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Real name: Nicole
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Hello there! I'm teh, or Nicole, or teh.


I write as much as time permits. But I'm slow, unfortunately. I hope you enjoy my stories. I'm on the forums, so if you have any questions about my writing or anything else, feel free to leave me a message! ☺
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A Time to Fall by Ennalee
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Molly Weasley lost two boys in the first war. She doesn't think she can bear to lose another.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1572 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/24/07 Updated: 07/24/07


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 11/24/12 Title: Chapter 1: A Time to Fall

This is a lovely, delicate and very sensitive piece of writing. It flows wonderfully and you handled the shifting POVs very gracefully. The detail of each character is amazing. I love it.

 

Half-life by welshdevondragon
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

Neville has the rest of his life ahead of him, but all he can do is look back. Molly feels as though she has already lived, and will spend the rest of her life sifting through her memories and regrets and never living in the moment.



AU in that Arthur Weasley dies in Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix. This is Jamie/AcaciaCarter’s and Soraya/babewithbrains’ fault, and therefore I present it to them.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 3450 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/15/12 Updated: 06/15/12


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 11/14/12 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

This is a wonderful story. Breathtaking, emotional, poignant without being sentimental. Great characterisation, lovely attention to detail, smooth transitions between the two POVs. The dialogue is natural, although the metaphor explanation is a bit long. The relationship between Molly and Neville is unusual but so well-developed.

I love the ending paragraph, and I love the usage of future tense for the last couple of sentences e.g. "Neville will write to Romilda...Molly will smile and give advice."

That was perfect. Thanks for writing this.

 

Quiet In Our Town by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: Past Featured Story

The earth is taking back what it’s lost. There are new terrors to battle now.

The end of the world comes not from the hand of Lord Voldemort, but an incurable disease. When Britain falls, those that are left must keep on running.

And never stop.

Winner of the 2012 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Alternate Universe!



Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Suicide, Violence

Word count: 4172 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/02/12 Updated: 07/02/12


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 11/22/12 Title: Chapter 1: Today we heard that someone left this earth.

There are so many things about this story that just...left me speechless. I read this some weeks ago but was unable to review because I wasn't sure what to say. And since then, I've read your story several more times over. It's brilliant. I was pretty much crying over my keyboard during my third reading of it :) And then marvelling at the reality that a HP fanfic about a zombie apocalypse (of all things) could make me cry.

So many fantastic things: first of all the structure. The wonderful reverse chronology. There was so much tension and tragedy building up simultaneously and at the same time it was chilling to witness all these dead characters pop back into life the further back the story went. Only that we know just exactly how they'll end up. And by the ending of the final section of the story I was struck by a deep horror, which is strange because the last moments of the narrative seemed to be full of lightness and hope and euphoria and excitement and I really don't know how you achieved this but wow! It's like there really is no escape from the ruined future.

I love the fact that you've chosen to really focus on your characters' emotional and psychological states, and how they cope within this new post-apocalyptic world. Your characterisation is stunning, even for the minor characters. Xeno Lovegood's third person POV was my favourite; you've paid so much attention to detail and the sentence structure is so sensitive and delicate and heartbreaking. The fragmentation of some sentences worked really well - especially these lines:

'If he brews enough Dirigible Plum Tea! If he spoon by slow spoon feeds her Plimpy Soup! If he grinds up Gurdyroots! If he does all this she’ll be fine, he knows, he knows! '

I think if you'd rephrased these words in a different order I wouldn't have been as affected by them. They are so carefully put together and they really do reflect poor Xeno's sense of panic and despair. This is such excellent detailed writing that I'm running out of adjectives.

And then there's Ron and Hermione. And Harry and Ginny. Again your characterisation is wonderful, and I could really feel their hopelessness and despair. I'm very glad that you chose not to focus on the bodily horror of the zombies, or to dwell on too much descriptive detail of the character deaths; these would have interrupted the intense level of emotional engagement the reader has with the characters. I'm also very glad you didn't focus on the other possible technicalities of AU genre fic, such as how they got Muggle weapons or why Malfoy Manor is a safehouse. While all these things would definitely have fleshed out your post-apocalyptic AU setting in greater detail, they would also have broken that level of reader engagement with the characters. I think you made the right choice in investing so much into characterisation.

