I'm only just an Englishman; from North of "the Wall," but South of "the border." The bit that most of England doesn't know is theirs. And it appears that I'm fifty miles south of living in a country capable of making a sensible decision. Who knew that Little England contained so many Vernon Dursleys? :(
I've been a fan for years, ever since I read book one, which is also when I suspected that Harry and Ginny would, eventually, be a couple. This was confirmed to me in the opening Chapters of CoS. I cannot read Dramione, Drinny, slash or, for that matter, any major non-canon pairing. If JKR says that's what happens, that's good enough for me. Why bother re-imagining?
I like action, rather than fluff, though I seem to write a lot of fluff.
I appear to be writing several stories. In fact, I’m only writing one. In chronological order (of events, not writing) my stories are:
Bloodstone: 6th Century (COMPLETE)
Killers: 1940's (In progress)
Germ Free Adolescents: November 1978 (COMPLETE)
Nott: Father and Son: 1990-2000 (COMPLETE)
Molly and Her Daughter: 1992-1999 (in progress)
Chaser: 1 September 1995 (COMPLETE)
Hogsmeade: October 1995 (COMPLETE)
The Hufflepuff: late 1996 (COMPLETE)
Vituperation: July/August 1997 (COMPLETE)
Summer of '97: August 1997 (COMPLETE)
Locket: Winter 1997 (COMPLETE)
Fred and George's Busy Day: August 1997-May 1998 (COMPLETE)
The Pencil Portrait Problem (a Theodore Nott mystery): September-October 1997 (COMPLETE)
Tales of the Battle: May 1998 (COMPLETE)
Grave Days: May-September 1998 (COMPLETE)
The Badly Fitting Coat: June 1998 (COMPLETE)
Vault: June 1998 (COMPLETE)
Aurors and Schoolgirls: September 1998-June 1999 (Progressing)
What Luna Sees: December 1998 (COMPLETE)
Spontaneity: Sunday 28 March 1999 (COMPLETE)
The Mind of Arthur Weasley: Monday 29 March 1999 (COMPLETE)
Anticipation: July 1999 (Complete)
Mistletoe Kisses: 31 December 1999 with flashbacks to 1995 (COMPLETE)
The Girl From DRaCoMC: September 1999 (COMPLETE)
Players Rites: September 1999 (COMPLETE)
Hunters and Prey: February-March 2000 (in progress)
Little Victory: May 2000-July 2021 (COMPLETE)
Disharmony: June 2000 (COMPLETE)
Zoinks! (A Halloween Tale): 31 October 2000 (COMPLETE)
Knavery: March 2001 (COMPLETE)
April Fool: April 2001 (COMPLETE)
Friends and Foes: April-June 2001 (notes and jottings)
Angelina: May 2001 (COMPLETE)
Swimsuit Quidditch: August 2001 (COMPLETE)
The Question: February 2002 (COMPLETE)
The Question (Again): February 2002 (COMPLETE)
MIT: Muggle Liaison Team?: July 2002 (in progress)
The Professor and his Landlady: July 2002 (COMPLETE)
The Secret Diary of Hermione Granger: July 2002 (COMPLETE)
After Breakfast: 7 September 2002 (COMPLETE)
MIT: Secret Keeper: September-November 2002 (COMPLETE)
MIT: Haunted House: Dead: November 2002 (COMPLETE)
Epithalamium: Spring 2003 (In Progress)
MIT: Hampstead Heath Corpse: August 2003 (COMPLETE)
It takes Two: February 2004 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #1
E.C.C.E.N.T.R.I.C. April 2004 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #2
Unspeakable: 2004 (COMPLETE) (co-written with C A Campbell)
First Sight: October 2004 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #3
Bare: October 2004 (COMPLETE)
Exsanguination: A vampire story: September-November 2004 (notes and jottings)
Conceptions: February/March 2005 (COMPLETE)
Conversations: March 2005 (COMPLETE)
Concerns: April 2005 (COMPLETE)
Moon: March 2005 (COMPLETE) Lavender/Mark #1
Brown: April 2005 (in progress) Lavender/Mark #2
Sleepless Night: December 2006 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #4
Yggdrasil: June 2007 (COMPLETE)
Beard Hunters: December 2007 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #5
New Year's Eve: December 2007 (coming soon) Potter Family #5a
Dennis: February 2008 (COMPLETE)
Troth: March 2008 (COMPLETE)Lavender/Mark #3
Ginny’s Rival: March 2008 (COMPLETE) Potter Family #6
Life Goes On: June 2009 (COMPLETE)
Strangers at Drakeshaugh: September/October 2009 (in progress)
Sports Day: June 2010 (in progress)
The Drakeshaugh Dragon: August 2010 (COMPLETE)
Moons: July 2010 (in progress) Lavender/Mark #4
Xmas Daze: December 2010
Owl Post: July 2016 (COMPLETE)
Zygosis: July 2026 (COMPLETE)
James and Me: September 2027 (in progress)
Centuries: 2080-2081 (COMPLETE)
After returning from Australia with the Grangers, Ron realises the moment to make some important confessions to Hermione has come.Inspired by the Ludo song, "Streetlights." A part of the "Moments" series.
