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Real name: Julia
Member Since: 06/01/09
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Hello! I'm Julia and when I'm not cavorting with elves in Middle Earth, I'm a moderator for this archive, among other things.

Poetry, Anyone? I am the resident Poet Laureate over on the Beta Boards as leader of this fun little group. We have monthly challenges all with a Harry Potter twist. You can also find solid and comprehensive critique for any poems and help for all your archive-based concerns.

Susan Bones Book Club. I am the leader of this fun little group. Each month the SBBC chooses two to three fics from the archives to discuss. We also have monthly drabble activities and an incredibly lively chat thread. We accept new members at all times so if you're interested go and take a look. It's open to all members of the beta boards. If you have any questions or concerns then don't hesitate to PM me.
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Best of You by coQuillEon1
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 25]

Summary: She belongs to him. Plain and simple. And if she ever thought that getting away from him would be that easy, she certainly has another thing coming.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Dubious Consent, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Mental Disorders, Violence

Word count: 4240 Chapters: 3 Completed: No
Published:
12/11/09 Updated: 12/31/09


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 12/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: Keep My Lovers True

This is a very compelling read. I'm interested to see where this is leading. Well done :)

 

Straight Flush by DeadManSeven
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Just a meeting. Just a meeting at midnight, on the Astronomy Tower, where no-one else can see. Where no-one else will be. That's all it is. Just a meeting. Hermione/...?

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 1072 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/14/09 Updated: 12/14/09


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 12/15/09 Title: Chapter 1: Straight Flush

Beautifully written. Very powerful. I love it.

Author's Response: Thanks! I think it's a subject that's a bit underexplored - everywhere, not just fanfiction - although I can't possibly imagine why that would be...

 

A Tale of Six Perspectives by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: The whoosh of a speeding Bludger was followed by the scream of a female voice.

Slytherin Chaser Armis Berkley was knocked off her broom, and she fell through the air.

James Potter, Gryffindor Chaser, gripped his broom and sped towards the falling body, even though he knew he’d never reach her in time.

Severus Snape blanched. Berkley always pestered him in the common room, asking him to help her with Charms homework.

Sirius Orion Black jumped up from his seat as the rest of the spectators did. A single obscene curse escaped his lips.

Peter Pettigrew prayed. Dear God, please don’t…no…no…

Lily Evans gasped as an odd monotonous sound rang in her ears.

Remus John Lupin shuddered involuntarily. DUMBLEDORE!



This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the final in the MWPP class on the Beta Boards. This story has just been nominated for a QSQ in the Best Marauder Era category. :D Thanks!

DISCLAIMER: So not J.K.Rowling.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 3400 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/20/09 Updated: 12/22/09


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 12/28/09 Title: Chapter 1: Six Perspectives

I'm leaving you a review! Right now! While we are chatting on AIM! But oh well! I loved this fic, as you can probably tell since I rec'd it already. But I really think you caught each character so well. James' bit intrigued me. It was nice to see him by himself rather than with Lily or Sirius for once. And Remus seemed to fit so well with how I would imagine him to react. *hugs my 'Puff* Stay cool, Natalie. I really hope this fic is chosen!!!

Julia XD

Author's Response: Hi, Julia!



Yeah, kinda late, this reply. BUT I wanted to say thanks, so, THANK YOU! :D. About James, it was not only necessary to get him away from Sirius for the plot, it was also the one thing I'd decided on for the MWPP final task - no matter what, I just wanted him alone.



Natalie.

 

Five Christmases by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: It took four Christmases for Andromeda Black and Ted Tonks to get together.



Thanks to my wonderful beta, Sarah (Sapphire at Dawn) for her wonderful edits and for catching all the Americanism, and to Greenius (greennotebook) for her help. This one-shot is dedicated to Amanda (ahattab33), who taught me that romance is pretty much an essential part of one’s life, and of one’s writing. This is my Christmas gift for you, twin.



DISCLAIMER: Definitely not J.K.Rowling.



This one-shot has been turned into an audiofic. If you're interested in listening, here's the link: http://audiofiction.libsyn.com/index.php?post_id=563693 This story has recently been nominated for a QSQ, Canon Romance. :D


Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 3111 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/23/09 Updated: 12/26/09


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 12/27/09 Title: Chapter 1: Five Christmases

Why does this fic have no reviews? What is the world coming to? Natalie, I love this. I hardly ever read Ted/Andromeda and I'm glad this was my introduction to the pairing. Your Bellatrix is great, by the way.