OK, whew. I've rambled quite a bit. I meant to leave a meaningful review of some sort but looks like I failed. So I'll just say thank you so very much for writing this and I do hope there'll be more. This is my favourite story on the site.

-teh

Author's Response: Wow! I am so sorry I didn't notice this review until now. And such a wonderful review, too. Thank you so much! It is so nice to hear you say that about keeping to the characters and not worrying about explaining every detail. I really wanted to keep it about how the characters would act in such a situation, rather than going into technical aspects of the AU setting. And your review is not rambly, at all. It is wonderful and has me grinning like an idiot. Thank you so much :)

 

If No One Will Listen by Nagini Riddle
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: After Harry is picked as the fourth triwizard champion, he feels as though everyone has turned on him. But Hermione hasn't. She listens...

The song that inspired this poem was, "If No One Will Listen," by Kelly Clarkson.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 200 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/21/12 Updated: 10/23/12


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 10/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: If No One Will Listen

Lovely piece of writing. The opening images were striking - I particularly loved the part about "growing antlers" and "ashy grey". The final stanza was full of warmth and compassion and hope and I loved it!

The only thing that I feel might be better (and this is just my personal opinion...and it mightn't be too helpful since I don't write poetry) would be if you removed words like "tentatively" and perhaps "sombrely" as well. I find adverbs tricky, and even more so in poetry. I think they're not necessary since your other lovely descriptions already evoke a sombre tone.

Once again, lovely piece! Hope you write more =)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you!!! I can see what you mean about adverbs, since too many of them can clog up a piece, which I am sometimes guilty of. :) And if you want to read more, check out my author page. As alex13 can attest to, I have written pretty much poetry for the last five months, and it's filled up quite a chunk of my stories. Thanks again for reviewing! ~Nagini Riddle

 

A Palisade of Persuasion by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 69]

Summary: It was true that Daphne and Lee had met at a most inappropriate time, but they had found love, lust and the glimmerings of a life together.

But the power of persuasion should never be underestimated. When they meet again, years later, his indifference cuts to her core. Can the past ever truly be recaptured?

This story is a present for Julia (the opaleye) because she is amazingly talented and has inspired me in so many ways. It is also her brthday.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.

I am not Jane Austen.

I am not Sporty, Scary, Baby, Ginger or Posh.


Winner of the 2013 QSQ Best Chaptered Non-Canon Romance ~ I am gobsmacked and grateful to everyone especially JK Rowling, Jane Austen and the Spice Girls.



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 89290 Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/22/12 Updated: 09/21/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 11/22/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 ~ First Meeting

This is a lovely, witty and very light piece :) It's full of air and charm and I love the tone of it. And of course, Lee Jordan :D, one of my favourite characters. I love the light-hearted exchange between Daphne and Lee!

I'll be waiting to read more of this :) Great writing.

Author's Response: OHH, thank you for your review. Hmm, the prologue is light and witty, but the rest - not so much. There will be lighter chapters halfway through, but whilst this isn't going to be dark and angsty, I had to fit this in with the Potterverse at the time (Daphne meets Lee in the summer of 1997) ... so expect some drama.

Thank you again. ~Carole~

 

The Betrayed by minnabird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 1]

Summary: In the wake of Sirius' arrest, Sirius and Remus must try to deal with the bitter hands dealt them.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 196 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/12/13 Updated: 02/13/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 02/14/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, this is a really lovely heartbreaking poem. You've portrayed Remus and Sirius so well here - Sirius with his frustration and rage in Azkaban, and Remus at Sirius's supposed betrayal of trust. I love the image of Remus "blotting" out the memory of Sirius. A wonderful poem :) I can see why this won the challenge!

 

Shangri-La by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Past Featured StoryThe first time she sees him, he is leaning against the brick wall outside Tesco, paper in one hand, cigarette in the other.

