Hi there! I’m Soraya. I’m seventeen years old and am a proud Muslim British Bangladeshi. I live in East London and have loved reading and writing from a young age. I’m rather obsessed with Harry Potter (aren’t we all?), tea (not a surprise considering I’m a Brit) and good grammar. Recently, I've also got into the Supernatural fandom. After watching the first episode, I had already fallen head over heels in love with Sam Winchester, so it's no surprise that I am now a huge SPN fangirl as well as a Potterhead.
My writing has changed quite a bit over the years, and I think you'll probably notice that, the further down my author page you go, the more the quality seems to drop :P I started posting stories on here at the age of fourteen, and at nearly eighteen, I can see how much my writing has improved since those Dark Ages. So, for that reason, I would advise you stick to the more recent stuff, if you choose to read anything of mine.
Just so you know, these are posted firstly according to what kind of pairing, if any, is in the story, and then in chronological order in accordance to my own canon, not necessarily the order in which they were posted.
My first chaptered fic. It’s terribly written, but I still have a place in my heart for it because of how much fun it was to write. This story has now been deleted on MNFF, but if you really, really want to read it, you can still find it on FF.net and HPFF. (I advise you don't, though :P)
Second Childishness and Mere Oblivion (James/Lily)
Written for Round One (Major Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon, this one-shot is about James and Lily’s relationship getting rockier and rockier after they left Hogwarts, especially when Lily is faced with the trials of being a wife and motherhood. A little smutty.
My Love is Always Here (James/Lily)
This was a belated birthday present for the wonderful Gina/Gmariam, aka the queen of James/Lily. This is mostly about Lily dealing with becoming a mother for the first time and the problems (as well as the joys) that come with that.
There's an Answer (Remus/Tonks)
Written for Sophie/The owl for SPEW Summer Swap IV. Tonks is sent on an interesting baby Auror assignment to do with werewolves. Remus and a dangerous Muggle are thrown into the mix, with interesting results.
Left Behind (Remus/Tonks)
An expanded version of one of my LoveNotes, written for SPEW. It's a missing moment set between OOTP and HBP, where in my head canon Remus and Tonks have been together, in secret, for a few weeks already and Remus is then told to go on his werewolf mission. Slightly smutty.
One and Only (Remus/Tonks)
Written for the lovely Alex/Ithinkrabis2people in the Ravenclaw Christmas Drabble Exchange. This is a missing moment set just after Tonks’s outburst to Remus in the hospital wing at the end of HBP.
Out of My Life (Harry/Ginny)
My only AU (kind of). I tweaked a small part of canon in this -- basically, Harry actually said goodbye to Ginny properly when he broke up with her. Very angsty, and this is only up for sentimental reasons, as I wrote it during The Dark Ages (aka when I was fourteen).
A Different Kind of Magic (Harry/Ginny)
Written for the You’re Having My Baby challenge at SIYE. Ginny finds out she’s pregnant, but Harry receives the news before her and therefore has to tell his wife. This was my first ever story at MNFF. It was written when I was thirteen, and it definitely shows.
A Different Kind of Magic 2: Parenthood (Harry/Ginny)
A sequel, obviously, to A Different Kind of Magic. Ginny goes into labour, and both Harry and Ginny realise what it means to be parents. Again, this was written from Back in the Days.
The Caustic Ticking of the Clock (Rowena/Helga)
Written for the Great Hall Cotillion, this story is my only Founders story so far, and it’s about Rowena and Helga’s secret relationship. I am proud of this one, which doesn’t usually happen :)
Catching Fire (James/Sirius)
This was written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Embers”, and it’s set just after Remus’s second transformation with the Marauders. James is badly injured, and he and Sirius realise, inadvertently, that they might just have feelings for each other. I like the pairing but still think the story needs work. One day I will go back and edit.
Flicker and Fail (Katie/Leanne)
This was written forSecret SPEW, and my recipient was the absolutely fabulous Alex/welshdevondragon. It’s my take on Leanne and Katie’s relationship from way before they were even at Hogwarts as well as what eventually happens to Katie in HBP, when she was cursed.