*hugs*

Julia XD

Author's Response: Hey Julia!



At first, I wondered if it was that bad? Lol! But, ah, I am so happy you liked it. I havent read much T/A myself, and whatever I have read have been of the D/A type. I was hoping to cheer up things a bit for the two of them.



Bellatrix, Bellatrix, Bellatrix. I was obsessed with writing her earlier, and then it just sort of died down. I am glad I am writing her again. :D Thanks for the review!

 

Returning by Annalise28
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: You suddenly realize, as you round a corner, that you are alone. You can leave, finally be free. You can go where you have been wanting to go for several months...

You all stand there in the boiling sun, holding each other, unfazed by anything else.


The story of a journey and what it truly means to be home.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1079 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/13/10 Updated: 01/16/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 01/17/10 Title: Chapter 1: Returning

Annalise! Annalise! Annalise!

This is beautiful! You have really blown me away. It took me a while to get what it was about ( I guess I'm a little slow today!) but I absolutely loved it. You used the second person perspective really well. I love second person fics and you pulled it off brilliantly. The flow of the fic was lovely as well. For a first time fic this is truly impressive.

I especially loved the repetition of this line:

It is all beautiful to you, everything.

It created a sort of rhythm throughout the fic which I loved.

I cannot wait to see what else you come up with, now. You show lots of promise! Congratulations for finally getting this published on the archives. Your persistence has paid off!

*hugs*

Julia XD

Author's Response: Julia! Julia! Julia! Thank you so so so so so much!!!! I am so glad you liked it :D You don't know how much your praise means to me so, thank you. :) *hugs* ~ Annalise x :)

 

Summary:

In times of peace, tales of strife and angst tend to fall out of favor with the masses, but stories of happy endings and the concept of everything turning out all right don’t often make for good reading. There are rare occasions, though, when both can be met with equal accord and form a bond in the written word.

The first sentence in the Charles Dickens classic, A Tale of Two Cities, simply states that ‘It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.’ An anonymous writer sent in a letter to Roxanne Weasley’s weekly featurette in the Daily Prophet, telling the story of his father’s murder and his journey to recovery, which seemed to be the incarnation of that very line. Sometimes, it takes a loss for one to truly appreciate what one has in life and even in death.

 

This story has been podcasted by the MNFF Mermuggles. Its reading starts at 16:26. Thanks to Olivia/Apollonious for reading it so wonderfully.



Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1660 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/18/10 Updated: 01/18/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 01/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I can't believe this has no reviews, Jess. It was sincere. It was poignant. It was beautifully written. You have caught the emotion of a grieving child without any melodrama but with a quiet sadness which I truly appreciate.

I love how you kept the author anonymous yet clearly insinuated who he was and the identity of the other characters. The entire piece flows well and I don't feel as if you have wasted words at all. Every sentence has relevance and meaning and nothing seems to take away from the point you are trying to put across.

All in all I'm very impressed. The emotional undertones through the piece are so powerful yet subtle. I'm in awe. Fantastic work.

Julia XD

Author's Response:

**blush**

The only one of my Winter Snows things that has gotten reviews is my Lockhart piece, which makes me happy, because it was my favorite. This one, though, was the most giant pain in the ass, because it got sent back TWICE from the mods, saying it didn't follow the prompt. But I stuck to my guns, because I knew that it would lose most of its emotive power if I removed the anonymity. Carole really helped me by suggesting that I put in the reason that Draco was killed. I really didn't see it as important, but apparently, when something like that is left in the dark, I guess it's maddening, lol.

Thank you so much for the glowing review. I got one earlier that brought me from a cranky freaking mood and it made my day. You, on the other hand, have made my night, which is doubly important, because I'm about to start writing now, lol. Luv ya, Jules!

~Jess

 

The Labyrinth Mind by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: Harry and Lord Voldemort were connected. It tortured Harry to his very core, but he could not shut it down, until ...

Disclaimer; I am not JK Rowling. That doesn't surprise anyone, I'm sure.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 103 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/30/10 Updated: 01/30/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 01/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Labyrinth Mind

Dobby is dead.

It still makes me sniff to read those words. This is a very powerful poem, Carole and I'm glad you have finally put it up on the archives. I love the way you compare Harry's pain at the beginning as 'the thrust of a venemous dagger'. It feels as if you go full circle, because at the end of the poem, Harry experiences another type of pain, grief, which is also caused by a dagger - Dobby's death.