A familiar stranger walks into Petunia Dursley's life.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 2313 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/20/13 Updated: 03/20/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 04/01/13 Title: Chapter 1: life ain't so happy in your shangri-la

Oh, Julia. This is just...amazing. I was utterly entranced by your writing, the beauty and the frailty of the prose, and it really brings out that idea of perfection in your story, and what a delicate balance Petunia maintains in her life. You've just written her in such an incredibly compassionate manner, and that's my absolute favourite thing I'd love to find in writing - characters wrought with compassion. And Petunia...poor Petunia. Struggling to deal with so many things - the incredible shallowness of her suburban life, her repressed grief at Lily's death and her lasting resentment toward Lily and Harry and how she has been excluded from the world Lily is privileged to belong to...

There are so many brilliant details and you convey Petunia's feelings, especially toward the mystery stranger, in such a subtle way: She’s nearly forgotten him, except in those unsatisfying moments at night when Vernon is asleep beside her and her thighs are still tingling, warm, not quite finished. Gah. I can't even. And yes, Petunia really does immerse herself in all the tiny details of her life, attempting to convince herself that her life is perfect in its hollowness and that she is absolutely not in denial. The roses, the eavesdropping on neighbours, the baking soda, the smiley facade...these are all so canon and yet you've really taken them further and added your own personal touch to them. I might be grossly misinterpreting your fic; I don't know :P

And gaaaaah. Remus :( :( :( :( My heart just dropped like a cannonball when he said that awful awful line: you're nothing like her after all. *SOBS* This piece. I dunno. So full of pain. So full of quiet pain and smoothed-over desperation and you've brought all this up so beautifully. And that lovely change of tone toward the end. Anyway. I really loved this. I think you're an amazing writer.

teh

Author's Response: Thank you so much, teh. After reading your own beautiful, amazing, magnificent writing, it means a lot to receive this review. Petunia was hard to get right. On the one hand, I needed to conjure some sympathy for her as the main protagonist. The reader needs to be compelled to want to read about her, since she is already a disliked character. On the other hand, I could not forget or ignore the horrible life she provided for Harry. Although it was a challenge, it was also interesting juggling those two aspects of the character. In canon we see a woman who relishes keeping her home for her husband and son, but then we also see this explosively bitter side to her towards her sister and nephew, and such ferocious jealousy. Jealousy is borne of dissatisfaction so I am just so happy to see that my interpretation of her character resonates with you, Carole, and my other reviewers. Remus is my favourite Marauder, and when I was challenged to write a drabble pairing Petunia with anyone but Snape or Vernon, my mind jumped to Remus immediately. I can imagine him secretly visiting Harry, watching from a distance, not just to check on Harry but also as a personal comfort after all that he has lost. Harry is the tether to his past life and the people who made him happy. But what would he think of Petunia? The sister of the woman who had been so kind towards him and so many others? What he said to Petunia was so cutting because I imagine he would be disappointed to discover Petunia's true nature after hoping to find another soul like Lily. Again, thank you so much for your review. It brought a smile to my day :D Julia xoxo

 

The Girl In Madam Malkin's by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: A man walks into Madam Malkin's and hands over some torn robes that need to be fixed.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 236 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/29/13 Updated: 03/29/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 03/31/13 Title: Chapter 1: The Girl In Madam Malkin's

Oh, this is such a beautiful piece. I never know what to say when it comes to poetry. But there's so much in this sad little piece and you've done an absolutely fantastic job in showing Amos' grief without being melodramatic. I love the mixture of tones (? not sure if this is the right word...), from Amos' overwhelming sense of loss to the salesgirl's pity and discomfort and her very mechanical and rather inappropriate response of "Four Galleons - half price special!" It's just so beautifully done.

teh

Author's Response: It is certainly a mixture of tones and I am glad you liked that. At first it seems like the straight-forward and banal experience of going into a shop but then the focus really shifts to the grief of a man who has lost his child. I think one of the most powerful scenes in the films is in GoF when Amos discovers Cedric is dead. His raw sobbing still gets me every time. We also see everyone else in the Triwizard audience looking on with such hopelessness, shock, and pity and it was interesting to draw from that. Anyway, I will stop rambling now haha. Thank you so much for your review :D :D :D Julia xoxo

 

Summary: Harry, Ron and Hermione are on a trip in America. Or are they? It's April Fools' Day, and they might just be the victim of one cosmic prank pulled by a red-headed man and a ghost.