Skinny Love (Louis/Lily)
Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion. Set during Teddy and Victoire's wedding, Louis helps Lily come to terms with her bulimia. This one was pretty difficult to write.
Blood and Roses (Scorpius/Rose, Scorpius/Dominique, Dominique/OC)
Written for the Great Hall Mysterious Maychallenge, this was my first Next Generation fic about Scorpius, mostly, and the trials he faces after his daughter is murdered.
Broken Glass (Louis/Lily)
This is the story of when Loulily really began. After the deaths of his immediate family, Louis is finding it hard to cope, even six months later. Lily somehow helps. It’s a little smutty. I’m proud of this one, too :)
The Highway of Regret (Scorpius/Lily, Scorpius/Rose, Louis/Lily)
Also written for the Great Hall Cotillion. It’s my one and only Scily. This is all about secret relationships and mistakes people make. Lily’s angry at Louis, and Scorpius has just broken up with Rose; when Lily gets drunk in the pub, things... happen. :P
I Will Lay Down My Heart (Albus/Rose, Scorpius/Rose)
Written for Round Two (Minor Characters) of Madam Pomfrey’s Character Clinic Triathlon. Albus has been in love with Rose for years, but what happened with them when they were younger has put a dent in their relationship. It doesn’t help that Rose is actually in love with Scorpius, either. This is smutty too.
One More Night (Albus/Rose, Rose/Scorpius)
Companion piece to I Will Lay Down My Heart. This goes into more detail about Rose and Albus's changing relationship as well as the aftermath of the events in said companion story. Probably the smuttiest thing on my page. :D Written for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.
This was written for the Great Hall-iday challenge for the Operation: Mistletoe prompt, and this was where my love for Loulily began.
This is about how five men in Potterverse dealt with remorse in different ways.
This poem is about how Remus feels about Sirius (not slashy, btw).
Written for the Magic in Music challenge over inPoetry, Anyone? This was set to the track “Obliviate” in DH1 and is about Hermione modifying her parents’ memories.
Written for the Goodbyechallenge in Poetry, Anyone? This was about saying goodbye, and how difficult it could be.
After All This Time
Written for the Deathly Hallows challenge inPoetry, Anyone?. I ship unrequited Snape/Lily, and this is probably the only time Snape will be on my author page, lol.
Written for the MC Kreacher challenge inPoetry, Anyone? This was written from the POV of Bill Weasley after his wife’s death.
Written for the Great Bannermakers’ Hallchallenge. The banner I picked had Merope Gaunt on it, and it’s probably my darkest story; it’s definitely the only one to have a dubious consent warning. It’s about, as you might guess, the abuse Merope suffered from her father and brother.
In Care (Marlene/OC)
Marlene McKinnon, as a care kid, eventually falls in love with another care kid, Jamal Olawumi. But he's a Muggle, and keeping her world secret proves difficult. This is definitely a story I would like to revisit and tidy up.
Just Across the Bar (Sirius/Rosmerta)
Sirius is just about of age, but obviously Rosmerta has misgivings about having feelings for Sirius, who is still a student. Written for the 2013 Great Hall Cotillion and also smutty.
Written for SPEW 007. My prompt was “Juggling”, and it’s just a silly piece of dialogue-only banter between Remus and Sirius. Sirius realises Remus likes Tonks, and he tries to persuade Remus to act on his feelings.
Hanging by a Thread (Katie/Oliver)
Written for the lovely Jess/ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor for Secret SPEW VII. Katie is grieving and drowning her sorrows in alcohol and Oliver is trying his best to save Muggles, while trying also to bury feelings for Katie that he thought he had long since forgotten about. There is also, surprise surprise, some smut in this.
And that’s it! Along with being a moderator, I’m also a member of SPEWand SBBC. I hope to see you around on the forums; feel free to contact me via PM or review if you have any questions or comments about my stories!
I really liked this sonnet. Usually I'm not a fan because they're so short but I really think you captured what you wanted to say there. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! Sonnets, while short, are also quite difficult >.< I'm glad you liked it! Peace, Virgil
Aww...made me feel a bit soppy inside - but I'm a hopeless romantic. Great story, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Sounds like me... I just love a good fluffy romance!
