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I am:

- between the ages of 0 and 21.
- an American
- a girl
- married to Teddy Lupin
- afraid of commas

I am not:

- JK Rowling
- tired of Harry Potter
- a moose (or any other forest animal)
- divorcing any time soon

Check out my stories - if you dare :).


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Sweet Transvestite by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

How else would he ever be able to stand in front of his father in fishnets, six inch heels, a short black dress and make up?


Hugo Weasley has a secret, and he doesn’t want his father to find out. However, he may have no say in the matter.

This story is written for lucca4/Ariana who is a wonderful writer and was lovely and enthusiastic about the December Drabble that prompted this idea. This story does, surprisingly, contain discussion of and mention of transvestism. Since that’s not an official warning, I thought it worth mentioning.

This is welshdevondragon of Gryffindor writing for the Fiendish Firsties Great Hall School of Mischief challenge. The title is from the song Tim Curry sings in The Rocky Horror Picture Show.


Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Slash

Word count: 3841 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/01/12 Updated: 05/01/12


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 05/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

YAY YAY YAY YAY! Oh my goodness that was fantastic! :)

Okay, this review isn't going to be anything structured or fab and basically it will be far less than you deserve because I'm squeeing. Basically, your drabble was shocking (because I'd never read a transvestite fic before then) and there was something about the shockingness of the drabble that made it so addictive (which is a difficult feat for a 100 word drabble!). This fic retained all of that - and more. I love Angel (and not just because he's American :D). I love the fact that he knows more than Hugo how burdensome the secret is. And I love the way you've written their romance - it's still heart-stopping and touching, but it's edgy. I love that :).

Surprisingly (because she didn't feature much in the original drabble, or if she did I don't remember her because I was too focused on the glory that is Hugo), I liked Lucy a lot in this - especially after the ending few paragraphs. She's not often written about and I love how you've characterized her - so compassionate and sweet and fun (and so unlike Percy - thank god). She might be my favorite character in this and if I was being cheeky I would suggest you write more about her in the future ;).

Also, following your LS posts, if this was the Ron you were worried about then don't worry at all. I can't even fathom trying to write him in this situation (or any situation for that matter, but this one is exceedingly difficult) but when I read this I knew that you nailed it. He's still that awkward guy who says all the wrong things, but he's a father now and his emotional capacity (to use Hermione's phrase) has expounded significantly, and you can really see that here.

Thank you for writing this, and for writing it for me! I am a definite fan if you can't tell yet :). This fic left me smiling.

xx Ariana

 

Snap by Eleanor Lupin
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

Miriam

that's such a pretty name

I'm gonna smile when

you say goodbye...

Narcissa Malfoy is a balanced person. She does not fly off the handle, she does not overreact.

But sometimes things happen. And sometimes people snap.

The song lyrics in this are from Miriam by Norah Jones. Big thank you to Alice/theblacksister, my awesome beta!



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mild Profanity

Word count: 1823 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/16/12 Updated: 05/23/12


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 05/26/12 Title: Chapter 1: Miriam

I am on a Norah Jones kick right now, so when I saw the song lyrics in the summary I had to click on this story. And I am so, so glad that I did.

In the books Narcissa isn't really given a dark side (and I know this sounds off because she was married to a Death Eater, but apart from her nastiness in GoF we don't really see her doing anything horrible herself). I think that's part of the reason I fell in love with this fic so quickly. It's so easy to paint Narcissa as a delicate flower, obsessed with being safe and secure. This story completely counteracted that notion. You gave Narcissa a sort of strength and vindictiveness I haven't seen yet, and it worked brilliantly.

Your writing itself took my breath away. I had kind of guessed what would happen at the end, as I've listened to the song a fair amount of times, but the way you wrote it was just….I don't' even have words to describe it. I absolutely love the final two lines - they are absolute perfection.

Beautiful job with this story. I hope to read more of your fics in the future :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: I love Norah Jones music too, it's awesome - her new album is practically begging for songfics. :) I'm glad you liked my characterization, I loathe that delicate flower thing as well so it's very nice to hear that my version of Narcissa worked. Thanks for such a lovely review! :)

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Here in the dark
In these lonely hours
I will lay down my heart
And I’ll feel the power
That you won’t

--I Can’t Make You Love Me by Bonnie Raitt

Albus realises just how much Rose means to him -- and how much he doesn’t mean to her.

This is babewithbrains of Ravenclaw writing for Round Two of Madam Alex’s Character Clinic Triathlon.

:) This story has been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation.

This story has also been nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill Award: Best Next Generation. Thank you again! ♥



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 5066 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/19/12 Updated: 07/19/12


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/11/13 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Lay Down My Heart

This is one of my favorite cousin!fics ever. I think it really comes down to the way you write Albus and Rose - their relationship as cousins is so perfect, they understand each other so well it's almost like they're best friends. Albus's hopelessness over Rose and his living with the knowledge that she will always love Scorpius more than she loves him is heartbreaking, and it makes his night with her at the end all the more bittersweet.