For my flist, and for you.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Substance Abuse

Word count: 1062 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/31/13 Updated: 03/31/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 04/01/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, this was simply heartbreakingly beautiful. All the feels :( Your writing is so delicate, so frail, stretched so thinly that it could tear like tissue any moment. It was such a poignant moment when Ginny comes home to a dark lonely flat only to find all the Bertie Botts' Every Flavour Beans gone. What a lovely piece of writing.

These lines, in particular, really stood out for me: Soft, silky moonlight sifted through the curtains, pouring down her throat, wrapping around her splintery wishy-washy figure, more tenderly than any mollifying embrace of Molly's. Fragmentarily, she wondered if Buckbeak needed his toenails clipped.

Gorgeous imagery. And that was a really unexpected twist, there, with the grand piano! I think you've done a fantastic job in taking two relatively unknown canon characters and really bringing them to life and showing the intricate and complex interactions between them, and by the end of the story, I was all dissolved into a mess of tears, and congrats! You've just convinced me utterly, and my new OTP is now Aragog/Griphook. All the way. Thank you for writing this.

Author's Response: OMGGG! Someone FINALLY got all the things I worked really hard on. I'm so glad you liked those lines because it took me time to hone them to perfection. I just couldn't decide if I should focus on Buckbeak's toenails or Fangs's drooling jaws -- I mean, both sound so sensual. The grand piano was added at the last moment, mind, because -- hey -- they're after all caught in a fifth dimension. I mean, what else could save them, right?

As for Aragog/Griphook, they've been my pet ship for a while. I never had the courage to write them before :)

 

Summary: Voldemort laments his final battle from beyond the grave …

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Violence

Word count: 277 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/16/13 Updated: 04/27/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 04/27/13 Title: Chapter 1: Superharrywentballistichexedmesoferocious

Bahahaha! This completely made my day :D Was singing to this ^.^ Eee thanks for giving me some laughs!

Author's Response: Hello the tarik, glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for R & R-ing, Kara's Aunty ;)

 

Real, Emotional Girl by Belledeg
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 3]

Summary:

Katie Bell is twenty years old and happily working as a consultant and practitioner of the Transfiguration department in the new and improved Ministry of Magic, under the benevolent rule of Kingsley Shacklebolt. She has a lovely flat to herself, an excellent relationship with her two parents and three girlfriends who have always been there for her. However, it's safe to say that something is perhaps missing from her life.

After her first sighting of the loathsome, but now annoyingly rugged, Marcus Flint, negative memories of Hogwarts and the battle that changed everything resurface for Katie and she is forced to face the question: is she really living her life or just existing?

But when someone starts to stalk Katie, she is forced to turn to the last person she could ever have imagined for help in the matter and the question becomes why would someone want to harm her?

And why is this Slytherin, someone she should loathe as she once did, making her feel things and say things that she could never have imagined.

A Katie Bell/Marcus Flint romance

from the award winning author of "My Troubled Tyrant" and "Jemzi" comes a new romance

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 1167 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
05/05/13 Updated: 05/08/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 06/09/13 Title: Chapter 1: Mac the Knife

Hey there, I was just randomly browsing around and saw the pairing in your summary and was intrigued, so I dropped by!

Well, you've certainly got my interest piqued. This is such an amazing start; Katie's characterisation is really quite wonderful and detailed. You've done a great job portraying her restlessness, her ennui and that sense of unease with her past (i.e. the past Battle of Hogwarts in which she fought); all of these are aspects that really contribute to a great post-Hogwarts story.