Growing up as Albus Potter was not an easy task, and being the son of the Chosen One wasn't a piece of cake, either. Expectations of greatness have the startling ability to crush someone, especially an eleven-year-old boy.
Join Albus Potter in his rocky journey to adulthood and what it's like to live, to learn, to love, to lose, and to be the middle child.
This story is going to be epically long, and yes, I will update. It may not come as fast as the updates to The Vindication of James Potter did, as I'm posting this as I write it, but I do promise that this story will not fall victim to apathy. Hopefully, you enjoy this story if you decide to read it. :)
Wow. This is really good. Usually I get bored with the adventures of first-years, even next-gen kids, but still, this fic is probably the first that I actually like. Are you going to get Rose and Scorpius together? You have to, they're my favourite next generation couple along with Teddy and Victoire of course. I actually liked the Sorting Hat song - you did a great job of it. Scorpius is somewhat like his father, ditto Rose and her mum and Albus and his dad. And, of course, James and his cockiness is just like his grandpa and a bit of Fred and George too.
I really liked the way you had Albus met Snape, although I think Snape gave away too much to Albus for a first meeting, to be honest. I'm glad to see Snape hasn't changed much; I don't expect him to be angelic or anything after all he's did.
Also, Albus' nonchalant reaction when Snape says he has his grandma's eyes is very Harry-like too, even though in general Albus is more childish than Harry.
I really really reallly hope that you hook up Rose and Scorpius in this fic. That would make things really interesting as I'm guessing Al and Rose will hang around together a lot, being cousins and all, so Al would hate it if Rose liked Scorpius and stuff.
Excuse my rambling - I just haven't read a really decent fic for a while. I look forward to the next update!
Well, I'm glad you like it. :)
A lot of different things are going to happen in this story, and I'm trying really hard to properly separate Albus's Hogwarts experience with Harry's. It's something that I personally see a lot in fan fiction, turning Albus into the next Harry. To me, they're virtually nothing alike,and in the next few chapters, that will start to become very obvious.
Thank you for reading, and I hope you do enjoy future installments. This won't be a fast updating story, as it's sort of a long-term WIP when I have time, but I'm going to try to get at least one chapter out a month at the very least. Take care and happy reading!
Oh God! Did you have to do that to Albus? I feel so sorry for him now. You've made this so believable and so unlike Harry's first year yet so similar at the same time. Getting lost and getting in trouble - but I have to admit, it was a huge surprise for me to find out that Albus is afraid of heights! I really didn't expect that. Rose is so Hermione-like except for when she's better than Albus.
I like how you included that Pinky is Winky's daughter. The elf names are so cute: Dobby, Pinky and Winky. Speaking of which, who's Pinky's father? I hope it's Dobby :P
Overall, a brilliant chapter. You have me hooked on this story. And the best thing about you, Jess, is that you're such a fast updater compared to some of the other authors, so I never have to wait long between chapters. I'm moving house at the moment too and my life is just packing right now. It's awful, seriously. So don't feel bad if you can't update as regularly as you'd want, I totally get it anyway.
You're a very talented author and I can't wait for the next chapter! (I can see why it's your baby!)
Do I like torturing Albus as a character? Not particularly, as he is my favourite. But, I do hold that one of the main driving forces of the story is that he has a rough go of things simply due to his weaker personality. He's actually a lot like Neville, which is why a teacher went against the Deputy Headmistress's wishes and let them off the hook easier. It's just the subtle differences between him and Harry - the motion sickness, the social ineptitude, the fear of heights - which separates him from being Harry Potter Round Two.
You know, I never really thought about who Pinky's dad is (Pinky is actually a boy, though. I don't think I mentioned that.). It could very well be a case of him being born after a particularly bad night of Winky's butterbeer-lubricated sulkies that she'd had over the years. Her getting knocked up (and now I'm trying to banish the idea of drunken elf sex from my head...eww) could be what drives Hermione to get her the help she needed to be happy in clothing.