The flying scene is also beautifully written. It's so absolutely sweet of Albus to try to help Rose get over her fear of flying, especially when it's something he loves and is good at. The comfort Rose began to feel with him was also extremely well-written, I love the idea that the only one who can make her feel better is Albus, because that idea is also paralleled in the ending scene. The friendship between them is so real, and i can see why Albus would be the one Rose wanted to turn to when things got 'complicated' (to use Albus's word :D) with Scorpius -- I don't think she fully realizes just how deeply Albus cares for her, and just how much she is going to hurt him when the morning comes.

This is an absolutely fantastic story, Soraya, and I'm kicking myself for not reviewing it when I first read it. However much angst went into this, the end product was mind-glowingly gorgeous, and I hope you know that :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu, Ariana! :D :D :D

It means so much to me that you enjoyed this story and left such a fantabulous review for it (you really didn't have to, but I am so glad you did :) ). I think the dynamics of Albus and Rose have always fascinated me because they are, arguably, closer than say Louis and Lily due to their parents being close. So I think the whole forbiddenness is a lot more prominent in this than in my Loulily stories. But anyway, I am so glad you liked how I wrote Albus and Rose -- I will say that writing parts of this was like laying eggs, so it means a lot that you liked how I wrote them as both cousins and lovers.

I have no idea why I decided to make Albus a Quidditch nut! But hehe, I did, and I'm glad you enjoyed that scene because it was one I could envision quite clearly, while others were more difficult/vague. And yeah, ultimately, Rose does depend on Albus -- a lot.

The friendship between them is so real, and i can see why Albus would be the one Rose wanted to turn to when things got 'complicated' (to use Albus's word :D) with Scorpius -- I don't think she fully realizes just how deeply Albus cares for her, and just how much she is going to hurt him when the morning comes. Not that I'm self-pimping in the slightest, but my Cotillion fic (one of them, anyway XD) is a companion piece to this and does actually include a scene (coughshowerscenecough) in the morning, if you're interested ;) I mean, that particular part isn't up yet, but it will be soon, fingers crossed.

I honestly think you are far too kind, Ariana, and it really isn't thaaaat good, but it means SO much to me -- coming from such an amazing writer yourself -- that you enjoyed this story. Thank you again for the loveliness! *heart*

Soraya xxx

 

Cartoon Heart by Padfoot11333
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary:

Adrian didn't know how he'd fallen for her. He didn't want to.


And even though he could not think of leaving her, she acted, every moment, as if she could leave him without thinking twice.

Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Post/Hogwarts.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1114 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/27/12 Updated: 09/28/12


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 09/30/12 Title: Chapter 1: be a bright red rose and come bursting the concrete

I think that the unsatisfying ending to this story is one of the best things about it. It's easy to write a story where everything works out all right, or where everything becomes hopeless, but to write an ending that's caught in that kind of purgatory between getting what you want and losing what you have is just beautiful.

The imagery and the style of this piece was incredibly well done. I'm a big believer in parentheses if they're used advantageously, which you did here -- they really help to show Adrian's thoughts in a third-person context. Daphne is one of my favorite characters to write and read about, and I really liked her characterization here…I see her as being kind of ephemeral, as well.

This is beautiful writing, Lily. It's short, but you've been able to sum up so much of their relationship in so few words. I think it's easy for readers to confuse the empathy they feel toward Adrian at the end with disappointment, but I hope you realize that this is far from a disappointing story. I don't usually tell people to discount negative reviews because I think the criticism helps you grow as a writer, but I don't agree with the first two reviews you received whatsoever, and I think the reason they're negative is that some people have certain preferences when reading romances (i.e., they like to see a happy ending) whereas I prefer a more realistic one like this. And it's so realistic. It's bittersweet -- my favorite kind of read -- and the way that you've executed it shows your maturity as a writer :). xx Ariana

 

Deceptions by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Beautiful and headstrong, with Veela blood running through her veins, Fleur Delacour understands the importance of looks, but as she seeks to ensnare the intriguing young Auror standing guard at Hogwarts, she forgets the most important truth of all: appearances are often deceptive.

This is Equinox Chick and this is my first entry into the Great Hall 2013 Cotillion (yes, I did say first!)

Disclaimer; I am not JK Rowling. I'm also not very good at French.

Thank you Sophie (the owl) for fabulous beta job, and Natalie (hestiajones) for giving me some pointers.

