An aspriring writer from California, who is usually too busy studying at university to write. But sometimes she just throws everything down, picks up a pencil and holes herself up in the closet for two or three days, scribbling away.
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Take My Heart Away is a Tom Riddle/Hermione Granger time travel fic.
Fragmentary Blue is a one-shot focused on Harry, which takes place after the end of the second war.
A Certain Slant of Light is a chaptered fic about Regulus Black's stuggle to destroy a horcrux and redeem himself.
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Wow. What a scary, dark piece of writing. Not to say that it isn't well written. It's actually very well written... you're one of the few in that aspect.
Plot. Pretty good. I wonder who is in Grimmuald Place, who was screaming, and where the Protkey led to. Definitely off to a good start.
Characterization. You've got Dumbledore down really well. Snape seemed a little... jumpy? Panicky? but then again, who wouldn't panic when being attacked by a werewolf?
I liked the philisophical bit at the beginning. Really cool.
You should really continue, I like this a lot.
Would you mind taking a look at my story? It's called Take My Heart Away, and it's a Riddle/Hermione fic. I think you'd like it, kind of dark.
Here's the link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=26218&i=1
I can't wait until you post more. Keep writing! :D
Author's Response: I will, don't worry!!!!!!!!
I'm just finishing the second chapter, but I've ben spending more time on a New Battle at the moment - it'll be up soon though!
Thanks for the review ~Ermine the One~
Summary: In the beginning of the Christmas holidays, Sirius Black runs away from home and will not return for twenty years. A warning for mild language.
Once again, another brilliant story.
How do you do it? Your style is flawless. I swear, there's not even one WORD out of place. I mean, usually even the best writers make stylistic mistakes, but with you, one sentence just seems to flow into the next and I am never jarred out of the story by strange sentence structure or an out-of-place word.
Your characterization of Sirius is wonderful, like always, and it just makes all other Black-fics pale in comparison.
You are an extraordinarily talented writer with a distinctive style and basically I just love anything you write. ;D
So keep writing!
Summary: Regulus Black only lasted a week. (HBP spoilers, ahoy.)
Updated 22/01 with the revised, beta-read version. :)
What a great, astounding piece of writing. The best Regulus fic I've ever read... the images are haunting and beautiful and perfect.
Summary: CHAPTER 10 COMING SOON!!! - THANKS EVERYONE FOR THE COMMENTS! Rating: PG-13
Do you think it’s easy to run from your family?
When Sirius Black is ten years old, everything in his life is black and white. He is a wizard. He is the heir to his most noble house. He is eager to please and willing to be everything his parents have ever dreamt for him.
Then, at Hogwarts with the ability to explore the world differently he starts to question what he has been taught his whole life and finds that even though he is a brilliant wizard and studies and most things come easy to him there is still so much he needs to learn about life outside of Grimmauld Place.
Follow along with me as Sirius Black’s world starts Fading Into Grey.
Disclaimer: not mine etc.
This isn't finished, right? Please say there's more chapters cause its GREAT.
Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for reading & commenting! This story will be continued, yes! My chapter 5 is off to my beta and I\'m actually working on chapter 6 right now. *grins* I just took a break and checked this site and found your lovely message. Look for chapter 5 soon! Thanks for reading!
Summary: In the months following the end of the Second War, Hermione feels as if her world is shattered. Will the man who saved the world be able to save her as well? A rom-angsty look at a Post-Hogwarts Harry/Hermione.
Written for SomberBallad for the Secret SPEW challenge.
8/15 - I've responded to all reviews! Thank you all so much for your lovely words. They're much appreciated.
"But unlike colors or the lost ability to smile, it had been burned into my memory."
Wow, this is truly amazing, Haley. I never knew you were multi-talented. :)
"But unlike colors or the lost ability to smile, it had been burned into my memory."
Wow, this is truly amazing, Haley. I never knew you were multi-talented. :)
Summary: 'The next time he grieves, it will be with the remembered taste of lukewarm tea swirling with a sodden teabag, cheap tea and tears tasting like bitter dust; he will grieve with the scent and rustle of newspaper, paper and tea and violins for sadness.'
Remus after Hallowe'en 1981. For Avendya, for her birthday.
I loved the part about Sirius laughing because he didn't know how to cry; that's like his life in one sentence. Amazing.
Once again you've written a fic in which every line is so incredible and flawless that I felt the writing could go on forever, with a plot so good that I wanted it to.
He tore, bit, sucked, breathed, scratched at her as her flailing arms and legs won no victory.
She stood in silence for a while, knowing but not caring that he still stood behind her. She heard him mutter something and warmth surrounded her. A figment of imagination. An unreal cover.
Though she was warm, it didn’t reach her body, her mind, her soul. She was freezing.
A hand came to rest on her arm.
This time, she let him.
At that moment, Hell froze over.
Warning: Contains mention of rape. Nothing graphic.
2nd story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots (Check out my author page for more information)
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Writing is superb.
Harry is way OOC.
Draco is not.
Loved it except OOC Harry.
Author's Response: Thank you!
I know he is, but I chose Harry intentionally.