I'm glad you like the story so much. As you can tell, it's going to be really long, but it's sort of Albus's life story, and I'm not going to kill him off. This will actually lead all the way into Al's adult life, since that is where all of his time at school is leading. I probably could have broken this up into 'books' for each year, but for all I know, I might even gloss over an entire year. We'll see. I will, however, keep this story going as a side project to pick up when I feel Albus in the back of my brain, asking for me to get cracking.
Thank you so much for your praise and for your support. Authors appreciate it so much. Take care and happy reading,
I finally got a chance to read this, despite my protestations against anything chaptered because I simply don't have the time :D
I really enjoyed this. Mark Moon definitely deserved the QSQ he got for Best OC. I loved Mark as an OC and it's rare for me to like any OCs because they're normally so Mary-Sueish (or Gary-Sueish, in Mark's case) but in this story, I think it was the complete opposite. There's something very endearing about an ordinary guy who can actually stand Lavender Brown. :P
In this chapter you did the contended/contented thing again a couple of times and also, it should be ‘That’s the smell of my girlfriend burning eggs instead of frying them,' he told her. (You put the speech marks in the wrong places.) There are other errors too, but they're in other chapters and I'm too lazy to point them all out in a review :D
What I liked the most about this was the characterisation of Lavender. She comes across as such an airhead in HBP but truly, she was just an ordinary schoolgirl who was perhaps a bit too girly, but nevertheless had a good heart.
And I think she, like many other people, both HP characters and people in RL, tend to mellow out and become more humble when life-threatening things happen to them or when they make proper friends, so I'm really impressed with the way Lavender's changed. She's still got the girliness but she's also got the toughness and maturity that she needs to make up for her flaws. I loved Parvati's characterisation too.
What I found the most interesting was Lavender's transformation. When Lavender asked if Mark was sure they should do this, I was wondering if it was the...erm...other bedroom activity, but no, it was full moon. It intrigued me, the Potion, and I think that it's one of your many ingenious ideas which, in my opinion, rivals Fred and George Weasley's in terms of creativeness, so well done for that.
Janey Scott was another interesting idea, although she wasn't too likeable as a character -- and I know that that was your intention. Overall, I'm very glad to have read this, Neil, because it clears up a lot of queries I've had about Lavender, who, in my head, did not become a full werewolf when Greyback attacked her in the Final Battle -- "my" Lavender just has a similar condition to Bill. Besides, I kind of like the idea of a girly girl having a liking of rare steaks :P
Still, this fic displayed how relationships are always imperfect but that doesn't mean they're bad. In fact (for Lavender) they're actually pretty good, minus burnt eggs. :D Ta for writing, Neil.
Thanks for the review. Moon may well have won the QSQ, but this is one of my least read (and least reviewed) stories. Mark is, I hope, fairly ordinary, a little quiet and very tenacious. I reckon that Mark is better organised, tidier, and a better cook that Lavender, too.
You’re going to make me reread the entire thing to spot my mistakes? :-D Fair enough, it’s always easier for me to find errors six moths later (embarrassingly so).
Lavender is often there in the background, helping. She joined the DA before Prof. Trelawney was targeted by Umbridge. In another of my stories I had Ginny describe Lavender as “a steel fist in a frilly pink lace glove”. That’s how I see her.
I had a lot of fun writing both the “scar” scene in chapter 5 and the bedroom scene in chapter 6. I tried to keep the bedroom discussions sound like they were talking “bedroom activities” (though I suspect that Lavender wouldn’t restrict herself to bedrooms anyway) for as long as possible.
I really like Janey. She’s simply lonely and alone. Her accent was a risk, and I toned it down considerably after the first draft.
How easy it was to break them.
All it took was a smile, a few good conversations, and some daredevilry on your part to take risks and do the impossible.
A great story! Really interesting, and I like how you didn't mention a single name until the end. I like the way Scorpius just went up to Rose to say hi, and they eventually became friends, then a couple. I liked the kiss too. Well done.
Author's Response: Hello Soraya!!
It's great you liked my 'no-names' approach. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
That was great! I've read a few fics trying to fill in this moment and this is one of the best.
Author's Response: Oh, wow! thank you so much.