Categories: Femmeslash Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 15308 Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/13/13 Updated: 02/11/13


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/13/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Peaches

Ooh, I'm intrigued! I think the fact that this is set during the Triwizard Tournament, and not post-DH, makes the pairing all the more fun, namely because of the gift that Tonks gives her at the end. I loved the interactions between Fleur and "Edwin" - ha ha - and the way you write Tonks is such the best (perhaps it's because you are Tonks…hmm).

I can't wait for Chapter 2 :)

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuu! I decided to set it at the Tri-Wizard because I think there's a lot more wriggle room with her characterisation and also Tonks's. They're not with their respective spouses at this point, so it's easier to write something with no guilt attached :)

Really appreciate the review - thanks again ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/11/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 -Flesh and Bone

I guess I missed the last time this was updated, because I was pleasantly surprised to find not one but two chapters for me to read - yay!

I loved this chapter. Contrasted with Roger's awkward kissing, it's easy to see why Fleur is so attracted to Tonks - and the heat between them is far more tangible than it is between Fleur and Roger. I absolutely adore the scene at the Yule Ball, the ending scene, especially when Tonks and Fleur run into Snape - hahaha, that made me smile. This is all written so beautifully -- Tonks's question about tomorrow really highlighted (for me, knowing this story probably won't defy canon) how ephemeral their relationship is doomed to be.

Off to read the next chapter now - this is brilliant :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank youuuuuuuuu. Glad you enjoyed this chapter because this was the point where I was wondering what the heck I'd started - ha ha. I did like writing the Snape bit and poor old Roger who I'm really not very nice to - ever. Sigh, perhaps I need to write him a story. Hmmmmmmm.

Thank you again for the lovely reviews and all your support. It is much appreciated. ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/11/13 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Distractions

Wow. You have officially converted me to Flonks. They are an extremely hot couple, and the smut scenes between them were gorgeously written :).

What I loved most about this chapter was the realization of how similar Tonks and Fleur are -- both strong, independent women, who both blame themselves for circumstances out of their control. Because of this, it's so easy to see that despite their relationship not quite lasting, they still care about one another and can maintain a friendship in the coming years of the war. So even though part of me wanted you to add an AU warning to this story and have the two of them run off to Calais and get married, in the end their inevitable parting left me complacent. I love how you have Bill meeting Fleur at the end of the Third Task, and since we see later how happy Fleur is with Bill it makes everything more sweet than bitter.

I love this story, and I know it's going to do fabulously in the Cotillion. I would ask for a follow-up, but I'm not that greedy, so I'll just plant the idea in your mind somehow… :)

xx Ariana

Author's Response: Thank you so very much - especially the comment on the smut because I very nearly left that out. I had such problems trying to make this work because at the back of my mind I love Bill/Fleur and Remus/Tonks, so I knew it wasn't going to be AU. Anyway, I had to add a little smut because otherwise the chemistry just didn't seem to be there :( . Hmm, maybe they could run off to Calais and then the other marriages will be bigamous - heh heh. God, Molly would have several merry fits if that were true.

Hmmm, follow up. Perhaps that's my AU tha i one day need to write. Thank youuuuuuu ~Carole~

 

The Walnut Tree by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 34]

Summary: When Charity Burbage became the Muggle Studies professor, she was looking for a new life, safe in the enclave of Hogwarts.

She certainly wasn't looking for love.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the Second Great Hall Cotillion.

Thank you, Natalie, (hestiajones) for an on the hoof beta job.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Student/Teacher Romance, Violence

Word count: 23788 Chapters: 5 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/26/13 Updated: 02/26/13


Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 01/26/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

I really like this so far! I meant to open this in a window read a little bit later, because we were about to start dinner, but the first paragraph caught my eye and then I couldn't stop reading. I've never really considered Oliver a character I had to read about, but you've already made me fall slightly in love with him in this chapter. I'm also ready to kill Dorinda and Marcus, and I'm slightly in awe of you - how you've made me feel so strongly about characters in just one chapter.

I'm excited to read the next part of this, I'll try to be patient :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: I hope your dinner didn;t get cold! Thank you so much for the review, and I'm really pleased that the first paragraph intrigued you enough to read on because I was setting it up to sound like a scary DE scene when really it was her first day of teaching - ha! Dorinda and Marcus are gits, but maybe not irredeemable. :) ~Carole~

 
Reviewer: lucca4 Signed
Date: 02/08/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Laws

Ah, this chapter was well-worth the wait! You actually have me feeling sorry for Dorinda, when she was one of the characters I disliked the most in the first chapter. I love seeing the beginnings of Charity and Oliver's relationship, the little hints…you've painted characters who I really want to be together :).

Fantastic! This next wait will be even harder. xx Ariana

Author's Response: Actually, you won;t have to wait long as it's nearly set to go, I just need to tweak a little.

Thank you so much for the review, Ariana, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

 
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