I\'m glad to hear it.
Summary: Runner-up for the QuickSilver Quills Award, categ. Best Alternate Universe
“No matter the time or place, people should never call their child Marie-Antoinette. There is no happiness in this world for a girl called Marie-Antoinette.”
1983. In a world where Voldemort has won the First War, where hope has fled from an Earth moaning under the Dark Lord's iron hand, marriages are broken and others are arranged in order to preserve the sacred purity of blood. James Potter loses his wife; now they have to find another for him.
Wow. I've really got to commend you on this story; you've come up with a fascinating concept and it's executed wonderfully. I'm really impressed with the restraint you've used with the plot, a slow build up that always leaves readers wanting more. This is the first fanfic that's held my interest for a while; usually I'm just too busy to read all the way through a story, but this one just sucked me in.
I discovered this through the QQ awards, and you definitely deserved runner-up(if not winner); this story deserves a lot more recognition than it currently has, congrats on your award!
Your writing style ranges from slightly inexperienced to nothing short of amazing, IMHO. You've got some real talent; the metaphors, the way you put together sentences, it's all way above average. A little more practice and I think you could be the best writer on here-- you're already outstanding! :D
It's all good, the plot and characterization and pacing and whatever, I'm hooked.
I'm dying to find out what happens next; rumour has it that this story is on hold? I hope that's not true; please keep going, you're amazing!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review; I\'m very proud that my fic was able to hold your interest, though it makes me all the more guiltier of not being able to update it for a while... Thank you for the congrats, too :). From what I\'ve understood, this fic very nearly won the award. Still, I\'m very happy with the runner-up position!
Your \"slightly inexperienced\" comment may be explained by the fact I\'m not writing in my native tongue... I\'ve been writing in English for a little less than a year, and I still need practice. I\'m glad you weren\'t discouraged by my occasional clumsiness.Thank you, again, for the long and detailed review.
Summary: They say no one is born being evil. Is Tom Riddle an exception? A one-shot about the night a boy lost his innocence; the night everything changed for everyone. A story about how a boy turned into man... HBP spoilers. Please review. I'm very, very sorry for the weird problem with the format. It is now fixed, but I'm sorry if you had to read it without any spaces D:
Wow, this is a great one-shot. First of all, I love young Tom Riddle, and I agree with you that he wasn't born evil.
You had some beautiful imagery and diction in this fic... the ocean seemed at once beautiful and terrifying. And the song went perfectly with it.
Good job... I hope someday I'll be able to write a one-shot half as good as this. :D
Author's Response: Hi Hatusu :) Thank you very much! I\'m glad that you enjoyed, given our little discussion of one-shot vs chaptered ;)
Ah, well, that idea hasn\'t really been worked as much as it deserves, in my opinion. But I\'m quite glad that you agree with me :)
The song is really what started all this. It gave me the inspiration, and you could also that the idea also. Ah, the ocean :) ... I wanted to transport the reader to that cliff, but more importantly, to make him imagine that sea.
Aw, thank you very, very much for those very kind words :) ! I know you will, it\'s only about getting the right inspiration :)
Summary: Everyone has a past, and everyone's future depends on the choices we made in our past. But one boy has never been able to make his own choices. The choices he made were always in fear of others. In one night, he remembers and realizes.
This is a look behind the grey eyes of Draco Malfoy. It's a look into the memories and thoughts of the son of a Death Eater. It's the realization and the vented anger that may or may not change anything when the morning dawns.
Wow, this was excellent.
You really find a way to evoke a strong sense of time and place in your writing, and it draws readers in. The description was suberb.
"You don’t question the people that are supposed to love you and have supposedly done everything in the world for you. They don’t mess up, they don’t make mistakes. They’re faultless, and anything they’re blamed for is someone else’s fault. They’re not evil, everyone else is just a goody-goody."
I really like those lines, because they are so insightful and so true... they really sum up the way a child feels about his parents.
Keep writing, this was a pleasure to read. :D
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Oooh this is really interesting! I like it a lot, and it's very original and well-written. Please write more, I can't wait to see how young-Harry and old-Harry will deal with each other!
Author's Response: Thanks! More coming soon.
The things they carried were not always visible, or tangible. They were not always pocket-sized reminders or magical objects or wands or potions. They were not always spoken of.
But they were always there.
Ooh, very nice, I loved this piece, especially the bit about Neville and the bubblegum wrapper.
This is brilliant, but I think it would be wise to mention in your author's note that this was based off of the equally brilliant novel The Things They Carried, by Tim O'Brien. Because otherwise it would seem as if you were taking credit for an idea that wasn't originally yours. :)
Keep writing, you are amazing!
Summary: Summary: What happened on that fateful night at Godric's Hollow and the (still!) unknown events that followed in the next twenty four hours, before Harry's arrival on Privet Drive? What motivated the actions and decisions that were made in the years leading up to the defeat of Voldemort? The truth is neither black or white - only complicated shades of grey. Behind the stories of Lily Evans, Severus Snape and Peter Pettigrew we learn that we are all vulnerable to evil.