This one actually made me weep a bit - but I'm a bit of a softie to be honest when it comes to good fics. The last time Petunia saw her sister should've been a good time, and it was, until Vernon's obesity spoilt it. I loved the note from Sirius at the end - really sweet. The dog disguise and how Lily and James covered for Sirius was really funny. I think this fic showed a bit of the compassionate side of Petunia - a side not really shown in the books.
Great job, keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I have to confess that I went rather blurry eyed myself when I wrote the last section about her packing away the veil and knowing she has to leave Privet Drive.It was a shame that Vernon being fat (and vain for not getting the suit altered) ruined what should have been a reconciliation. Thanks again ~Carole~
Aw! That was really sweet. I loved the descriptions at the beginning as well as how you managed to tell a story in such a short space, which I think (as a generally verbose writer--and reviewer!) is a real talent. I absolutely adore the idea of leaving the school in the boats, the same way that they had arrived, but of course I think they'd need more than they did to start off with, having grown so much over the years.
Your story, particularly the ending, ties in with the title nicely, which I really appreciate and enjoy. I liked this story very much, but I do think that it would have been better if you had a beta, because my inner beta reader eye already spotted a few errors with regards to spelling and punctuation and grammar. That was the only thing which distracted me from what would otherwise have been a pretty flawless story. Still, well done, and keep it up!
Author's Response: Wow thank you so much for the compliments! I'm so glad you liked my story. I did some research, and J. K. Rowling mentioned that the seventh years left Hogwarts in the boats, so that's where I got that. I know that I really should have beta readers, but I don't like people seeing my work before they're published, and I don't like people telling me how I should write, so some grammatical errors do get past me sometimes. Thanks again for the review!
The title made me think that this was actually going to be Hermione's diary. LOL, how wrong I was! Still, it was an interesting one-shot. I know how much you hate the Malfoys so I can tell you had fun writing about him!
I know that this was a great way of getting back at Dramione writers for writing Draco as a loving, handsome guy who you clearly don't think he is. Kudos to you for that, because now even my image of Malfoy has gone somewhat hazy.
I loved the way Hermione put up the Galleon with Dobby's picture on it. What I like the best about your writing is that fact that you're so creative when it comes to creating non-canon magical stuff like the Portbooks and Portcards and all of that. It makes things so much more interesting and they're really original ideas.
Nitpicks again: I don't think it’s necessary to capitalise “Good morning, sir and madam”. At least, not the “Good Morning” bit. Also, when you said “Draco didknow” you need a space between “did” and “know”. Maybe, when Hermione goes back in time, you could have the memories in italics?
Finally, I really like how you've given Zabini a backstory after the war. I've always thought his mum was a character -- marrying a toyboy! Anyway, well done.
I don’t hate the Malfoys, I hate poor characterisation (and the bizarre idea of Draco Malfoy as a sex-symbol). The Malfoys are brilliant characters. Every story needs conflict, and without the conflict between Harry and Draco the books would not have worked. The Malfoy’s are capable of love. Cissie loves Draco (she may even love Lucius too). Draco definitely loves Draco (at least he did until HBP).
Draco is a pale boy with grey eyes and pointed features, and that’s all we know. JKR gives us very little in the way of descriptions for any of the characters. The Quidditch girls all think that Cedric is good looking, no one else gets rated (apart from Fleur). I assume that Draco is at best, average looking, he was (possibly) the second choice (after Blaise) of “pug faced” Pansy, who is no great catch.
The Galleon was Luna’s idea (in my story “Grave Days”, but she thought of it, not me) and the Portbook/Portcuffs first appeared in “Aurors and Schoolgirls,” I re-use my own stuff.
Zabini is the person I’m least happy with in this story. This is another one-shot for me to look at again and try to fix your criticisms.Neil
The problem? Well, let's see. One of her seven possible players is an utter klutz at Quidditch. Two others are often too busy with their school Quidditch teams to practice hard during the school year. And then there's just the little matter of getting to the finals, facing up against a team that's won two years running and isn't afraid to play dirty, and getting her team through the game unscathed...