I arrived at this story from your review of my fic and I’m glad that I did. This is a really nice piece of work. Both touching and amusing. Well done! I’m now going to read your other stuff. (You may be interested in my take on Ron and Hermione’s wedding btw).
Ireally like this story, so I’m sorry to make this one niggle. Fireflys, cicadas? I’ve never seen any fireflies in the UK and the only chirruping insect are, so far as I know, grasshoppers. I’m no beta-reader, but, if you want any future stories brit-picking, I’d be happy to oblige.
It tickles me pink that you came to read my story! And please, niggle away. I actually researched the firefly thing, because I really wanted them in there for some reason, lol, and the map I found of their territories included the whole of the UK. Xp. Oh, well. And you can probably guess about the cicadas, as it features so beautifully in the song. *Sigh* It's one of my favorite parts of the song, I couldn't resist. I assumed that one, that's my bad. My beta-reader was actually a Brit-picker; you would have run away screaming if you would have seen the original. :)
Thank you so much for the read and the review, and I will definitely be taking a look at the rest of your stories as well! Thank you!
Another good chapter. Luna being Luna, Harry trying to keep the peace between his friends. Thank you.
Author's Response: No, thank YOU. I appreciate the encouragment.
There are surprisingly few stories on this site that Ican read. Stories which add to, rather than ignore, the works of JKR
This is a nice little story, thank you.
Author's Response: What a kind thing to say. I too prefer stories that work in the canon. Thanks so much.
Ron Weasley is staying at Shell Cottage during the Christmas of 1997. These are the thoughts and feelings that occupy him.This is ahattab33 of Hufflepuff, and this is for the "Watching the Mirror" class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
What a great little story, thank you. Whenever I think of Ron suffering at Shell Cottage I'll think of this story.
Poor Ron....but thank you. *beams*
Another nice story. I’m not sure that this is “only fluff” 9not that there is anything wrong with only fluff). There is some nice, insightful stuff in there. I love the entire conversation which ends ““We’re not fighting,” Ron said. “Of course not,” added Hermione.” This tells us so much about their relationship without beating us over the head with it.
Author's Response: Thanks Neil. I actually relieved that you liked that part... I almost ran the whole "hanging out" thing by you to see if it passed the Brit-picking test, but then I decided I couldn't bear to hear that I should remove it. Haha. Thanks for reading and reviewing, as always!
Everything was beautiful, and Hannah felt calmer than she had all day; she felt all of the unsettled thoughts beginning to find their places in her frazzled mind.
You know, for a bloke who claims to like action/adventure stuff I seem to read an awful lot of romance. I blame you (and the guarantee of canon-compliance that your stories inevitably have).
There are so many nice touches in this story I don’t know where to begin. As someone who’s written a wedding story I know how difficult it can be to decide on how to approach the tale. I love the set up of this story, from the opening descriptions to the (frankly heartbreaking) way that you gently remind us that this particular couple have, because of the war, only one parent able to attend.