Her encounter with Marcus Flint was both intriguing and shocking, and while Katie is quick to judge him, she isn't entirely at fault as he has been a particularly shady and unsavory character back in the Hogwarts days. I do like how Katie seems to be completely repelled by his actions and appearance, and that it seems that she has no wish to ever meet him again, not even a spark of curiosity. At least that's what I felt. It makes the whole scenario really realistic, actually.

And that was such a cliffhanger of an ending! I really did enjoy this story so far and I hope you update it soon :) I'll be keeping an eye out for this ☺

-teh

 

Of Ash and Fire by GinnyRULES
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Stranded in Tom Riddle's seventh year at Hogwarts, Hermione Granger is plagued by cryptic warnings from an intruder hidden somewhere in the school. Time is running out for her in more ways than one, as she attempts to return to her own time both to escape this mysterious threat, and the unavoidable allure of Riddle himself.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 12511 Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Published:
05/12/13 Updated: 06/11/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 06/04/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Hi! Gah, sorry it took me so long to come back to this fic; I actually read this chapter quite quickly after it was validated but was too busy to review until now.

There are so many things I adored about this chapter. I really like the creepy diary entries Tom writes - those scenes always provide a fresh change of POV, and there's always that sense of unease/foreboding, because that is the diary that will later become a Horcrux? There's something just so fascinating about someone as complex and powerful and manipulative and arrogant as Tom pouring his thoughts into a book - I mean, it's such a trivial habit, diary-writing, and the fact that he partakes in it makes him even more chilling, unpredictable. He's so cold and detached, even when writing down his own experiences.

The scene where Tom and Hermione started passing notes in class. I think Hermione almost finds it laughable that the great Dark Lord ever passed notes in class - well, he didn't until she came along :P

Well, this story just gets more and more intriguing. I have completely no idea who the poisoner is, and I can't even begin to guess what that cryptic 'fire and ash' message meant. This is fast becoming one of my favourite stories to read on the site! Great work.

-teh

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, I can't tell you what a joy it is to receive such a detailed and thoughtful review! I agree about the diary. There are so many interesting facets to Tom's personality, like the fact that he's so secretive and solitary that the only thing he can actually trust is an inanimate object... Haha there may be a lot more things Tom will start to do that he didn't before Hermione came along. I'm glad you're enjoying this. Submitting the next chapter right now, cheers! :)

 
Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 06/04/13 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

It's great to see that Tom and Hermione are almost on equal footing with each other. It does make sense that Hermione's otter Patronus could match Tom's Thestral (and by the way, Thestral was the perfect choice for his Patronus - because he would be familiar with death). Hermione, after all, has the greater capacity to feel happiness and other strong positive emotions that would have really enabled her to produce a strong Patronus.

Again, I loved the segment with Riddle's diary entry in it. And the last part of Merrythought was plain intriguing. It appears that she's in some sort of trance. Hmm. Anyway, loved this chapter heaps! I can't wait for an update. Also, I forgot to add this to my favourites but I shall do so right away. Toodle-oo.

-teh

Author's Response: I am fascinated by Thestrals! I would love a pet Thestral... Anyway yes, I can't imagine Tom has too many warm fuzzy feelings to draw from. Yet :p Thanks for commenting, cheers! :)

 
Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 05/19/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Hellooo there :)

This is such an intriguing beginning! I've encountered stories with Hermione travelling back in time to meet Tom Riddle before, but what really made your fic stand out was Riddle's characterisation. He's true to canon, and I can't emphasise enough how much I loved that part where he almost boredly pulls apart Grindelwald's methods and regime in the discussion with the other Slytherins. Also, I really appreciate that you've paid some attention to the world outside of Hogwarts - the rise and reign of Grindelwald, and of course, World War II. I do hope you'll continue to show how complex the world and what a critical and dangerous era this time period is in future chapters.

I found those mirrors really interesting; I suppose JKR never really said that they can't be used this way, so you do have freeway with them. But it's such a lovely idea, that the mirrors are able to communicate with others across time.