"We'll win," she says. "We're going to prove that weâ€™re the best team in East Anglia.â€ť
People scoff. But her team believes - and that's all that really matters.
Minna -- I just finished reading the prologue and the two chapters. (I'm just reviewing this chapter because it hasn't got any reviews.)
And it's such an injustice that this has so few reviews! It deserves more, it really does. Even for me, a complete and utter sport-tard, I can see how hard you've worked on this and how much research has gone into it too. I mean, I'm trying to imagine how difficult it would be to write a story set in a country I've never been in. I've attempted it several times and it's never worked, so kudos to you for being able to do so, and so well, too :)
I really like all of your OCs and I think your strengths are definitely dialogue and organisation. Not once was I confused at where the story was going, and all the characters had their own personalities and are fully fleshed out. I think I like Eleanor the best -- she reminds me of me and how sportially illiterate I am! (And I know sportially isn't a word lol.)
I'm intrigued. I shall start betaing now :)
Author's Response: Aw thank you Soraya. <33 (And I'm a sport-tard too, I just like Quidditch). Personally, I love doing the research about other places, especially in the UK! I honestly tracked down a book called "The English Landscape" in order to have it in my life, and it has useful chapters about different bits of England - best, of course, when writing things set in the countryside. I worked/am working hard on characterization with this story, as in 'actually taking the time to flesh out OCs', so I am glad you like them. I identify with Eleanor best too, haha - if anyone in this story is self-insert, it's her. Anyway - thank you! Wasn't expecting you to read and review along with betaing.
I don't own Beauty and the Beast or Harry Potter.
Chapter 2 is here!
Aw. That' so cute! This fic was a great idea; it's different to the other Remus/Tonks fics which usually focus on what happened earlier on in their relationship before Teddy was born. This one is great as well because it's a mixture of both. Great job :D
Author's Response: Thanks, I thought the R/T shippers could use a fresh story style. I really like the story telling aspect as well. It allows me to show how they both felt and thought at a given moment, and it lets the reader see their relationship with eachother and their son when they aren't stressed out, which we never really saw in the books. =) Thanks for reviewing again!
Aww, how cute! I really like this story - it provides an insight as to what Remus' and Tonks' lives were like during that brief time when they had Teddy. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. =) And thank you for reading my work!
I really like how the lines are so short yet tell the story in such a poignant way. This was one of my favourite chapter in HBP and I love your interpretation of it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It means a lot to me that you liked it. ~Thestral
Arthur Weasley has an obsession. He can’t keep it off his mind. It tinges every thought in his head and consumes his dreams. He can’t concentrate on anything else. His friends, the ones who haven’t given him up as a bad job, tell him he’s crazy and he knows they’re probably right. But that’s not even the worst part. Do you know what the worst part is?
She’s completely oblivious.
…And you thought it was Muggle Studies he was obsessed with.
Chapter 6: Quidditch and Kids is up!
I liked Arthur's musing here. It was an interesting insight into his mind, something we never get to see in the books. I'm glad you updated after a long while, and I really enjoyed this chapter.
But (and there's usually a but) I did have an issue with the word "alright". Usually the mods refuse any fic point-blank with the word, so I have no idea how you managed to get that, but anyway, technically -- and, I think, grammatically -- it should really be "all right". Sorry, it's just that you did this about three times so I couldn't help but notice. :D
Oh, the other thing is the use of the word "ok". I think (but am not entirely sure) that it should either be "OK" -- capitalised -- or "okay". Apologies if I haven't noticed this earlier on in the story.
The chapter was a bit on the short side but it was a quality one, I'll give you that. I hope you alleviate the gloominess in the next (hopefully longer) chapter, because I'm really looking forward to it!