The only line which does not flow as well as the others is 'But one there, secured sorrow would remain'. It just feels a little convoluted

Overall, though, I love it!

Julia XD

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Mmm, you could be right about that line. There comes a point, I think, when I can't work on something anymore. It needs fresh eyes. Glad you enjoyed it. ~Carole~

 

Love's Protection. by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: When Lily falls at the hands of Voldemort there are unexpected benefits, but for Severus Snape there is only sorrow.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 149 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/31/10 Updated: 01/31/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/01/10 Title: Chapter 1: Love's Protection

Jan, this has left me completely speechless. I am in awe. You take the reader full circle beautifully and I love that.

And summer is shunned as evening settles soft.

I honestly do not know what to say about this line but it took my breath away and set a certain tone to the poem that is hard to place. I do not know whether to weep or smile because you have caught all these conflicting emotions and melded them together as one. And the way you have finished, oh, the way you have finished. It feels like the final beat of a song, the final chord. Tonally, the entire piece reminds me of Chopin's Nocturne in C-Sharp Minor. So melancholic and solitary and beautiful. You know the melody will go either way yet it still manages to surprise you. That's how I felt reading this poem.

Julia XD

Author's Response: Oh, Julia, a review like that from someone who can work words so well herself is a treat! And you know, funny you should mention Chopin, because he is buzzing around my head at the moment - and not so much his music, (which is generally hauntng and beautiful) but his life. See, it all seeps out of the collective imagination eventually! Thank you for the review - made my day.

 

Two is Better Than One by ron lover
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Hermione has to chose between Harry and Ron, between friendship and love.

Categories: Harry/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 850 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/02/10 Updated: 02/15/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Between Friendship and Love

Well done, Alyssa! I had forgotten that you wrote this for the exchange and I'm glad you've put it up on the archives. We need fresh Harmony blood :p

I really like the use of 2nd person. I find not a lot of people like reading 2nd person but I adore it so well done. I think the beginning is a bit...unequal if that makes sense. Because you dwell quite a bit on the ride into Hogwarts and then sort of brush over some other events in the next couple of years and then suddenly it's HBP. Perhaps if you went over some other events, build up Hermione's relationship with Harry a bit more because you have plenty of time to do that within the fic as it is quite short.

But overall I always enjoy Harmony and this is no exception. I usually prefer Harmony set after HBP (either during DH or after) but I really liked your fic. It's an interesting take on the whole Harry/Hermione thing!

Julia XD

Author's Response: Hi, Julia! I know what you mean about it being unequal. I origionally added more to this, but it messed with the flow of the story, so I got rid of it. I thought about writing a sequel about when they are alone, but I'm not sure if I'm going to. Now that I think about it again, I'm getting an idea.... Anyways, thanks for reading and reviewing!!

 

Soul Sister by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Ted and Andromeda have just eloped. So, they dance.



A songfic featuring Hey, Soul Sister by Train. Written for SBBC December Activity, using Kat's (Mistletoe) prompt.



This prompt came second in the challenge. :D And I am not J.K.Rowling --->DISCLAIMER.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 992 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/08/10 Updated: 02/13/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Hey, Hey, Hey.

Natalie. Natalie. Natalie.

I have loved this drabble (well I guess I should call it a fic now) ever since I first read it. You chose the perfect pairing for the song and the way you have written Ted is just as uplifting and hopeful as the song from which it is inspired.

...a kaleidoscopic explosion of feelings.

I have to point this line out because it perfectly sums up the song. Such a bright, colourful phrase for a bright, colourful song. Well done, Nat. Keep being awesome. You truly introduced me to Ted/Dromee so thank you.

Julia XD

Author's Response: Hey Julia!



Thanks for this uplifting review. :D I am glad I managed to make Ted/Andromeda for this. In canon, we know so little about them - apart from the fact that they eloped (and defied the Blacks), we don't know anything about their dynamics of their relationship. But it was that point which drew me in. They really had to be intensely in love to pull such a stunt, and ...well, yeah, the rest is SBBC history. ;) Thanks again!



Love ya, Natalie.