I found it interesting that you didn’t mention Hannah’s other male friend, Justin and I liked the way that you introduced Ernie as Hannah’s friend. I’ve often wondered about Ernie’s feelings towards Hannah. I’ve always been interested in “the Hufflepuff trio” (Hannah, Ernie and Justin). They first appear in CoS and are as interesting, and disparate, as the Gryffindor three we know so well.
The sweet-wrapper, of course, is the final, perfect touch. Congratulations on your second place in the challenge.
Author's Response: I got a giant cupcake as a gift earlier, and now, a REVIEW (and a long one, at that)! This is the best day ever! :) I have no problem bearing a bit of responsibility for having you read romance. Everyone should read more romance, even me. I'm so glad you liked this. I used to lean toward Neville/Luna, but once I heard Rowling say he ended up with Hannah, and I thought about that connection that they had... I was fully on board with that pairing. And I imagine that much of their relationship, particularly big events like their wedding and even having children, would be tinged with sadness because of those who are not present to share them. Ah, the Hufflepuffs. It's funny because when Natalie betaed this, we talked about how I probably needed to get into why Susan and Hannah were not besties at this time, since she was also a part of that gang. And now you mention Justin as well. I sort of just remember them all being mentioned a lot, but I thought Ernie and Hannah were mentioned more by themselves too. Maybe my memory is failing, and I suppose at some point, I should go back and look into it. What a shameful Puff I am, not knowing all these details. Thanks so much for the lovely review, Neil. It's always such a nice surprise to find activity on my author page! Take care! ~Lori
**beams** This story won the third round of the Character Clinic Triathalon! Category: original characters
**beams again** This story was nominated for 2010 Quicksilver Quill ~ Best Original Character
Great story, I love your female seventh year Slytherin photographer. What a great idea for a character. I did not mention to you that one of my two Challenge entries (also a “Summer Holiday” one) also featured a female seventh year Slytherin photographer, as I thought that might cause you some concern. As it is, they are totally different people.
There are a lot of mysteries about Kenley and you manage to hint that many of them are issues relating to her absent biological father. In fact both of her parents loom large in this story, though neither of them appear. James and Brian are nicely drawn, too.
Good luck for the challenge.
Author's Response: I'm glad you did not tell me that before, Neil... it would have caused me concern, to say the least. ;) But since done is done, why not just agree that great minds think alike and have a laugh about it? That is a pretty funny coincidence. I have not read your other entry yet, but hope to do so today. I'm glad you got the sense of her parents being larger than the quantity of lines I devoted to them in this... I was hoping that would come across without telling every bit of history. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Neil!
I’ll start by saying that I don’t think that this is pointless. You captured Ginny’s worries nicely here, and I loved the Ginny/Bill discussion. For some reason I’ve always imagined that they were particularly close and that Ginny rather hero worshipped her eldest brother. Am I crediting you with too much subtlety? I doubt it.
Because I’m me, I have to say – front yard? – what is a front yard? I have a front garden and a back garden. Some people I know do have back yards, but not front yards. I though you’d like to know. Neil
Author's Response: Ah yes, the Britpicking expert. ;) Hehe... of course I welcome knowing those things, and I have corrected it already. Thanks. And thanks for the kinds words as well. Hmmm... hero worship. Not sure about that, but I do love the way Rowling portrayed Bill in the books: cool and edgy, responsible, brave, family guy.... I just see the other siblings really looking up to him. Especially Ron and Ginny, as they are the youngest. I'm glad you thought this worked. Thanks for taking the time to read and review, Neil. I appreciate it! ~ Lori
Personally, I don’t think that you need to apologise or explain about the bad grammar and spelling, because there isn’t any. This is a wonderful insight into the mind of 3-year-old Ron. It is brim full of beautiful, perfect and truly sad child-logic. I’m a grumpy old bloke, but the naïve sadness in lines like “I didn’t want the broomstick to be broked, but it was broked.” really got to me (having kids helps, I suspect).
This is Ron, it’s a Ron we can recognise, and he’s only three! That alone is something to be proud of. Having recently struggled through the first few chapters of a Ron/Hermione/Harry/Ginny story only to realise that four lead characters simply weren’t Ron, Hermione, Harry, or Ginny I really appreciate the craft and care which you have taken in getting little Ron right in this one-shot.
