying to show in the two dreams. Gabe and Bella met Rain in about the same place--along the Missouri River. And, Rain was basically using the dreams to show the future. How Gabe and Bella reacted in the same situation showed a bit of their personalities. Gabe has respect for land and life. Bella doesn't want anyone or anything to stand in her way. Another reviewer on another website thought that Rain was too rude and haughty to Bella. I think she had to be. She doesn't like Bella and she knows what Bella is and what she becomes. This whole meeting the family business is going to cause a problem. Bella certainly can't let Gabe meet her family and Gabe's going to find that very unusual as time goes on. That was one of my favorite lines--when Bella tells Gabe she doesn't want to set him up for an evening of torture (literally). I think one of the things I learned this time about writer's block (or at least I hope I learned it), is not to over-discuss chapter ideas with people. I originally wanted to use dreams but someone didn't see the sense of it. So, I lost a major idea I wanted to use and fooled around and then decided to use it after all. Many times writing has to be a solitary affair. Once again, thanks for the review. I'll see you in one of your chapters soon.
Summary: A set of two holiday stories exploring the relationship between Dumbledore and Snape. After helping the headmaster move the Mirror of Erised to a new home, Severus Snape receives an unexpected gift as the New Year turns. Several years later, as Albus Dumbledore celebrates his first Christmas after the dramatic events on the Astronomy Tower, an old friend arrives to remind him of the gift he once gave.
Absolutely exquisite! So perfectly suited for Christmas yet you avoided all the cliches. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That is high praise, to avoid the cliches after so many stories, lol! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for reading this set and for such a wonderful review!! ~Gina :)
Summary: An unorthodox cure... a famous scar... a different time... different friends... and a drastically different life, unbitten, with amazing new adventures. The first volume in the epic story of Remus Lupin. AU.
Very captivating twist, can't wait to see where the next chapters take us. Lots of great detail to ground the reader in the canon timeline and bond with the Remus we already know before being plunged into the alternate reality. Using the term “too” to illustrate Remus at the opening was sheer genius. Unsaid, it also poignantly echoes the way in which life as a werewolf was often an overwhelming experience for him. Adored the way in which he noted that Tonks was smiling even as she kissed him; it's just the sort of detail that Remus would cherish. Uncertain about all the changes from past tense to the present, though. Are the memories/flashbacks supposed to be in present tense while the main narrative is in standard past tense?