Anyway, I've really enjoyed this first chapter! It's a great start and I'll be keeping an eye out for updates (and I do hope you update soon)! Great work :)

-teh

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! I'm glad you approve of the trick with the mirrors. The trio's dynamic is such a powerful influence in Hermione's life and I often find it's missing in time travel fics where Hermione is isolated, so... The world war II era is a fascinating time frame, and although it won't figure too prominently I definitely will continue to sprinkle hints of the social/political scene throughout. I'm submitting the next chapter today (the first dozen are actually pre-written so no worries on steady updates for a while). Thanks again, and cheers! :)

 

The Peverell Prophecy by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: The Peverell brothers attempted to cheat Death.

Only one came close.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 105 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/13/13 Updated: 05/13/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 05/19/13 Title: Chapter 1: The Peverell Prophecy

Oh, this is a lovely poem! I'm not the best at reviewing poetry but this one had such a good rhyme scheme and rhythm. And I love the tale of the Peverell brothers :) This was done really beautifully, and in so few words as well! That last phrase (and he'll mark death as his own was brilliant. Great work; I enjoyed this a lot :)

-teh

Author's Response: Thank you so much fopr the review. I was starting to think this one had lost its way, and I was rather proud of writing something that rhymed - ha ha. Yes, the Peverells are fascinating, I love the story too. Thanks again ~Carole~

 

Love, Lily by dmbw7052
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: A collection of letters from Lily to Sirius

This was written when I saw it was Lily/Padfoot11333's birthday. I had the idea in my head for a while, and it seemed the perfect time to write it. Sorry it's so late.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1381 Chapters: 1 Completed: No
Published:
05/16/13 Updated: 05/18/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 05/18/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hi there :) This is a lovely start. I really like the letter format of this story. You really showed Lily and James' frustration and sense of entrapment from the letters. These feelings just intensify as the letters go on, and I think you did a great job showing that.

I really loved that bit where baby Harry has his say :D Did he somehow use his infant fists to write those words out or is Lily simply being a scribe and writing down whatever he's gurgling about? At any rate, it was a moment that really made me smile.

This is a great start; I hope to read more soon :)

-teh

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it teh! I actually wasn't planning on continueing it, and had just forgotten to click the little completed button. but you have inspired me to continue it. so i'll try to write some more. I imagined that Lily would be just writing whatever Harry said. It was quite fun to come up with all those nonsense words. my sisters had problems trying to figure out what i was saying, since they dictated it to me while i typed. Anyway, i'm glad you liked it!

 

The Final Duel by BrokenPromise
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: A sonnet on the Battle of Hogwarts.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 121 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/19/13 Updated: 05/21/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 05/24/13 Title: Chapter 1: Sonnet

Hi there :)

Ooh, a sonnet! I haven't read one of these in ages ☺ It's so interesting that you're framing that final scene, the climax of DH, perhaps That Moment in the whole series, that final battle between Harry and Voldie, in a sonnet. I definitely think it works wonderfully, and that you have an excellent grasp for the form. This final battle will probably be remembered by the wizarding world in song and poetry, and I'm imagining this sonnet as one of those ^.^ Sorry, am rambling a bit. But anyway, this is a really lovely piece of writing, and the imagery was certainly very striking! I love all the reds of the poem - the rising sun, the spells, possibly blood. I think the final couplet was brilliant. Great work! I really enjoyed this!

-teh ♫♫

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the compliments. I didn't actually realise how many reds I'd used in the poem, (whoops) but I'm glad you liked it. I think that that scene really works for the form because it's like a dramatic dance scene in many ways, and in many ways they are like the sonnets traditional lovers - as in they are the others counterpart, and they sort of share a soul. Really glad you enjoyed the poem, and thanks again for the great review!