The ending is disturbing and nasty, and absolutely perfect. Ron’s worries and fears are so real, from “who’d eat the black ones” to “what if new Teddy didn’t smell of ketchup?” you capture the confusion of a child whose world, through no fault of his own, has changed for the worse.
It’s because of the care you’ve taken that I want to be extremely nitpicky. First: “We flied around the garden with our wands from the tree. He flied around hunting for the bad wizards.” I think that the He in the second sentence is supposed to be another We, I may be wrong. Second: (and this is personal opinion) the one word which jumps out to me as being too grown up is “explain” (possibly simply because my son couldn’t say it and instead used splain for years). As I said, very minor nitpicks.
Congratulations, you have written a wonderful story.
Author's Response: Wow! You've left me really speechless if I am honest with you! I think this is the best review I have ever gotten!
Sorry about the explanation at the beginning. I did that mostly because Mugglenet are very strict on what fics they validate, and I've had chapters rejected because of spelling/grammar/punctuation mistakes, so I included those warning so that the validators would know all those "mistakes" were deliberate. I genuinely thought though that this wouldn't get approved, so I was really happy (and surprised) when it was.
I am really speechless to be honest with you. I am so glad that you think I did a great job getting into a 3-year-old's mind. I mostly just based it on my little cousin really, she's only four and I play with her all the time. I'm still pretty much a kid myself, so to hear from someone who has kids that this is not only realistic and believable but also moving and enjoyable is just brilliant. Leaves me speechless really!
I am so glad you think this is Ron. I hate reading fics that have the characterisation completely wrong too. It just makes me cringe. I did my best here to try and capture what I reckon Ron was like at this age, so I am very glad (and relieved) that you think I did a good job!
I am also glad you liked the ending, and that you described it as "disturbing and nasty", because that was really what I was going for, and I wasn't too sure whether or not I managed to convey Ron's sense of horror afterwards. So cheers for that!
Yes, you are right there - that "He" should be a "We" - that was just a typo and I've fixed it there, so thanks for pointing it out. Also, cheers for the suggestion on "splain", that definitely sounds much better, so I've changed that too, really loved that suggestion, so thanks a million for it.
Just thanks so much for taking the time to read my story and to leave this really brilliant review. I really appreciate it, especially since its coming from a parent. Thanks so much. I'm still pretty speechless so I really don't know what to say. This was just a bit of an experiment and I really was unsure whether it would work or not, and I am just stunned that people actually like it. Can't believe it really! Thanks so much again for all the nice things you said, appreciate it! :)
Thanks again for the click and for the fab review, Neil! ~ Lori
I can't remember the last time I felt the urge to click on a story on this site and read it. actually, I can, now that I think about it. But we won't go there, because I was the victim of misleading advertising. With you, however, I can guarantee that I'll be reading a story about Ron and Hermione, and not a story about two entirely different characters with the same names.
This is not a long story, but it's brilliantly written and I can't even find a Britpick in it! I love Ron's worries, his constant panic that he'll say, or do, the wrong thing. I love the way you show Hermione's vulnerabilities, too. Thank you.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you did decide to click and that you weren't disappointed! I so appreciate what you said about the characterization. It means a lot coming from a canon stickler like you (takes one to know one, yes?). I would consider it a colossal failure if the characters did not ring true. And the icing on the cake... no Britpicks! Mwahahaha! It's because I've been practicing and getting better. Between you and Carole, I hope to never feature a sidewalk or a front yard in any of my stories ever again. :)
Thanks for a nicely drawn and thought-provoking story about Harry and Dudley. You kept both men nicely in character, with just the right amount of awkwardness between them. I particularly enjoyed seeing the Aurors arrive in a black Range Rover! :-D
Author's Response: Three guesses where the Range Rover came from, and the first two don't count! Like you, I appreciate consistency in the Potterverse, and that vehicle is certainly appropriate for the wizarding equivalent of Ghostbusters. Thank you for your complimentary remarks; I am glad that you thought that the characterization was accurate and that the story was thought-provoking. Vicki