 

Dust in the Wind by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary:

Dominique Weasley took a summer job at Weasleys Wizarding Wheezes with the hope to stake her first claim of independence. All she really wanted was to be able to pay for her Yule Ball gown on her own, but one fateful day, someone strolled into the shop and turned her world upside down.

Scorpius Malfoy was sweet, confident, and completely gorgeous, but Dominique knew that he was off-limits as her cousin’s ex-boyfriend. The more she tried to push him away, though, the more she questioned her resolve to do the right thing.

This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my submission for the Fiction Junction ‘I Challenge Thee’ prompt



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 4933 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/08/10 Updated: 02/14/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dust in the Wind

Jess!

I'm so into Next-Gen at the moment so I've been excited to read your Dom/Scorpius and NOW IT IS HERE! I really loved it and how you spanned over quite a length of time in a one-shot without the fic feeling rushed. I think your characterisation of Scorpius and Dominique was really great as well. One thing I would have liked to see was more about Dom's relationship with Victoire. You touched on it a bit and it intrigued me especially since I'm a younger sister myself. I hope you expand on this fic in the future or at least write more of the pairing because I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Julia XD

Author's Response:

Yay, you all are turning me into a review crackhead, I'm telling you!

I've decided to write a parallel story to this one for one of the Great Hall challenges, which will feature more about the both of them, plus touch on her insecurities, as well as some of Scorpius's. They have the potential to be the most ridiculously attractive couple known to man, so I must do them justice.

Would it be remiss of me to say that I didn't think that this fic had turned out as well as I'd wanted it to? It sounds a little self-indulgent, but if I had done everything that I'd wanted, it would have ended up with multiple chapters, lol. Stay tuned, because I believe I like these two, especially enough to do them in multiples. :D

Jess

 

Summary:

During the trip to Godric's Hollow, Hermione, through the course of events, comes to realize that her friendship with Harry had become so much more to her - but not to him. This pain, this disconcerting feeling, however, had nothing to do with Horcruxes.



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 3769 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/27/10 Updated: 02/27/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

First of all (not that you don't know this but) I love seeing the Good Ship Harmony sailing across the great fanfic ocean. Yes, I am THAT cheesy. Anyway, I love how you focus on Hermione's guilt for breaking Harry's wand and the way you use it to create such emotional tension. I love Harmony fics that fit into canon and as soon as you told me you were writing about this particular moment I was so excited. And you did not disappoint. I'm loving the fevered kiss and how you have Hermione know that it is wrong, and know that Harry is not actually kissing her but she is still going to do it anyway. Even though it is Harry lying in bed near death's door, Hermione has also been through something incredibly traumatic. I mean, she came face to face with Voldemort! Eek! So I love how she is trying to cope with all that along with the realisation of her love for Harry. It's really wonderfully done.

Those chapters in Deathly Hallows are so intense for Harry and Hermione and I remember thinking about that as I read them for the first time. I love how you have captured this intensity and kept it canon. I know I'm not a huge canon buff but when Harmony is able to be portrayed in a canon setting it makes the pairing all the more delicious, even if it is one-sided.

One thing confused me, though. At the beginning you have Harry jump out the window first, then Hermione Apparate outside to him and then have them both Apparate away together. I'm pretty sure that in DH they Apparate while jumping out the window together because Harry sees them do this from Voldy's p.o.v. Just something I picked up.

Hermione remembered the ridiculous amount of scrapes and mishaps that she had experienced with Harry and Ron.

Also, and I'm only saying this because I'm weird and this is one of the things my friends hate me correcting all the time but 'amount' should be 'number'. Amount is used for things which can be measured i.e an amount of blood while number is used for quantities that can be counted i.e number of scrapes and mishaps.

Sorry to be a buzz kill. But thank you for an enjoyable read (as always) and for spreading the delusional love!

Julia XD

Author's Response:

Ah, I heart your reviews. They make me feel warm and fuzzy inside. :)

I knew that I wanted to write this from the last time I read this chapter. The phrase 'and...things' really jumped out at me and afforded a wonderful realm of possibilities. It was just recently that I knew that I really wanted this to be Hermione-centric. At first, I wanted Harry to fantasize about Hermione, but after some thought, it made more sense for something to happen that one of them could forget but the other could not. I almost made this one three times more hot/steamy/smutty, but I remembered that it was a contest piece, and I'm pretty sure I have no chance at winning if I write friggin porn, lol. Perhaps another day. :-D

I'll fix 'number'...I suppose I never gave it a second thought, really. As for the canon issue, I shall peruse DH once again and see what the Word of God says and alter accordingly.