Author's Response: Haha, it was actually the second longest chapter yet. It just felt short because there was so little dialogue. =)
I'll take care of the 'alright's and 'ok's soon. Thanks for pointing those out. I'm glad you liked the chapter, Soraya. Don't worry, the next chapter will have... quite a few developments. *grins*
I really like this story!! I just haven't had time to read it before but now I'll definitely find some time because it's really good! I love the little insertion of all the old characters, like Andromeda and Hagrid and Dorcas Meadowes and Dirk Cresswell. And the characterisation of seventeen-year-old Arthur Weasley is so good. Molly too - she's got just enough Ginny in her yet retaining the vestiges of her own character - and it takes real skill to be able to do that, so well done. The only thing that I would change is when Molly says “Some kind of Scarlet Woman?” You don't really need to capitalise "scarlet woman" because JKR never did in canon, so you know... Sorry, I'm just a bit nitpicky with this kind of stuff, I just think it looks a bit strange, that's all.
Apart from that, I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading! I'll be sure to fix the Scarlet Woman thing. =P I'm glad you are liking it. =D Thank you for the review!
The hallmark of Dumbledore's Army was their refusal to give in to the darkness that was slowly but surely emcompassing their world. As long as there was a hope, the DA would live on. This is a warning, an invitation, a promise, to one and all that they will not back down until the battle is won.
This poem placed third in the Last Line Standing Challenge in Poetry Anyone. The last words of each line are from a non-HP poem (Robert Frost, but the name of the poem escapes me), but we were to build a new poem around it.
That was a really thought-provoking poem. I like the slightly old-fashionedness (using apostrophes and stuff). It really lives up to its title. Well done!
Thank you much. :)
I am not a poetess by any stretch of the imagination, but I thought that the DA deserved a few words to landmark their bravery. I'm glad I did them some justice.
Take care and happy reading,
He cannot bring himself to think the name. There is a glimpse of red. A laugh. A fumbled apology. A friendship.
How a death may change a life or two.
Winner of Best Non-Canon Romance in the Quick Silver Quill Awards 2010
Julia, I am ashamed to say that I have never read this before. I've always been put off with the EWE warning. But I finally decided to read it, and woooooow, was I pleased I did!
This is one of your best pieces, this and Waiting. It was AMAZING! It actually brought tears to my eyes. There's just something so hauntingly beautiful and honest about your writing style, and as you can tell, I loved it. I don't quite know how to describe it, but it's artistic and poetic, and I know you are both, judging by the beauty of your banners and poetry.
You've convinced me of Harmony. I never, ever thought I'd say that, being an ardent Harry/Ginny shipper, but even the most passionate Harry/Ginny shipper would not be able to deny the sheer beauty of this. This was absolutely amazingly fantabulous in every way and curse me for not reading more of your work! I shall have to rectify that soon.
Author's Response: Hi Soraya! Thanks so much for your lovely review. I always find it such a compliment if something I wrote evoked such an emotional response. So I really, truly appreciate this :) And to convince a canon shipper of Harmony... well, that's the best news of all! Harmony is a controversial ship but I'm so glad you found my portrayal of their relationship realistic. Again, thank you so much for this review. It brought a smile to my face :) - Julia x
This was very good. Just a couple of nitpicks--"Weasley's" doesn't need the apostrophe to pluralise it, so it should be "Weasleys". I liked your characterisation of Luna's mum and dad. I think only Luna's dad could've passed off leaving his daughter behind to be with his wife.
That said, I do have a bit of an issue with how you ended it, because I think you left it a bit too open if you know what I mean. You left the ends too loose. And usually it's not much of a problem and adds suspense as a cliffhanger or whatever, but...hmm. I don't know. I can't put my finger on it, but I just think you could have ended it a bit better. As well as that, you didn't exactly explain why Luna has been out of contact with Harry and co since Ron and Hermione's wedding, because they seemed pretty good friends and it would be quite strange for them not to at least stay in touch, you know? Anyway, that's all from me. I just think I owed you a couple of reviews after all your lovely ones, but it was only now that I had the time, so apologies that it was so overdue. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks for another review of one of my fics! Just by the way... your reviews are really nice and quite detailed and I find them really helpful. Thanks for the apostrophe nitpick... I'll fix that straight away. And I'm glad you liked my characterisation of Luna's parents. When I started this fic it was going to mostly be about Luna's mum, because I thought that wasn't talked about much in the books, but it sort of ended up going somewhere else. As to the ending - I can see why you think it's a bit open ended - endings are something I often struggle with a little, and I really wanted it to focus on her re-gaining her friendship with the trio and co. I might have a look at it, but I don't know that I'll change it much... to be honest I wrote this a while ago and I think I'll focus more on newer stuff. As to why Luna didn't keep up with the trio - I know I didn't explain it enough in the fic, I did try to put it in a bit but it didn't work so well. Basically it was that Luna's way of dealing with her grief from the Battle was initially to suppress it and then later just to run away from it, so she became absorbed in her travels with her dad for The Quibbler and left everything else behind. Anyway, thanks for the review, it was really helpful and I'll have a look at some of those things you mentioned.