(written between HBP and DH - story is complete)
Hello there -- interesting story you've got here! I really like the way you've organized it, into different sections for different people; I think it gives the flow a nice continuity. I saw some typos and grammatical mistakes, but that's no big deal. If you don't already have a beta, getting one would probably help you out a lot. :)
Seems you have a good handle on everyone's character, especially Peter's, as he seems to want to spy both out of fear and a tiny little bit of pride/ambition. Good start, and I wonder what's in the vial Dumbledore gave to his brother?
I'm going to keep reading this; you keep writing, great job! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m so glad you have found your way here. Yes.. those pesky typos, etc. They have been looked over, but some seem to creep back in there. How do they do that? ;)
What if you always knew the answers – the results of your decisions before making them? Then you could answer this:
Does everything happen for a reason?
Can love replace what is lost?
Can a promise be kept forever?
Would you cross your heart?
Thousands of thanks to my AMAZING beta and friend, Maddy (Hatusu)!! Her fic, Take My Heart Away, is simply the best piece of fanfiction I've ever been lucky enough to read. You're honestly missing out if you haven't read it yet.
Wow... this fic is even better than I remember it being. It's all very well-written and the Ron/Hermione part is SUPER SWEET, not too cheesy or heavy and perfectly believeable. I'd say that's your greatest strength; you're really down-to-earth in writing, and you never write something silly or over-the-top. You've got great judgement.
Keep writing girly, I'll talk to you soon!
Author's Response: Thanks Maddy! *hugs* You were a great beta. Seriously, you were amazing. I was hoping I didn\'t get too cheesy, because that drives me crazy, so thanks for helping me out!!
Summary: The war is over and the wizarding world is healing after the fall of the Dark Lord. But for some, the pain is not yet over.
Guilt is inescapable after the loss of a good friend or close family member. Denial is just as bad but only one thing is worse; acceptance. With acceptance comes relief, but also pain as realisation dawns that that person is gone for ever, never coming back. Never will they speak to you, fight with you, or comfort you. And for some, acceptance is just another stage of denial.
Hey there :)
Great story; I really enjoyed the finished product. You deal with a difficult subject in a really sensitive and realistic way. The last line is my favorite, of course... just perfect.
Keep writing! :D
Author's Response: Hi Hatusu, thanks very much for reviewing. Unfortunately I can\'t take all the credit for this wonderful story *bows to brilliant beta* Thanks!!!
Summary: The last eight days of Regulus Black's life. Dark, psychological, featuring extensive wordplay and a vague creation-story allegory that may or may not grant redemption.
(Somewhere in the back of his mind, he whispers that his brother would be proud of him.)
Wow. This was justjust amazing. I am totally speechless. The realism coupled with the religious metaphor works so well; your descriptions are penetrating and powerful and true, especially how you described dying as not being a step-by-step process, but something messy and unpredictable.I wonder if the reactions Regulus had on each day correlated to something else, like events in Genesis or the seven stages of grief? I don't know much about either.
My favorite quote:
On the seventh day, he closes his eyes like the dutiful son returning home, like the prodigal lost boy coming back from Never Never Land, like Peter Pan all grown up.
So sad and pretty. I really love this one-shot; it's one of the deepest examinations of Regulus's mind I've ever seen, and so well written. You're truly brilliant; please keep writing.
Summary: Each moment is a decision, defined by the circumstances. Who knows? Had it not been for an overprotective cousin, perhaps Rose Weasley and Scorpius Malfoy could have been the best of friends. Perhaps in one point in time and space, they are. As it happens, their relationship was defined by one catalytic factor, James Potter, and now,they are sworn enemies.
This story is a chronicle of their first year at Hogwarts, and their last. It is a tale of happenstance and familial influence, of an enmity that was not theirs to decide. Read and find out how such an enmity can influence the lives of two innocent children and wreck them. Will the injury last forever?
Due to my heavy work-schedule, this fic will be on hold till early June. My apologies to all.
Manu! 20 reviews for only the first chapter?! You're amazing, everyone loves it already. ;D I've never read a Rose/Scorpius fic before and I don't think there are many on here yet, so you'll be the first! I'm dying to find out what happens next. Your Rose and Scorpio remind me very much of Romeo and Juliet, even more than Ginny/Draco. I'm so proud to have helped you out with this fic, my dear; it's going to be huge. :D
Author's Response: Maddy!!! Thank ya! *huggles tightly* I\'m proud to have had YOUR help, my dear! *beams*
Summary: Regulus has been given task that is by no means impossible. Over the course of a night, he attempts to kill his brother.
I am Stubbornly_appeared of Gryffindor, flying solo on this Gauntlet, Round Six.
This is really, really good. I actually sort of love it. I think you've portrayed both brothers with great finesse. I've read few gauntlets that are so clear and cohesive. Congratulations on writing something so amazing; I think I'll go read more of your stories now. ;D
Author's Response: Awww... thank you. I'm very, very honoured that you think so highly of my fic. One of my favourite things to do is get into the heads of characters and I tried really hard to get a sharp contrast here between Regulus and Sirius, but still tie them together as young men fighting in the same war. Thanks again for reading and leaving such a wonderful review.