 

The Interview by HalfASlug
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: 10th November, 1981. Severus Snape has been summoned to Hogwarts for the first time since the war. For everyone else the fighting has finished, but for him it must continue. He is about to learn the true meaning of 'anything' and who better to teach him than the Hogwarts Headmaster.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 6044 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/22/13 Updated: 05/22/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 05/24/13 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot

Oh my gosh :O

Do you have any idea how brilliant this is!? (you probably do; you wrote it ☺)

Your characterisations! Were utterly amazing. And so true to canon that I was weeping tears of joy and gratitude at both Dumbledore's cool and occasionally offbeat responses and Severus' biting curt retorts. No, honestly, you've pinned these two characters down perfectly. Dumbledore is a difficult character to get right, and you wrote him so effortlessly - the little quirks, the subtle changes in tone, the remarks that catch you offguard. He's a character shrouded in ambiguity - he's not completely pure and good, he has his ulterior motives and a way of making things happen according to his will...and the end where he basically blackmails Severus into a teaching position is absolutely brilliant. Sorry, I'm repeating myself. But honestly, the level and depth of understanding you have for JKR's characters is astounding.

And poor Severus lol. He never stood a chance against Dumbledore's wiles. I love the way you wrote Sev here - his melancholy and grief and self-loathing is present but is very understated; there's not a lot of angsting about, and because of this understatedness, you've somehow made him into a character that I can empathise with a great deal. The ending was just fabulous. When he realises that he truly belongs nowhere, and that he is his own man...and perhaps Dumbledore's man as well (coerced into this by Dumbledore :P - gods, I love that last line so much).

My attention never wavered once throughout this 6000+ word story. (My mind normally starts to drift after...say...3000 words) Honestly, your writing and your characterisation was just so riveting. Also, one thing that really worked were the little nuances in the dynamics of the conversations, the more serious, heavier moments and the lightly humorous and bitingly sarcastic parts were really well-balanced. Also, you parcel out information in small doses (e.g. the Mary Macdonald bit), which is really great, and maintains an excellent story pace.

Well, sorry if I'm being a bit incoherent here, but this is a really amazing story and I love it ♥♥

Great work, and I hope to read more from you soon!>br>
-teh

Author's Response: Haha, like most writers I've spoken to I'm utterly convinced that I'm average at best so thank you very much for the review! It made me ridiculously happy. These two are very hard to write for all he reasons you said here - so many different things are going on with them at any minute - and I assure you it wasn't effortless! It is nice to hear that all he stressing over what each of them would say or not say payed off though! Snape is one of my favourite characters so it was pretty difficult to stop him from becoming too nice and likable. All of his good points don't negate his flaws and he has plenty of them. I'm glad you liked the ending! Haha, I have no concentration either so I am truly flattered that you stayed with this beast of a one-shot. The little bits of humour had to happen - these two are hilarious, especially when together and having a serious conversation. It's kind of amazing how they were ever friends with so many one-liners flying around in canon. Anyway, thank you so much for this lovely review and I hope I don't disappoint in future stories :)

 

Summary: There's a reason that adults don't usually play hide and seek - especially when they are nothing more than overgrown children.

Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity, Substance Abuse

Word count: 6259 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/22/13 Updated: 07/24/13


Reviewer: teh tarik Signed
Date: 07/24/13 Title: Chapter 1: oneshot

Oh my holy sweet Merlin, I was laughing out loud to this. And I was in a pretty humourless mood all day after having been vomited on (sorry, info you didn't need to know) and then I clicked on this because it was new and it was you and now I'm sitting here guffawing like an idiot, and there are actual tears running down my face. Tears of laughter of course.

It goes without saying that your Weasley fluff stories (and other stories as well!!) are the BEST. Thank you so much for writing this. (Sorry, this is an unhelpful review).

teh

Author's Response: Thank you the lovely review! Really sorry to hear about the vomit though. I hope you're okay and, y'know, clean now. Needless to say that I am honoured to have been your choice of I've-been-puked-on-and-need-cheering-up entertainment and I hope your tomorrow is better. (Sorry for the vomit-centric response - I was sure what else to say other than thank you because your review rendered me a blushing mess so)

Author's Response: Thank you the lovely review! Really sorry to hear about the vomit though. I hope you're okay and, y'know, clean now. Needless to say that I am honoured to have been your choice of I've-been-puked-on-and-need-cheering-up entertainment and I hope your tomorrow is better. (Sorry for the vomit-centric response - I was sure what else to say other than thank you because your review rendered me a blushing mess so)

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