When I asked Jess for story recommendations the other day, she described this story as â€śflailficâ€ť, and after reading it, I must say I certainly agree with her :) There are so many things about this story that make you shine as an author. I love your lyrical writing style as well as the effortless way in which you have managed to make this pairing, the rarest of rarepairs, work so naturally.
First person worked beautifully here in establishing Rabastanâ€™s voice. I felt so close to him as a character, and that really intensified the emotions he felt from the outset. This, I think, is even more important because so much of this story is driven by the characters themselves and what they say, rather than the plot, and it was due to the style of the story that I was gripped, right from the beginning: Truth, when it comes to human emotions, is such an odd thing. Can you put a finger on it? No, you cannot. I loved how you managed to convey so much of Rabastanâ€™s character through how he seemed to play with his own thoughts. Usually, I think the exploration of quite abstract concepts normally only work in poetry, but here, it is such a joy to read because it really is like Iâ€™m in his head and I can see him question himself, making me really understand Rabastan. Given heâ€™s a minor character in canon with little to no lines in the books, I think you built on what you knew about him -- being a Lestrange, his brother being married to Bellatrix, his allegiance to Voldemort -- excellently and also added in some intriguing character traits that made his characterisation unique.
Rabastanâ€™s view of Regulus is intriguing to read, not just of his attraction to Regulus but also his eventual regret for initiating him into Voldemortâ€™s circle. I feel there is a lot more humanity in Rabastan through that, and itâ€™s so interesting seeing Regulus through Rabastanâ€™s eyes, because Regulus seems like the only person who can see through him. I love Regulusâ€™s brutal honesty, too; his willingness to tell Rabastan the truth is admirable and makes him such a likeable character, especially when he says, â€śYou arenâ€™t calm or composed; youâ€™re passive and callous and cynical.â€ť. And by making both the characters so well-rounded, it adds so much to the chemistry between them and therefore made their kiss seem like the only logical thing, even if they were both on weed at the time.
That said, I do think that, at times, the space of a few months in only a couple of paragraphs meant the story was going a bit too fast, so perhaps bear in mind for the future (assuming youâ€™re going to continue this story -- I hope you do!) how a lot of their backstory seems to have been told rather than shown. For example, I feel I would have been a little more convinced if there was an actual interaction before their first kiss so Rabastanâ€™s attraction to Regulus could be shown in a clearer way, rather than simply being told that Rabastan is attracted to Regulus. But thatâ€™s quite minor, particularly as that chemistry quickly picks up, after the changing room scene. On another note, I really liked the use of italics when Rabastan and Regulus were meeting up. I know itâ€™s something you use quite often in your fics, but it works really well here, especially because of the introspective nature of the story.
Also, I really liked how Regulus bought Rabastan a ring -- thatâ€™s a really romantic gesture, but also, I loved the use of Protego and the line Last time I checked, Slytherins could love, because I think that is a really valid point considering the usual stereotypes regarding Slytherin being the supposedly â€śbadâ€ť house and so on. The use of Protego also linked it nicely to canon, as did, of course, the mentions of Death Eaters and the entrance of James, too. I can see how Regulus and Rabastanâ€™s exchange in chapter one might have been misconstrued by James, and I think that whole exchange was really tersely written; even though he only appeared for a moment, Jamesâ€™ characterisation was spot on, especially through Rabastanâ€™s eyes.
Overall, I think this was an amazing start to the story. Iâ€™m not sure if it will be updated, Natalie, but I hope it will, because I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and am eager to read more. :)
Author's Response: Soraya!!!!