I heart you, and I hope to be putting some more Harmony (and more two-sided instances) into the archives soon. Peace out!

Jess

 

The Dance We Do by Equinox Chick
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 11]

Summary: Amelia Bones is a diligent student. Head Girl, with a handsome and well-connected boyfriend, she has her whole future mapped out for her.

She does not expect to fall in love quite so hard, and quite so fast with someone totally unsuitable.

I am Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry fot the February Love Challenge - category Forbidden Love - in the Great Hall on the MNFF beta boards.

I am indebted to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this fic and for all her support whilst I was writing it.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. I doubt that surprises anyone.

The Dance We Do won the QSQ in 2010 for Best Same Sex Pairing. Thank you.



Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 6472 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 02/28/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Dance We Do

Wow, Carole, you really brought this pairing to life. It is so very believable. Of course, it's beautifully written but you have also caught the emotions so well. Very powerful.

Author's Response: Thanks Julia, I was trying to convey a certain amount of emotion so I'm pleased this came across. ~Carole~

 

Masque by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The Masque was her chance to get over a broken relationship and move on, her appearance magically charmed for a night of escapist pleasure. She had no expectations, least of all that she might fall for a fellow masked player. And yet she did, their identities a secret as their relationship blossomed. When they take off the masks and reveal their true selves, can they move beyond their past and try to build something for the future?

This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the February Month of Love Challenge: Surprise Love.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 5096 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/28/10 Updated: 02/28/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/01/10 Title: Chapter 1: Masked/Unmasked

Ah Gina! I loved it! I'm usually more of a Dramione fan but this was a great little gem. Even though I knew what was going on I still felt intrigued as to how the two would react when their true identities were revealed. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading this story, Julia! Yes, the secret was sort of spoiled for you, but I had to let you in on a bit of it for that awesome banner you made. Can you just picture Draco transfigured into that dreamy picture you found now? The banner is perfect, thank you so much! And I'm glad you liked the story that goes with it, I really appreciate the review! Thanks again!! ~Gina :)

 

Not Eating Blackberry Cobbler by saskiawrites
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A lie. Or several.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 5353 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/08/10 Updated: 03/11/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Not Eating Blackberry Cobbler

I really enjoyed your interpretation of what it would be like to be Lupin. Your writing was nicely understated and it did not feel melodramatic or false at all which is a blessing in fanfiction. It was also nice to see the way you incorporated that line from the HBP film into the fic. It made the fic come full circle and I loved that. This is a really wonderful one-shot so well done! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!! I'm really, really glad it didn't seem overly dramatic -- that's a problem I used to have, and I'm working now to not let that happen so much. And of course I'm very happy you liked it!

 

How Much a Heart Can Hold by MagEd
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 49]

Summary: The seven men who loved Hermione Granger.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 5307 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/09/10 Updated: 03/10/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I absolutely loved this. You had me tearing up on numerous occasions. I love that you included Viktor and Arthur and Neville. I adored reading those segments but it was just fantastic overall. Now, I'm not usually someone who usually reads canon so you must have done something right! The premise was great and I would probably read some more. I think doing the Trio might be a nice little series, almost like a tribute. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I had so much fun writing each part, so I'm glad you enjoyed all of them! I also have a soft spot for Neville, so it's good to know you liked his inclusion! :)

 

Summary: In the middle of a mountain range in eastern Australia, lies a secluded school that is very rarely seen by anyone other than the staff and students.

And then Albus Dumbledore visits.

This is jenny b of Hufflepuff writing for the Fiction Junction I Challenge Thee Challenge. My prompt was "Write a oneshot about Dumbledore taking a tour of a magic school somewhere else in the world" and set by OliveOil_Med.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3558 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/15/10 Updated: 03/15/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Kurrawong Academy

This was really interesting to read and if you do write more set at Kurrawong then I will definitely read it. Very well done. I've always wondered about Oceanic magical schools (I'm from New Zealand) and have thought about writing a fic set in New Zealand as well. It makes a change from all the fics out there set in the States! I love how the school seemed much more laidback than Hogwarts which is how I would imagine an Australian or New Zealand school to be. Thanks for a great read.

~Julia

Author's Response: Thanks, Julia! Oceanic schools have always fascinated me, too, and this was the perfect opportunity to write one. I'm Australian, so it made sense for me to set it there, but New Zealand would be a fabulous place to set one, too. All the mountains to hide in ... there's endless possibilites. I'm glad you liked it! :D

 

Irredeemable by psijupiter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Past Featured Storyredemption: n. 1. The act of redeeming or the condition of having been redeemed.

The story of Snape's life.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 233 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/16/10 Updated: 03/25/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Irredeemable

Psi, this is amazing. I remember reading this in your thread in Poetry Anyone and thinking how wonderful it was. So now I'm here giving it a proper review.

The first thing I love is the way you have structured the poem. It is very effective and makes me think of the three act structure in screenplay writing. Each act is separate but integral to the overall work. In this case you have only enhanced the effect of the poem by splitting it in three. I am curious as to what your authorial intent was. We have the set-up, the introduction to the character, the introduction to his life. Then we have the confrontation, the real event, his death and it's consequences. I think this part was what really stood out to me.

His death serves a purpose,
is planned. Neat and tidy,
for all the blood that drips through the floorboards,
drip, drop, drip,
an accompaniment for dying.


This is beautifully crafted. It is very melodic in structure.

And finally we have the conclusion. I think the last line was perfect. You have summed up Snape in one line, eight words. In fact, this entire piece is an excellent character study of Snape and yet you have used so few words. That is the beauty of poetry and you have a talent. A real talent and I am oh so excited to see what else you write during your time in Poetry Anyone.

The poem also has an underlying flow to it despite the three part structure. Your words are blunt yet not forceful and they flow off the tongue naturally. You have a knack for impact in the gentlest of ways.

I also love the entire premise of the poem. The idea of Dumbledore and Snape sitting in King's Cross. I never really thought about what Dumbledore would say to him after he died and you've provided a nice conclusion even though the way you wrote the poem is not, in itself, conclusive. You have left his character open. I love that.

In short, Psi, this is truly breathtaking poetry. I absolutely love it and it's going into my favourites straight away. Well done!

 

Sixth Time's the Charm by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: James Potter had asked her before for a date, several times, although not always for himself. Now, as Lily Evans gazes at her reflection in the mirror, she wonders why he keeps asking her and just why she's finally said yes.

I am Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this story has been written for the first round of the Character Clinic Triathlon over at the MNFF beta boards. Prompt: First Kiss.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. Her lawyers agree, so don't get them riled by confusing us.

Thank you very much to Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this fic for me. I need to also add that Natalie may be a Hufflepuff, but she does not have fluffy hair and in no way resembles the Hestia Jones that appears in this story. Finally, you may recognise some OC's from my fic Lions of Gryffindor. This isn't exactly 'caron' compliant with that story, but it kinda fits ... in parts ... sort of.

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Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2733 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/18/10 Updated: 03/18/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/19/10 Title: Chapter 1: Sixth Time's the Charm

Oh that was fantastic as always Carole! I tend to avoid James/Lily but since you were the author I figured I'd take a peek and I loved it! I think that was a realistic first kiss and you didn't make Lily out to be a screaming banshee whenever James came near her. Bravo!

Author's Response: Canon is calling you, Ju-li-ahhhhhh. Heh heh. Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked their first kiss. ~Carole~

 

The Gates of Happiness by MagEd
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 44]

Summary: The seven men who loved Ginny Weasley.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6818 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/19/10 Updated: 03/22/10


Reviewer: the opaleye Signed
Date: 03/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was just fantastic. I'm not a huge fan of Ginny (which, I'm sad to say, is probably because I really don't like her in the films and that is an awful reason to dislike her) but I really really really enjoyed this. I think the seven men you chose were perfect to explore all the different side of her character and life. I'm glad you chose Ron as the brother to write for. I really liked the sibling dynamic you portrayed and thought it was very realistic. I also loved how you included Dean. It was bittersweet stuff. Can't wait to read more of these. I hope you do Luna.

Julia XD

Author's Response: Thanks very much! Yes, Bonnie Wright does NOT do Ginny right, imo. I'm glad you liked this and the men I picked. I'm very close to my siblings, so of course I had to explore Ron and Ginny's relationship, and it's good to know you thought he was a good choice (although it certainly would have been fun to choose one of her other brothers). Luna is actually on my short list of who else to do, but I'm a little nervous because I'm afraid I don't have as firm a grasp on her character. We'll see :)

 
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